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05 November 2005 @ 10:46 pm
{ Fanfic "B-Low" }  
Fanfic: "B-Low"
Author: ninnui
Characters: John Sheppard, Elizabeth Weir, Carson Beckett
Spoilers: none
Language: English
Rating: PG-13 to R (to be on the safe side)
Category: humour, romance, adult, pwp
Disclaimer: All the characters of SGA are not mine.
Thanks to: scap3goat for the quick beta-reading. ^^
Short cut: Surprised, Elizabeth Weir looked up, only to find John’s eyes drifting nervously across the table. His hands where clasped together so tightly that the knuckles shone white. Sweat was forming on John’s forehead and his flushed cheeks.
Dedication: For my wife and my child.




B-Low


Elizabeth passed the mess hall, not looking up. She was studying the report of Colonel Sheppard’s latest mission, and the further she read the more questions sprung up.

Mentally noting them she walked up to Colonel Sheppard’s office and chimed on the door. Nothing happened.

Strange, Elizabeth thought. They had arranged the meeting because she had asked for it, and so she expected John to be there. Elizabeth chimed again.

Finally the door opened.

Elizabeth caught sight of John Sheppard sitting behind his desk. He seemed to be very concentrated. His hands were clasped and his eyes were fixed on a spot on the desk before him.

Entering, Elizabeth looked out for the object of this concentration; papers, a report maybe. The desk was almost empty. The only thing that looked like reading material was a small stack of papers on the left side of the desk. But that definitely was not the reason of the Colonel’s fixation.

“Hello, John.” The colonel seemed to snap out of a daydream and finally met Elizabeth’s eyes. She frowned. His eyes looked ... strange. She couldn’t quite put a finger on it, but something was bothering John Sheppard.

He focused on her and drew a deep breath before speaking up with clear emphasis: “Please take a seat.”

Slightly puzzled, Elizabeth nodded, sat down accross the colonel and prepared for the talk.

“So...,” she began and shuffled through the papers, searching for the first strange passage to begin with.

“You know, Elizabeth,” John hoarsely said, “maybe we could delay this to a later meeting.”

Surprised, Elizabeth Weir looked up, only to find John’s eyes drifting nervously across the table. His hands where clasped together so tightly that the knuckles shone white. Sweat was forming on John’s forehead and his flushed cheeks.

Elizabeth was certain: Something was terribly wrong with the colonel! He needed to see the doctor immediately!

“John-“ she began, only to be interrupted by a strangled gasp that escaped the colonel’s lips. Elizabeth’s eyes grew wide with alarm. The papers forgotten she reached over the table, trying to feel his temperature.

With a sudden movement John bolted backwards, avoiding her hand and crying out loudly as if in pain.

She looked at him helplessly.

“God, John”, she whispered. She watched his flushed face. His eyes tightly shut, John tried hard to catch his ragged breath.

“I will call for medical attendance”, she informed him and reached for the comm device.

“No!” His voice was unsteady, but loud enough to startle her.

“No.” He repeated, this time more steady and a little bit softer. “I have no need for a..” He gulped, than looked her straight into the eye. “A doctor.”

She hesitated. He looked better already, she thought. His eyes where now steadily fixed on her and his breath had almost normalized.

Elizabeth nodded.

“Fine”, she said, nodding slowly. Considering the report on the desk before her she picked it up and meant. “We will continue this tomorrow, ok?”

With this words she turned towards the door. Before opening it she addressed John once more.

“Take some time for yourself, John.”

Smiling she left, letting the door quitly slip into place behind her.

******


John Sheppard leaned heavily back into his chair.

The small smile playing on his lips grew into a wide grin.

“Satisfied?” The whispered question sounded amused.

John looked down at the man kneeling between his legs, still half-hidden under the desk. Still smiling, John pulled him up into a searing kiss. He still could taste himself on the other man’s lips.

Panting heavily John ended the kiss. He put his forehead against the forehead of his lover and grinning closed his eyes.

“You cannot even begin to understand what you do to me every time you kiss me. Or can you?”

The other man smiled a genuine smile, then slowly stood up and went for the door. Before leaving he turned and gave his soft answer.

“Aye.”



fin
 
 
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The piper never dies.: aww hasissorgenmond on November 5th, 2005 10:09 pm (UTC)
wheeeee
you rock my world! ^____^
ist das mal geil oder ist das mal geil? wheee! *fangirl*
aber du hast im titel noch gefallen stehen.. überall ^^"" (jetzt steht das 6 mal auf meiner f-list *geil*)
und im letzten satz muss es "then" heißen ^^
klasse! *liebhat*
ich sehe tschon da richtig sitzen. also, so halb konzentriert, halb am ausbrechen und elizabeth schon ganz krank vor sorge "ich geh carson holen!" dabei ist carson ja schon ganz bei der sache XD
I'm Jack Sparrow's jar of dirt. [Don't touch me!]: i am mineninnui on November 5th, 2005 10:27 pm (UTC)
Dankedankedanke!! *knutsch*

Ich hab das jetz mal verbessert. Du kennst ja meine Trantütigkeit, nichts überraschendes! XD

ROFL Der Arzt kommt! Er is fast da! Fast isser da.. gleich, jeden Moment! ^^
The piper never dies.: I'm not crazysorgenmond on November 5th, 2005 11:53 pm (UTC)
ROFL Der Arzt kommt! Er is fast da! Fast isser da.. gleich, jeden Moment! ^^
*kommen* muss er ja noch XD
(no subject) - scap3goat on November 6th, 2005 12:27 am (UTC) (Expand)
(no subject) - ninnui on November 6th, 2005 11:33 am (UTC) (Expand)
(no subject) - ninnui on November 6th, 2005 11:31 am (UTC) (Expand)
(no subject) - sorgenmond on November 6th, 2005 11:44 am (UTC) (Expand)
(no subject) - ninnui on November 6th, 2005 01:14 pm (UTC) (Expand)
(no subject) - scap3goat on November 6th, 2005 09:02 pm (UTC) (Expand)
the oncoming whirlwind: sga: beckshep - takemescap3goat on November 5th, 2005 11:45 pm (UTC)
Du weißt, ich liebe es! *wheee*
*seufz*
I'm Jack Sparrow's jar of dirt. [Don't touch me!]: omg yay!ninnui on November 6th, 2005 11:08 am (UTC)
Dankedankedanke! *flauschnudel*
Kat: on topukumai on November 6th, 2005 12:31 am (UTC)
*loooooool* Da hat Elizabeth wohl geschlafen, als sie 'Heartbreakers' angeguckt haben *lalalala*

Hehe, ich liebe die FF *whee* Lustig und trotzdem so leicht angehaucht *mag*
I'm Jack Sparrow's jar of dirt. [Don't touch me!]: wootninnui on November 6th, 2005 11:06 am (UTC)
ROFL Heartbreakers ist'n toller Film! Sigourney Weaver und Jennifer Love Hewitt - wär hätts gedacht, aber die spielen genial gut zusammen!

Danke schön! ^^ Scheint mir, ich muss auch den Arzt noch irgendwie kommen lassen ;)
Nicole: Ed Norton 1lucius_admirer on November 6th, 2005 04:42 pm (UTC)
wheeee die war toll ♥ Auch wenn ich zurzeit überhaupt nichts mit SGA anfangen kann ^^ Wheeee, aber BeckShep :D Und Elizabeth... *rofl*
I'm Jack Sparrow's jar of dirt. [Don't touch me!]: wheeninnui on November 6th, 2005 04:46 pm (UTC)
Yay! Danke schön! *knutsch*

Schönes Icon!! EN is auch ganz süß ;)
(no subject) - lucius_admirer on November 6th, 2005 04:58 pm (UTC) (Expand)
Tonia Barone: Joe--Mellowtoniabarone on November 7th, 2005 02:21 am (UTC)
*ROTFLMAO* I knew as soon as John continued to stare ahead when Liz entered what was goin' on. *LOL* Dear lords! And no wonder he didn't want the doc called--he was already there! *snerk*
I'm Jack Sparrow's jar of dirt. [Don't touch me!]: huh?ninnui on November 7th, 2005 12:21 pm (UTC)
*lol* So I guess you liked it then? ^^

Tschon is a lusty boy. I bet he always has someone at the ready if need be. The hair doesn't mess up by itself, you know ;) ?
follicks on November 7th, 2005 04:52 am (UTC)
Der Arzt kommt! *snicker*
Das war sehr gut - danke! Ich habe immer geglaubt, dass John ein ganzer Exhibitionist ist - ich hoffe aber, dass Carsons Knie ihm Weh nicht tun! Ich mag sehr John/Carson, und die Überraschung im letzten Satz ("Aye!") war besonders gut!

Ich habe zwei kleine Vorschläge für dich (hoffentlich sind sie nützlich):

1) Es ist vielleicht besser zu "so" benutzen (nicht "therefore") in "They had arranged the meeting because she had asked for it, [and] THEREFORE she expected John to be there. Elizabeth chimed again." Ich habe hier "therefore" ein bisschen zu steif gefunden. Dann ist "and" auch nicht nötig - "...because she had asked for it, so she expected John to be there."

2) Hier "The only thing that looked like reading material was a small stack of papers on the left side of the desk. But that definitely was not the REASON OF the Colonel’s fixation" kann man "reason FOR" oder "OBJECT of" oder "reason BEHIND" sagen, aber nicht "reason of". Ich glaube, dass du "object of" willst (aber es könnte auch "reason behind" sein).

Hoffentlich helfen dir diese Vorschläge, und ich danke dir wieder für eine sehr erfreuliche Geschichte!

Jen

(Enschudigung, wenn mein Deutsch schlecht ist - ich bin Kanadierin.)
I'm Jack Sparrow's jar of dirt. [Don't touch me!]: ooohninnui on November 7th, 2005 12:24 pm (UTC)
Re: Der Arzt kommt! *snicker*
Your German isn't that bad. Maybe it equals my English.. a little mistake here, a little mistake there, overall understandable :) Thanks for the advices - only this way I can learn. I will make the corrections immediately.
tagetestagetes on November 7th, 2005 02:11 pm (UTC)
Sweat was forming on John’s forehead and his flushed cheeks.

Gleich als ich den Satz gelesen habe, wußte ich, worum's geht.. Hee :-) Es was Spass, danke!
I'm Jack Sparrow's jar of dirt. [Don't touch me!]: ouchninnui on November 8th, 2005 11:24 am (UTC)
*lol* Ich hab das Gefühl, ich entwickle mich zu Captain Obvious... Weia! Das meine schmutzigen Gedanken aber auch schon so früh zu erkennen sind.. ^^
(no subject) - tagetes on November 8th, 2005 11:37 am (UTC) (Expand)
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sydian: the island - whee! (white) {me}sydian on January 5th, 2006 06:21 pm (UTC)
*kicher* Die Story ist genial, Süße!! Ich bin ja eigentlich jetzt nicht so der McBeck-Fan, aber B-Low könnte mich glatt vom Gegenteil überzeugen. Freu mich schon sehr auf den zweiten Teil. Weil, dann kommt ja der Arzt. :D
I'm Jack Sparrow's jar of dirt. [Don't touch me!]: shepbeckninnui on January 5th, 2006 06:27 pm (UTC)
ehm... danke schön ^^ Is aber BeckShep *räusper* Die beiden sind Slash-OTP! Jap. Und McBeckShep sind OT3, jawoll.

Der zweite Teil ist in Produktion :D
(no subject) - sydian on January 6th, 2006 01:15 pm (UTC) (Expand)