erushi ([info]erushi) wrote in [info]the_safehouse,
@ 2008-08-09 12:06:00
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Fic: Six Kisses
My first Pros fic written on something of a whim, so do forgive me if any part comes across strange. I'd love to know what you lovely people think about it!


Title: Six Kisses
Author: Erushi
Format: Short story. (1,135 words)
Circuit Archive / Pros-Lib: Yes, please.
Slash/Gen: Slash.
Summary: Six kisses shared between the lads as their relationship progresses.
Disclaimer: This is an amateur work written purely for entertainment. No profit is gained from it, nor is any infringement of copyright intended. The poetry used was written by Robert Herrick.


Give me a kisse, and to that kisse a score;


It was meant to be something of a joke, truth be told. Just a little trifle sparked by Cowley’s A-squad as they downed their pints and took the piss out of their resident golly, no different from their usual pranking. Doyle had looked so cute, all embarrassment and fluster and blushes, that when the both of them had finally returned to his flat, Bodie had wanted to see if there was anything he could do to make his partner turn even redder.

A clumsy bump of lips meeting proves more than enough. But it is a followed by another, and another, and there comes yet another too. Heads bang against walls with enough force to hurt – but they don’t, because bruising kisses and ferocious clickings of teeth on teeth are all each can focus on, mischievous glints in the eye and nervous laughter setting an erratic rhythm to the hesitant moving of curious hands over awkward bodies.

After all, the ex-mercenary reflects laconically, why settle for "enough" when one can get "more"?

=-=-=

Then to that twenty, adde a hundred more;


It is the kisses Bodie likes best. The stolen pecks on the cheek as they scurry about the corridors of their headquarters on Cowley’s business, the spontaneous smacks on the lips as they bounce about dingy warehouses glowing with the satisfaction of having successfully completed yet another op, the deep osculations that punctuate their semi-drunken conversations as commas and full-stops do written dialogues.

Or so Bodie keeps thinking until he finds his fingers intertwined with Doyle’s and he is being pushed down onto the bed by the other man with an urgency that matches his own. They kiss, and this time it is hungry, ravenous, refusing to be appeased. Doyle’s body stretches out fully on top of his and all Bodie can think are hefeelsittoo and ohyesplease.

Doyle kisses him again, able fingers busy at areas that send him flushing and gasping, and Bodie decides that thinking is rather overrated. Besides, he suspects he has found something even better than the kisses.

=-=-=

A thousand to that hundred; so kisse on,


Doyle firmly believes that weekend mornings are best for sleeping in. He curls up on sun-warmed sheets, basks in honey-gold streams of light filtered by the venetian blinds.

Bodie usually wakes him with a shower of kisses, noses bumping in affectionate greeting as eyelids struggle open sluggishly, lips and tongue tracing a path along soft skin that hints of sleep and sun.

Doyle likes the way Bodie tastes in the morning, minty toothpaste mixing with milky tea. His nose twitches just a little at the light smell of aftershave, and his palm revels in the slightly stubbly just-shaved feel of the other’s jaw. He feels strangely happy as the other man allows him this exploration, leaning a little into his hand before slowly turning to press a kiss on each of the wandering digits that are trailing his face.

“Hungry?” Bodie asks, and is rewarded by a dazzling smile.

=-=-=

To make that thousand up a million;


Somehow, their days off have fallen into a pattern. They sit side by side on the colourful rug that covers the floor of Doyle’s living-room, eyes glued to luridly-coloured moving figures on flickering glass-crystal screens as strong fingers curl around chilled beer cans. Loud whoops and curses fill the air as they allow themselves to get carried away in the football-stimulated rushes of adrenaline, locked in the thrill of the chase.

Similar whoops echo off the walls as they wrestle on the very same rug after the game ends, each fighting the other for dominance. The strength and urgency of their moves mimic the players’ on the pitch, and they struggle with the same queer mix of fierce joy and desperation. Winner takes all; or at the very least, a kiss.

“Have I told you before that I love you, Bodie?”

Bodie’s voice is slightly muffled, and Doyle suspects that the dark-haired man is covering his mouth in a bid to remain as silent as possible. The thought makes him smile, and he craftily nibbles his way to a certain spot behind the other’s ear. He finds it and begins sucking gently, feeling fingers dig into his shoulder hard enough to draw blood. The pain brings an involuntary grin to his face.

“Yes you have, but it always bears repeating.”

Still grinning, Doyle bends forward to capture another kiss.

=-=-=

Treble that million, and when that is done,


“We really shouldn’t be doing this,” Doyle tries to say, but it is hard to do so with Bodie whispering “it’s alright, it’ll be alright” into his mouth and all he can do is gasp and push his head back to grant – I can’t believe we’re doing this here – his blue-eyed lover better access to his neck and jaw. And then he doesn’t really worry anymore because Bodie’s mouth is so warm and hot and his fingers are fiddling with his buttons and undoing the buckle of his belt and – oh god – dipping beneath the waistband of his trousers and pulling out fistfuls of shirt that had been hastily tucked in mere hours before for the meeting with their controller.

Their tongues spar, slick and warm, precise from hours of practice. A brush against the teeth here, a languid lick of the top of the cavern there, and they are both panting and growling and making little keening noises of – fuck, but I want this, I really do – desire from the back of their throats, hips and groins grinding against each other’s for that sweet, desperate friction that despite the layers of cloth between them still feels so sinfully good –

Their RTs beep, and Doyle swears, breaking of the kiss as he fumbles for the bulky apparatus in his pocket. Cowley, probably, meaning to ask them how the surveillance job was progressing even though Anson, whom they had left by the window with a pair of binoculars and his cigars, would have been a better candidate to question. Strong fingers grab his wrist, resolutely pulling his hand away from his pocket, RT-less.

“Ignore it, Ray,” murmurs Bodie into his ear, and Doyle almost swoons, glancing up at the taller man from heavy lidded eyes. But since swooning is something not particularly manly to do, he settles instead for gripping with nerveless fingers the cool marble of the sink behind him, torso arching backwards and pelvis thrusting forward as they kiss again.

Ignoring his RT, Doyle finds, has never been so easy.

=-=-=

Let's kisse afresh, as when we first begun.


“You’re too far. Come closer.”

“How close is close? This?”

“Closer.”

“This too close?”

“A little more.”

“Better?”

“Mm.”

“Aahh.”

And suddenly, words just weren’t necessary anymore.


END




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[info]hagsrus
2008-08-09 05:36 am UTC (link)
Hi:

When you've a moment would you send me a copy as a txt or doc attachment, please, and let me know any contact information you'd like included.

Always delighted to welcome a new writer!

Frances for Proslib
proslib @ gmail.com

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[info]erushi
2008-08-09 09:09 am UTC (link)
Thanks for the welcome. Am e-mailing you now even as I type this.

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[info]miwahni
2008-08-09 08:28 am UTC (link)
That is delightful! I love the way the momentum builds throughout. Thanks for sharing!

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[info]erushi
2008-08-09 09:08 am UTC (link)
Thanks for reading and liking! Now excuse me while I stare at that delicious icon of yours. *g*

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[info]byslantedlight
2008-08-09 08:48 am UTC (link)
I've woken up to B/D kisses - perfect! I love the build up from the joking start, and the way it's so natural for them to be together throughout... and you've concentrated on the best bits of their relationship, of course! *g* *sighs happily* Thank you!

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[info]erushi
2008-08-09 09:06 am UTC (link)
And thanks for reading and commenting! I'm especially glad, since I've loved all your fics. I've always that a certain degree of 'playful-ness' is inherent in the B/D dynamic, and I did my best to bring it out.

P.S. And thanks for the Brit-pick! It has been edited. I guess that's the problem with coming from an ex-British colony - 95% of the time your English's British, but there'll always be that sneaky 5% of American you don't quite realise.

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[info]byslantedlight
2008-08-09 10:07 am UTC (link)
Aw - thank you! *g* They are playful at heart, aren't they?! And I forgot to say that I loved the poem you chose as well - I actually don't know Robert Herrick (except for Gather ye rosebuds...!) so I shall go and find his poetry now, thanks to you!

I'm originally from a colony too, so I know exactly what you mean! *g*

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[info]schnuffi
2008-08-09 10:28 am UTC (link)
Ha, what a wonderful thing to wake up too (yeah, I tend to get up veeery late at weekends). So good to see how their relationship grows and they both more and more become part of the other. Not to talk about hard, blokey sex *happy sigh* I always loved that competition between them in everything they do *G* Keep on writing and thanks for posting!

Edited at 2008-08-09 10:29 am UTC

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[info]erushi
2008-08-10 07:25 am UTC (link)
*g* It's always lovely waking up to the lads, no? You should see me when there's a nice bit of B/D on LJ in the mornings.

I'm glad you liked it, especially since you highlighted what I love about the B/D dynamic throughout the series and wanted to bring out in this fic. Thank you so much for reading!

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[info]shooting2kill
2008-08-09 12:13 pm UTC (link)
I thought this was a charming and attractive piece of writing - I loved it and I just wish it had been longer! Thanks so much for writing it.

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[info]erushi
2008-08-10 07:11 am UTC (link)
And thanks for reading and enjoying it. :) I'm glad you liked it, especially since I was rather worried that the writing style might not have go down well with the readers.

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[info]shooting2kill
2008-08-10 10:16 am UTC (link)
The style was one of the things I really loved about it - I found it different, original and you carried it off really well.

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[info]rochvelleth
2008-08-09 01:28 pm UTC (link)
This is lovely - very well done indeed :) I love fics that show the tender side of their relationship *sigh*

My favourite bit was:

“Hungry?” Bodie asks, and is rewarded by a dazzling smile.

because I can just picture it so perfectly...

Thanks!

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[info]erushi
2008-08-10 07:09 am UTC (link)
I've always felt that their relationship was this interesting mix of tenderness and male bravado, and I did my best to bring it across. I'm glad you liked it.

And yes, Ray's dazzling smile! Lucky Bodie, to be its recipient many a time.

Thanks for reading!

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[info]heliophile_oxon
2008-08-09 03:58 pm UTC (link)
I thought this was lovely, and I especially liked the second part .... something sizzling there! Thank you for the treat!

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[info]erushi
2008-08-10 07:07 am UTC (link)
*g* I am rather fond of the second part myself. Thanks for reading! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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[info]norfolkdumpling
2008-08-09 04:48 pm UTC (link)
This is great - I really enjoyed it. I love the dynamic between them, and the lovely comfortable and caring feel to it. Thank you!

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[info]erushi
2008-08-10 07:06 am UTC (link)
Thanks for reading! That was one of the aspects of their relationship dynamic that I was hoping to bring across, so I'm glad you enjoyed it. *g*

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[info]probodie
2008-08-09 08:07 pm UTC (link)
Aww this has cheered me up no end. Gorgeous little ficlets; I love the boys kissing.

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[info]erushi
2008-08-10 07:00 am UTC (link)
The lads kissing always brings a sort of silly grin to my face. It's just so joy-inducing, like hot chocolate spiked with rum (or single malt whiskey, seeing that it's the lads we're talking about) on winter nights. Thanks for reading.

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[info]sc_fossil
2008-08-09 11:11 pm UTC (link)
Nothing like a lot of kissing to make a gal happy. Very sweet and fun story. Thanks.

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[info]erushi
2008-08-10 06:59 am UTC (link)
The lads kissing always brings a silly smile to my face. Thanks for reading.

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[info]saintvic
2008-08-10 09:00 pm UTC (link)
Sweet, lovely, and a nice way to show the progression in their relationship. There is a sense of heat and contentment in this that is wonderful.

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[info]erushi
2008-08-11 02:48 pm UTC (link)
Thanks for reading and for your lovely comment! I really appreciate it.

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[info]callistosh65
2008-08-14 02:54 pm UTC (link)
What a lovely idea for a fic - and I loved the poem you tied each part together with. A nice sense of something building, this is thoroughly enjoyable and has left me with a big smile on my face, thank you!

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[info]erushi
2008-08-15 02:29 pm UTC (link)
And thank you for reading and for your lovely comment! I was actually rather nervous about posting this, fearing that the style and the deliberate attempt to build things up would come across as overly pretentious. I'm glad you liked it.

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Still playing catch up from my holiday at home...
[info]draycevixen
2008-08-23 05:18 am UTC (link)

I never would have guessed that this is a first fic as it is so skillfully done. I'm not normally a huge fan of Herrick *g* but I really like the way you use his work here as you have a very poetic turn of phrase, even when talking about venetian blinds! *g*

Thank you for sharing and I hope you'll write more. :D

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Re: Still playing catch up from my holiday at home...
[info]erushi
2008-08-26 05:44 pm UTC (link)
Thank you very much for reading, and for your very lovely comment! I think you've just made me blush.

I hope I'd be able to write more too. I love the lads, and I love reading the lads, but writing the lads seems to disagree with me somewhat. *waves a pointy stick at her very uncooperative DiaLJ fic-that-isn't-even-written*

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Re: Still playing catch up from my holiday at home...
[info]draycevixen
2008-08-26 05:51 pm UTC (link)

You still have four days -- ack, four days! -- perhaps drabbling might be your salvation? Mine has turned angsty on me, so it might never get finished.

I understand, there are lots of things I love that I can't write for -- I only write in two fandoms -- but you might get inspired again as the lads are very inspirational. :D

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Re: Still playing catch up from my holiday at home...
[info]erushi
2008-08-26 06:21 pm UTC (link)
Too inspirational, I should say. I have too many vague ideas - nothing concrete enough for me to properly build upon unless I wish to write a soppy epic. Bah.

Studying the bits of ideas I've scribbled down, mine looks to have turned angsty on me too... and accquired a poetical bent of sorts. D: Then there's the constant worry that I don't have the lads sounding like their lovely usual selves... Well. It's back to the grind for me!

I hope yours gets finished, though. I've loved all your works so far. Including the most recent one of Bodie in a cage - delicious imagery, that; I'm sorry I've yet to find time to comment!

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Re: Still playing catch up from my holiday at home...
[info]draycevixen
2008-08-27 03:59 am UTC (link)

That's very nice of you, thanks! *g* I'm such a newb in Pros land (I write for LoM) and so far I've really played to the goofy more than anything, except perhaps my stories for the last DIALJ challenge -- I guest hosted it, so I really had to play.

Tomorrow I'll start hosting a new short fic challenge at the_safehouse. Perhaps some of the prompts might get the creative juices flowing. *g*

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