frostfire ([info]frostfire_17) wrote in [info]sga_flashfic,
@ 2005-04-14 03:32:00
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Entry tags:author: frostfire, challenge: first contact

Silva, by Frostfire
Title: Silva
Author: Frostfire
Rating: R
Spoilers: Vaguely for 38 Minutes
Summary: The forest's moving
Notes: Written between the hours of 1:30 and 3:30 in the morning, which should be warning enough for anyone. Also, "Silva" is Latin for "forest".

The sun’s setting.

Rodney tells his subconscious to shut up and go away. He’s already lying on the forest floor with a very sharp and possibly murderous vine wrapped around his body. Whether he does it in broad daylight or the middle of the night really isn’t going to make any difference. Unless there are other dangerous alien life-forms on this planet that a) are nocturnal, and b) can deal with these freaking plants.

Around him, the forest shifts.

“Plants shouldn’t move like that,” he says to John. His voice isn’t very loud, compared to the constant slide of miles of carnivorous plant matter. Of course, he’s louder than John, who hit his head on the way down and is too busy being unconscious to say anything; Rodney’s given up trying to yell him awake. He has been keeping an eye on John’s chest. It isn’t moving very fast, but it’s moving, and really, Rodney thinks he’s hyperventilating enough to compensate.

He looks at the vine. “You know, if you’re sucking the life out of me, I have to tell you, you get no points for originality. In fact, the Wraith may have to come along and sue you for plagiarism, if the Major’s bug doesn’t get here first.”

The vine rustles at him. His own voice is doing absolutely nothing to restore his calm. Let alone distract him from the fact that he’s definitely weaker than he was fifteen minutes ago.

He does math in his head. Plays a mental game of prime/not-prime, trying to distract himself from the way his arms are pinned to his body and his legs are pressed tight together and he’s lying flat on his back with no way to move before he dies. The vine twitches, which hurts. Rodney plays more prime/not-prime solitaire. Does more math. Counts the little points of pain where thorns are digging into his skin—stop.

Too late, and he now knows there are sixteen little sharp vine pieces burrowing underneath his skin. His brain ignores all the unknown variables and tries to make that number into some sort of information about how much time he has left. Assuming the vine’s weakening effects engage in a numerical progression related to the number of thorns in the body, it’s half the time he’d have left if there were eight, the square root of if there were four, the cube root of—he needs to stop. He’s going to die eventually, and it doesn’t matter what the number of minutes is the cube root of.

He’s not panicking. He’s not panicking. He’s not panicking.

He’s dizzy.

And the forest won’t shut up. The vines rustle. The trees creak. It’s getting dark, and he’s lying on his back on an alien planet with a vine sucking the life out of him and Ford and Teyla are probably in exactly the same position somewhere else in the forest, and Sheppard’s unconscious damn him to hell.

Prime numbers. 1433. 779351. 3221. 30869.  26972593-1.

Doesn’t work. He’s hyperventilating, and now he doesn’t know if he’s light-headed because of that or because of the evil alien plant. Or, well, hungry alien plant, anyway, because he doesn’t know if it’s sentient and really, can something that isn’t sentient be evil?

He…can’t work his brain well enough to think of an answer to that.

Numbers are maybe safer.

Being dizzy while lying down is such a wrong feeling, somehow. He takes a few deep breaths and doesn’t try to move, because he’s discovered that every time he does, the vine tightens and then he starts to panic.

He closes his eyes and he can feel the forest moving around him, in addition to the swaying that his inner ear is conjuring up, and maybe he’ll pass out now—

Sheppard groans.

“Major? Major!” He’s awake now, except he’s weak and sweating profusely, but he really doesn’t care, if John’s waking up.

But there’s no further noise from his left, just the slight whisper of breathing, which the forest mostly drowns out anyway. If he turns his head, he can make out John’s shape about six inches away, almost touching, close enough to touch if his hands weren’t pinned to his sides by this goddamned plant

Breathe.

He wants, suddenly, desperately, to reach out and touch John. Just a little, just enough to know that there’s another warm living person here with him, even if he can’t talk or move, even if he’s a military idiot who pretends he isn’t as smart as Rodney knows he is, and can’t keep himself conscious to save his life, and whose fault it probably is that they’re here, considering his phenomenally bad luck with regards to life-sucking aliens of whatever form.

He’s having a hard time telling, now, whether it’s the forest or his vision that’s shifting around, whether it’s the forest or his hearing that’s ringing in his ears, but he can still feel the sixteen bright points of pain and the line of warmth that’s John, next to him.

He’s never going to forgive the guy for being unconscious during their last moments. They could have…said things. Last words. Although most of what Rodney would want to say would be wasted on someone who was also about to die. But John’s different, and—he can’t concentrate hard enough to finish that thought, but he knows it’s important. That’ll have to be enough. He tries for prime numbers again and can’t get any, which seems to be a very bad sign.

He’s getting cold. He can’t tell if his eyes are open or closed. He knows he can hear the forest.

 

When he wakes up, he panics.

“Rodney! Rodney, calm down!” penetrates just as he realizes that he can, actually, move his arms. And then he recognizes the accent.

Carson.” And yeah, there he is, bending down, looking concerned. Bending down over Rodney’s bed. His hospital bed. His hospital bed which is located in the city of Atlantis and not in a forest full of life-sucking plants.

He turns his head to one side and there’s Teyla and Ford, hovering just behind Carson. He turns it to the other side and—oh thank God—there’s John, in the next bed. He only just manages to keep himself from reaching out.

 

Ford tells the we-rescued-you-in-the-nick-of-time story, which involves P-90’s, a quick trip through the Stargate, and then laser cutting tools and life signs detectors. In the middle, Elizabeth shows up, and shortly after that, John wakes up, and it’s all a big happy party. Or something. Carson makes noises about a poison the vine released into their system that weakened and partially paralyzed them; they were apparently going to be eaten over a period of days.

Rodney’s bed is very, very narrow.

Ford’s just finished giving John the parts of the story that he missed when Rodney finally cracks. “Look,” he says, “I hate to be rude—”

“No, you don’t,” Ford grins.

He doesn’t snap at him. “Fine. I love to be rude. I’m tired. It is time for all of you to leave.” So he can have a traumatic flashback in private. Please. “My brain will be once again available to safeguard the people of Atlantis tomorrow.”

Everybody makes their version of a well-wishing and they all trickle out, and Rodney’s left with John and Carson. And the bed, which is still. very. narrow. He rests his hands on his solar plexus. “Carson?”

“Hm?” He’s fiddling with something.

“Did I hear you say that the plant’s toxin is basically gone from our systems?”

“That’s right.”

“Then is there any real reason you need us here overnight? Can’t we sleep in our rooms?”

Carson frowns. “Well, the likelihood of you suffering a relapse or a reaction, this long after you were exposed, is vanishingly small. I was going to keep you for observation, but if you really want to go, it shouldn’t be a problem.”

John’s watching him from the other bed, silent. “We’ll check in tomorrow morning,” Rodney promises.

“So you’re speaking for yourself and Major Sheppard, then?”

“Yeah, I’d like to go, too,” John says, still watching Rodney. “I feel fine.” And he sits up, then stands, slowly but without swaying.

“All right, then. Off you both go, and come back tomorrow, mind.”

Standing is a bit of an effort, but his legs remember how the walking thing goes—despite being wrapped with vine for hours, pressed together and unable to move—and he follows Sheppard into the hall. They walk together, and Rodney doesn’t touch John.

He can still feel the line of pressure snaking around his body, stopping at sixteen painful little points.

Inside John’s room, Rodney latches onto him and clings. There’s a second where John tenses, and Rodney wonders if he’s going to have to lie awake all night after all, but then he’s wrapping himself around Rodney and pulling him across the room. They stumble and fall onto the bed, Rodney’s face pushed into John’s neck and John’s leg curled around his.

“Rustling,” says John, breath moving over Rodney’s hair. “I can still hear it. It was all around.”

Rodney shudders and covers John’s mouth. “Don’t talk about it. Please. Not now.”

John nods under his hand, and Rodney lifts it up and kisses him.

John’s mouth is hot and his tongue is good and his hands are sliding over Rodney’s body and stripping him naked, which is just, oh God, and Rodney goes to work on John’s clothes—and then they’re naked, rubbing against each other while Rodney licks his way back into John’s mouth. And it’s hot, and good, and they’re moving but their surroundings are staying totally still, which is just, Rodney can’t even express how right that is, how much of a relief. The light’s low and John’s skin is about as far from green as colors get, glowing golden and damp with sweat, and this is definitely, completely not a cold dark forest floor.

He can move his hands. He can put them on John’s skin, run them up and down and watch his chest jerk with a gasp, slip fingers into John’s mouth while he twists his hips, wrap his arms around John’s back when they roll over.

And finally, finally, when he comes, he can’t hear the rustling anymore.

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[info]akire_yta
2005-04-14 10:42 am UTC (link)
Yeow!

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*goes to reread the goodness of this fic*

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[info]frostfire_17
2005-04-14 06:32 pm UTC (link)
*grin* *blush* Yay for blowing coherency away. Glad you liked it!

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(no subject) - [info]akire_yta, 2005-04-14 10:59 pm UTC

[info]farwing
2005-04-14 11:05 am UTC (link)
Yeah-- this is awesome. Perfect thing to read first thing in the morning. (Which might mean I'm a but odd, actually...)

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[info]frostfire_17
2005-04-14 06:34 pm UTC (link)
*lifts eyebrow* We are a community of people whose purpose it is to read and write stories about fictional men having sex with each other. I think that you have to be a bit odd just to *be* here. You fit right in.

And hey, I *wrote* the thing.

Glad you enjoyed it!

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(no subject) - [info]farwing, 2005-04-15 01:16 am UTC

[info]spikedluv
2005-04-14 11:46 am UTC (link)
You made that sound so creepy! Well done. *g* But I liked the ending best, of course, especially when they manage to banish thoughts of the moving forest.

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[info]frostfire_17
2005-04-14 06:35 pm UTC (link)
Yay for creepy. And sex heals everything, even post-traumatic flashbacks to man-eating animate vines. (What? It totally does!) Glad you liked it! ^_^

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[info]rosewildeirish
2005-04-14 11:51 am UTC (link)
Creepy blending to painful honesty blending to hot. Nice!

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[info]frostfire_17
2005-04-14 06:36 pm UTC (link)
Yay! Thanks!

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[info]terrie01
2005-04-14 01:02 pm UTC (link)
He’s never going to forgive the guy for being unconscious during their last moments. Such a very, very McKay line. Lovely, creepy story.

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[info]frostfire_17
2005-04-14 06:37 pm UTC (link)
Thanks; I was wondering if I had McKay down all right or not. Glad you liked it!

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[info]umbo
2005-04-14 01:23 pm UTC (link)
Excellent job!

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[info]frostfire_17
2005-04-14 06:37 pm UTC (link)
Thank you!

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[info]mmmchelle
2005-04-14 01:25 pm UTC (link)
This is very, very good. Thank you.

The near-death response was very real, and very Rodney.

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[info]frostfire_17
2005-04-14 06:38 pm UTC (link)
You're quite, quite welcome. Thank *you* for confirming that I did, actually, do the Rodney-voice all right. Glad you liked it.

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[info]astolat
2005-04-14 02:03 pm UTC (link)
Oh, lovely. The horror really comes through, and the intensity of their relief at the end, and I love Rodney's voice throughout. And this was just great:

“I hate to be rude—”

“No, you don’t,” Ford grins.

He doesn’t snap at him. “Fine. I love to be rude.


Hee!

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[info]frostfire_17
2005-04-14 06:55 pm UTC (link)
*grin* Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it. And as for the rudeness--he totally does. (Him and House. And that's...a thought that will go away now.)

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[info]minnow1212
2005-04-14 02:05 pm UTC (link)
This was wonderful, and I love the physical grounding.

Loved these lines especially:

--but he can still feel the sixteen bright points of pain and the line of warmth that’s John, next to him.

--And it’s hot, and good, and they’re moving but their surroundings are staying totally still, which is just, Rodney can’t even express how right that is, how much of a relief.

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[info]frostfire_17
2005-04-14 07:01 pm UTC (link)
Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it.

The setting, and Rodney's physical presence, was such an important part of the story that I'm really glad it worked out. Thanks for mentioning that. ^_^

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[info]casspeach
2005-04-14 02:38 pm UTC (link)
Triffids was my first thought for this challenge and I am so glad I didn't go with it, because you did it so well. I loved loads about this, especially Rodney's voice, and his panic and his wanting to move his arms, and never going to forgive John for being unconscious and I'll just stop now because otherwise I'm just going to repeat the whole thing.

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[info]frostfire_17
2005-04-14 07:02 pm UTC (link)
*grin* *blush* Glad you liked it. *hugs Rodney*

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[info]kimera
2005-04-14 07:21 pm UTC (link)
That was lovely and scary all at once. Thanks for sharing!

Although now I am going to need a different title for my own contribution ;)

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[info]frostfire_17
2005-04-16 05:03 am UTC (link)
Heh. Oops. Sorry. ^_^ (I do love this trick where you translate an ordinary boring word into another language and suddenly it becomes a cool title. Mostly because I suck at thinking them up...)

Glad you liked it, despte the accidental title-theft.

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(no subject) - [info]kimera, 2005-04-16 05:19 am UTC
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[info]thecomfychair
2005-04-14 07:42 pm UTC (link)
creepy. in a good way, trust me. Even if it did make me look twice at the plant outside my window.
and this line cracked me up:
“You know, if you’re sucking the life out of me, I have to tell you, you get no points for originality. In fact, the Wraith may have to come along and sue you for plagiarism"--your Rodney is spot on.

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[info]frostfire_17
2005-04-16 05:04 am UTC (link)
Thanks! *loves Rodney* That line was mostly my way of covering my ass about using the life-sucking cliche...but I liked the way it came out anyway.

Keep that window shut. You never know when a plant's going to go bad.

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[info]thepouncer
2005-04-14 08:18 pm UTC (link)
I really loved the way you showed Rodney trying to stave off panic through math games, and also how little they helped him. His trauma came through loud and clear even unto the end, where he was able to take comfort with John. That Sheppard was just as traumatized was very clear, just from the way Rodney read his reactions. So, so good.

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[info]frostfire_17
2005-04-16 05:07 am UTC (link)
Thanks! Glad you liked it. I think that numbers are totally something Rodney (or anyone math-inclined, really) would try to use to calm himself down, because they're neat and orderly and require a certain amount of concentration.

Plus, prime numbers are sexy. (What? *What*? They are!) Especially the Mersenne prime with that enormous exponent...

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[info]cathexys
2005-04-14 10:22 pm UTC (link)
oh, i really liked, esp. the real threat and horror and creepiness and the ending is hot and the final silence and the imagery with the arms and the movement and not being tied any more...but, i feel like i missed a step. were they involved before? b/c he calls him major in his thoughts. but if they weren't... well, i'll put it down to post-mortal danger honesty and release and the wrapping image nicely connects... hmmm...

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[info]frostfire_17
2005-04-16 05:08 am UTC (link)
Um, yeah, I was hoping that wouldn't be ambiguous. They were not, in fact, involved before. Post-mortal danger etc., definitely. ...oops?

Glad you liked the rest of it, though. Thanks!

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[info]canadian_snoopy
2005-04-14 10:33 pm UTC (link)
The idea of Rodney trying to keep calm by running numbers through his mind is just *neat* and I'm totally going to start looking for it in the new episodes now.

Plus, the hotness was... whew. *fans self* Need to go get some fresh air -- in a parking lot with no trees :o)))))

Wonderful stuff!

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[info]frostfire_17
2005-04-16 05:11 am UTC (link)
It's like the ultimate nerd version of counting to ten. I mean, if you know Mersenne primes off the top of your head, why just count to ten when you can use numbers that are *so* much cooler. With exponents and everything!

Yay! I can do hotness! I've been trying to improve on my sex-writing skills lately. Good to see it's appreciated (although I still have problems with the actual naming of body parts...) Glad you liked it!

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[info]wickedwords
2005-04-15 02:32 am UTC (link)
I loved the horror of this, and how Rodney's mind was racing as he was trapped. The constand re-framing and repetition was very effective.

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[info]frostfire_17
2005-04-16 05:14 am UTC (link)
Thanks! Glad you liked it. I have good writing techniques! *bounces* I enjoy writing panic for some reason. Good to see it's appreciated...

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[info]tinnny
2005-04-15 05:11 pm UTC (link)
Mwwaaaah! Great we-survived sex. Mmmmhhh.
How on earth did you write this marvelous piece in the middle of the night? :)

typo first: a military idiot who pretends his isn’t as smart as Rodney knows he is
(please tell me if I should stop pointing out typos)

Rodney's math wiz distractions were great! I could listen to him ramble all day long.

I'm getting the feeling that your understanding of Rodney and John is very similar to my own. Rodney believes John to be much more intelligent than he lets on. I'm all with you.

He’s awake now, except he’s weak and sweating profusely, but he really doesn’t care if John’s waking up.

That is a bit ambiguous - or it might be my grasp of English? I first thought he didn't care *that* John's waking up.

Seems like the majority of people has written deadly aliens. I love those fics that take you to the point right before death. Here it was so sad and not enough time, never enough time... . No more prime numbers. *sniff*


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[info]frostfire_17
2005-04-16 05:20 am UTC (link)
Okay, I suck. *fixes* "His" changed to he, comma put between "care" and "if". Um, sorry. Maybe you should beta for me.

Wait, you offered to...didn't you? I should perhaps take you up on that...

Glad you liked the rest of it! (the parts without stupid mistakes...*smacks self*) As for the middle-of-the-night thing, well, I think my stodgy inner critic's bedtime is like 9:00. Most of my coolest stuff is done at night. ^_^

Yay for doing the sex well! I have a mild inferiority complex about my sex-writing skills, in addition to a mild embarrassment when doing it, especially if I name body parts...and also yay for rambling Rodney and smart John. *hugs them* Thanks for commenting!

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(no subject) - [info]tinnny, 2005-04-16 05:42 am UTC
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[info]ship_recs
2005-04-16 12:32 pm UTC (link)
That was lovely. I love this:

“You know, if you’re sucking the life out of me, I have to tell you, you get no points for originality. In fact, the Wraith may have to come along and sue you for plagiarism"

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[info]frostfire_17
2005-04-18 06:43 am UTC (link)
Thanks! Glad you liked it! And...yeah. That line was totally self-defense, because the life-sucking thing...is old, and yet I used it. But everyone seems to have liked it, which is good. Yay. ^_^

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[info]coreopsis
2005-04-17 10:09 pm UTC (link)
This was awesome. The forest bits were very nicely creepy and yet this:"You know, if you’re sucking the life out of me, I have to tell you, you get no points for originality. In fact, the Wraith may have to come along and sue you for plagiarism, if the Major’s bug doesn’t get here first." made me laugh out loud. That sounds so Rodney. heh.

And then the ending was very hot. Yes. *g*

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[info]frostfire_17
2005-04-18 06:45 am UTC (link)
Heh. Glad you liked it, creepy bits and funny bits and hot bits and all.

Everyone seems to have loved that line, which is funny, because it was basically me trying to cover my ass as regards using life-sucking *yet again*. Apparently I just covered extremely well. Go me! And thanks for the comment!

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[info]mamoru22
2005-04-19 10:18 pm UTC (link)
that was really really nice and absolutely in character especially McKay.

It makes me so happy that they got away*g*

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[info]frostfire_17
2005-04-21 06:08 pm UTC (link)
Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it! And yeah, they needed to get away. How would they have had sex, otherwise? *g*

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[info]kalimyre
2005-04-21 04:45 pm UTC (link)
Mmmmm, scary-good. I love me a shot of classic whumping, and McKay's reaction was just right, claustrophobic and panicky without being over the top. Lovely ending, too. John and Rodney hotness, yay. :-)

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[info]frostfire_17
2005-04-21 06:09 pm UTC (link)
*grin* Glad you enjoyed it. Whumping, yes, 'tis great fun. ^_^ Thanks for commenting!

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[info]sarren
2005-04-26 04:56 pm UTC (link)
Damn good.

Loved the way Rodney just latched onto John.

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[info]jic
2005-07-09 10:59 pm UTC (link)
The forest was most excellent. *pets Rodney* You do great woods imagery.

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