vain_glorious ([info]vain_glorious) wrote in [info]sga_flashfic,
@ 2008-08-03 01:34:00
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Where the Ways Divide by Vain_Glorious [role-reversal challenge]
Title: Where the Ways Divide
Author: [info]vain_glorious 
Fandom: Stargate: Atlantis
Summary: "They find the Runner on the planet with the deadly sun. He's thin and dirty, and not particularly interested in talking.
Rating: PG-13, gen
Word Count: 971
Disclaimer: Not Mine

They find the Runner on the planet with the deadly sun. He’s thin and dirty, and not particularly interested in talking.

For some reason, he thinks the squad is after him. More likely, the guards left at the Ring are in his way. The sun might have fried his thinking or maybe he hasn’t been around people in so long he’s forgotten how to speak. Either way, he makes a really dumb decision and tries to take them on.

He has a big gun, with ammunition that cracks in the ears and splinters the trees. It’ll break a body just as easily, but the Runner is almost tentative in his aim. He doesn’t go for the kill. Conserving ammo or conserving life. It’s hard to tell. All the same, he manages to take Ara and Rakai hostage. Morons. They were probably too busy kissing to be alert.

It doesn’t last long. Ronon easily sneaks up behind him, unseen, and knocks him unconscious with a single blow to the head. Rakai says to kill him, maybe so Ara will forget he was stupid enough to let the man capture them in the first place.  

But Ronon outranks him and won’t kill the guy solely for Rakai’s ego. He gives them back their weapons, sends them to reunite with the rest of the unit hunting Wraith-mad Tyre.

In the meantime, as he’s binding the man’s arms behind him, Ronon finds the scar tissue on the back of his neck. He knows the story before the Runner wakes and starts screaming to be released.

It comes out of his mouth before he’s even fully awake. “The Wraith are coming for me,” he spits, twisting in his bonds. “You have to let me go! They’ll kill everyone here.”

He’s not visibly afraid of Ronon, sitting across from him in the cavern. Mostly, he looks mad that Ronon’s got his weapon rested on his knees.

“Give me my gun back,” the Runner orders, as if he’s not the one tied up.

Ronon has figured out the firing mechanism, and he smoothly racks it just to prove that. The Runner kind of flinches in place, maybe surprised.

“Who are you?” Ronon asks.

“Lieutenant Colonel John Sheppard,” the Runner says, eyes still glued to his gun.

“Military?” asks Ronon. The title sounds like it, but it’s also unfamiliar.

“I was,” Sheppard says, without elaboration. “You have to let me go. Give me that back and let me off this planet.”

“Because the Wraith are chasing you?” Ronon asks.

Sheppard looks a little surprised that he doesn’t have to tell the story. “Yeah,” he says, and jerks again in his bonds.

“I called one of our doctors,” Ronon tells him. “They can cut it out.”

For a second, Sheppard just stares. “Who are you?” he asks.

“Specialist Ronon Dex.”

“It’s in my spine,” Sheppard says, as if that’s not the right answer.

Ronon nods. It usually is. Lots of Runners die because they get dumbass shamans and healers messing around in there. Other Runners die because they don’t run – they stay with people and bring the Wraith. Those should be killed. It doesn’t look like Sheppard is one of those.

Melena comes with the medical team, to assist the surgeon. Ronon sticks around until Sheppard is on his belly on their portable table, doped into sleeping. Then he backs off a few meters, because that much blood is gross and Melena makes fun of him when he turns green.

The Doc takes the tracker out with no problem, and Ronon crushes it under his boot. It’s probably too late – the Wraith are on their way. They’ll be coming after Sheppard, and there was a reason Tyre chose this planet.

For this reason, the med team hurriedly packs up and takes Sheppard back to Sateda with them. Ronon stays behind until the darts start whistling overhead. They don’t catch Tyre. Ronon sees him and gives chase, but the lunatic runs into a culling beam.

Back on Sateda, Kell puts Ronon in charge of looking after the captured Runner. He gets the idea it’s not a reward.  For being so scrawny, Sheppard’s doing a really good job of menacing the hospital staff. Melena thinks he’s cute, in a sad way like an abandoned puppy. Ronon still has his gun, won’t give it back ‘til the guy has some place else to go.  

But Sheppard doesn’t want to tell them where he came from. He won’t even say the name, let alone give them the Ring address so they can send him home.

Ronon asks him how long he was Running.

“Seven months,” Sheppard says. “I think.” He looks kind of upset that he doesn’t know for sure.

“Wraith attack your world?” Ronon asks.

Sheppard’s jaw clenches. “Yeah.”

“Wraith have known where it is that long,” Ronon says. “Think we’re any more danger?”

Sheppard gives in shortly after that. He writes down the glyphs for the Ring, but warns that there are security measures in place to prevent just anyone from going through.

But when the Ring is dialed, no one answers the transmission sent from Sateda. Kell won’t send a squad, but he does allow imaging equipment to check it out. Ronon sees the video before Sheppard does. There’s nothing he can say, really, so he just takes a disc to the man’s hospital room and lets the images speak for themselves.

The Ring is intact, but that’s all. The robotic camera couldn’t get far from it, rubble and debris blocking its metal wheels. Ronon sees large spires lying crushed, water washing over half the screen. Sheppard’s city is empty: his people are gone.

“I’m sorry,” Ronon says.

Sheppard uses the remote control to turn off the video. He says nothing. His body is frozen, but his eyes are an ocean.

 

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[info]alleonh
2008-08-03 05:41 am UTC (link)
Oh wow, that was beautifully heartbreaking, and I loved it!

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[info]vain_glorious
2008-08-03 05:45 am UTC (link)
Thanks so much for the feedback! I'm glad you liked. :)

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Where the Ways Divide by Vain_Glorious [role-reversal challenge]
[info]fish_echo
2008-08-03 05:54 am UTC (link)
Wow, that's a lovely story-- Sheppard as a runner, Atlantis in ruins, Sateda alive.... I really like the view of Ronon and the interactions between Ronon and Sheppard.

I'd be curious to see more-- how it happened, what happened next, what was the fate of the expedition members, etc. But I think this also stands very well on it's own.

Great job!

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Re: Where the Ways Divide by Vain_Glorious [role-reversal challenge]
[info]vain_glorious
2008-08-03 01:39 pm UTC (link)
Thanks so much for the feedback!

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Re: Where the Ways Divide by Vain_Glorious [role-reversal challenge] - [info]fish_echo, 2009-01-29 02:23 am UTC
Re: Where the Ways Divide by Vain_Glorious [role-reversal challenge] - [info]vain_glorious, 2009-01-29 02:36 am UTC

[info]eleveninches
2008-08-03 06:07 am UTC (link)
Wow, this is really cool. Great job!

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[info]vain_glorious
2008-08-03 01:39 pm UTC (link)
Thanks!

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[info]berry_hearts
2008-08-03 06:19 am UTC (link)
RONON! SHEP! EEK!!
much love. in fact you could write an entire series about this and I would love it. :D

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[info]vain_glorious
2008-08-03 01:40 pm UTC (link)
Thanks for the comment!

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[info]kristen999
2008-08-03 06:33 am UTC (link)
Now that is really a cool twist, heartbreaking but very cool. Atlantis gone and John the one to be left without a home or his life...and Ronon perhaps giving him one on Sateda..cool.

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[info]vain_glorious
2008-08-03 01:40 pm UTC (link)
Thanks so much for the feedback. It was the first 'role-reversal' scenario that came to mind. :)

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[info]splitbeak
2008-08-03 06:37 am UTC (link)
This was absolutely fantastic!

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[info]vain_glorious
2008-08-03 01:40 pm UTC (link)
Thank you!

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[info]friendshipper
2008-08-03 07:20 am UTC (link)
Oh, lovely! What a fantastic twist. Nicely done.

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[info]vain_glorious
2008-08-03 01:41 pm UTC (link)
Thanks!

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[info]ratcreature
2008-08-03 07:21 am UTC (link)
That's a great idea for a reversal of fortunes. Poor John though!

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[info]vain_glorious
2008-08-03 01:41 pm UTC (link)
Thanks for the feedback!

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[info]mongognom
2008-08-03 09:03 am UTC (link)
Ok, so I had to read this story twice and tag ot on delicious before I got to this point.

The role reversal is perfect, inventive, workable, leaving us with a bucket of questions and ideas of where it went different.

If you get fed enough, will you consider writing more?

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[info]vain_glorious
2008-08-03 01:43 pm UTC (link)
I doubt this is a universe with much potential, lacking so many of our characters. I'll give it a thought, though. Thanks for the feedback! :)

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(no subject) - [info]mongognom, 2008-08-03 01:53 pm UTC
(no subject) - [info]vain_glorious, 2008-08-03 03:04 pm UTC
(no subject) - [info]mongognom, 2008-08-03 03:54 pm UTC
(no subject) - [info]vain_glorious, 2008-08-03 04:02 pm UTC
(no subject) - [info]mongognom, 2008-08-03 04:29 pm UTC

[info]less_star
2008-08-03 10:50 am UTC (link)
Chilling and heartbreaking and very well done! Thank you!

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[info]vain_glorious
2008-08-03 01:46 pm UTC (link)
Thanks for the feedback! :)

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[info]sp23
2008-08-03 12:39 pm UTC (link)
Oh, god, that was horrible! In an immensely good way. The thought of Atlantis destroyed, all our people gone - dead or in cocoons waiting to die - and John turned into a Runner to be rescued by Ronon and the Satedans... Wow.

Really great job.

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[info]vain_glorious
2008-08-03 01:46 pm UTC (link)
Thank you!

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[info]mangst
2008-08-03 12:59 pm UTC (link)
Devastating. And it puts Ronon's experience into perspective when you know the world that has been destroyed.

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[info]vain_glorious
2008-08-03 01:47 pm UTC (link)
Thanks so much for the feedback! :)

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[info]psyko_kittie
2008-08-03 01:21 pm UTC (link)
Beautiful and touching. Lovely reversal.

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[info]vain_glorious
2008-08-03 01:47 pm UTC (link)
Thank you! :)

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[info]springwoof
2008-08-03 02:40 pm UTC (link)
OMG!
::weeps::
beautifully, heartbreakingly done...

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[info]vain_glorious
2008-08-03 03:03 pm UTC (link)
Thanks for the feedback! :)

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[info]skeddy_kat
2008-08-03 02:58 pm UTC (link)
This was heartbreaking, but in a good way. Poor John.

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[info]vain_glorious
2008-08-03 03:03 pm UTC (link)
I'm glad you liked! Thanks for the feedback. :)

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[info]dragonladyk
2008-08-03 06:50 pm UTC (link)
Lots of Runners die because they get dumbass shamans and healers messing around in there.

Ronon, I love you, marry me. And Melena as Carson's "counterpart" -- awesome. ^^

I love John not shooting to kill.

DragonLady

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[info]vain_glorious
2008-08-03 07:00 pm UTC (link)
Thanks so much for the feedback! :)

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[info]vipersweb
2008-08-03 07:57 pm UTC (link)
really nice. I like the way you change up this story.

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[info]vain_glorious
2008-08-03 08:10 pm UTC (link)
Thanks for the comment! :)

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[info]wildcat88
2008-08-03 08:05 pm UTC (link)
A wonderful take on the challenge. Quite heartbreaking. I love that blood grosses out Ronon and that he and Shep are destined to be friends in any universe.

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[info]vain_glorious
2008-08-03 08:11 pm UTC (link)
Thanks for the feedback! :)

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[info]teh_bug
2008-08-03 08:23 pm UTC (link)
Oh, this was a nice take on the reversal! Very nice!

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[info]vain_glorious
2008-08-03 08:44 pm UTC (link)
Thanks for the feedback! :)

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[info]booksareadrug
2008-08-04 12:03 am UTC (link)
Oh, man. This hurt. It's an amazing fic, but the idea of Atlantis gone, Rodney gone, Teyla, Weir, all of them... That hurts.

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[info]vain_glorious
2008-08-04 12:37 am UTC (link)
Thanks so much for the feedback!

I have to admit I spent most of the time writing focusing on setting up parallels, so I'm glad there was emotional power as well.

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(no subject) - [info]booksareadrug, 2008-08-04 05:13 pm UTC

[info]ninja007
2008-08-04 07:36 am UTC (link)
Really well done and I agree, heartbreaking.

Great job!

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[info]vain_glorious
2008-08-04 01:44 pm UTC (link)
Thank you! :)

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[info]scifigeek72
2008-08-04 07:02 pm UTC (link)
Oh wow....heartbreaking. And such a cool concept.

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[info]vain_glorious
2008-08-04 07:24 pm UTC (link)
Thanks so much for the feedback! :)

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[info]dossier
2008-08-05 02:39 am UTC (link)
I wondered right up until the introduction: was it Sheppard or McKay? great story, packs a wallop in short form. It would be fascinating to see more of Sheppard on Sateda-- is he indeed alone in the galaxy?

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[info]vain_glorious
2008-08-05 02:47 am UTC (link)
Thanks for the feedback!

I'll see if any more inspiration for this universe strikes...it's on the backburner for now. :)

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[info]tielan
2008-08-09 08:14 am UTC (link)
Oh, ouch!

But really, really well-done.

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[info]vain_glorious
2008-08-10 05:15 am UTC (link)
Thanks for the feedback! Glad you liked. :)

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[info]pansychubb
2008-08-11 02:59 pm UTC (link)
Oh wow. Wonderful job! I would love to see more of this AU.

:-)
-Pansy Chubb (aka LilRicki)

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[info]vain_glorious
2008-08-11 07:07 pm UTC (link)
Thanks for the feedback!

It's on the backburner for now, but it definitely has potential. :)

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