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Author: magzct
Fic Title: Mori's Game
Rating: NC-17
Pairing: Mori/Haruhi
Summary: Mori and Haruhi hit it off with one of Mori's favorite games...


Fake Cut to Fanfic

Cross-posted to... uh, many others.

Author: jengou
Title: Sorry versus Apology
Rating: PG
Pairings: Kaoru/Hikaru
Spoilers: Episode 15
Disclaimer: Ouran High School Host Club was created by Hatori Bisco.
Summary: Kaoru wants to hear "I apologize" but Hikaru says "I'm sorry" instead. So Kaoru accepts "I'm sorry", but then Hikaru says nothing at all.
Notes: Would really appreciate any comment on language/characterisation/lameness/grammar. My writing has always been more 'efficient' rather than 'aesthetic', so this fic was a bit of a struggle for me. Please be as harsh as you like *is masochistic*. Thanks!

( First morning of summer vacation was hot and sticky. )

Author: xwingace
Title: The Metaphor of Dance.
Rating: G
Pairings:Eh, could be almost anything if you squint, but probably mostly TamakixHaruhi

Note: I started thinking about the dance scene at the end of episode 26, and how much it might reveal about the various Host Club Members. This is the result.

I'd most like notes on characterisation, as I fear I might not have done Haruhi justice, and a little bit of canon, as I watched the ep at BF's and now can't find a download myself (and am at a torrent deprived computer). RC isn't that much help, as there are only a few screenshots of this sequence. If I got something terribly wrong, please tell me.

( She could have danced all night )

XWA

Author: Reiven @ cwazy_weiven
Title: Oceanic Escapades
Rating: General
Pairings: None specific pairing. Just (as I'd like to believe) canon-like,
Note: I've written quite a few Ouran fics, but this was my first ever try, so I wanted to know how I'd gotten the whole thing on the first shot =D


( Hikaru jumped to his feet and pointed a finger towards Tamaki, “I would gladly pee on Tono's leg!”  )

Quick queston: is this like a workshop, in that anyone can give their two cents, or is it more like therapy, in that it's just the mods that are supposed to be giving the suggestions? This is actually more out of curiosity than anything, I can't really find a leaning either way in the userinfo.

And also, a quick disclaimer. I haven't written a fanfiction, much less posted one, since I was maybe fourteen. Maybe fifteen. Which is not to say that I'm completely illiterate-- I've been writing, just not with other people's characters. I also haven't really been in the anime fandom since I was fifteen, so I'm fairly new to Ouran, which can lead to OOC and other fabulous things like that. But anyway, I'll stop taking up space.

Author: trytowish
Title: Silence is Golden
Rating: G, unless you're for some reason afraid of Shakespeare.
Pairings: None. Kyouya & twins centric, but no real pairing.
Notes: Some dialogue is quoted from Shakespeare's Julius Caesar, I.ii.204-217. Actually, most of it. And the ending probably needs the most work out of everything. I did want to say something about silence and, you know, all that, but it seemed very cliché, and I just didn't know how to touch that. Reticence is good, anyway. Which is an ironic statement, given the length of this post already.
Length: About 900 words.

( Let me have men about me that are fat. )

Also. I noticed you guys didn't have a reserve mod; I don't know how dire your need is, but if you do want some help, I'd be happy to offer. I'm more of an editor than a writer, anyway.

Author: Kosume Shezaki
Title: New Home New Brother
Rating: T
Pairing: Kyoya/Haruhi

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2934182/1/

I already have 3 chapters written so I decided to provide a link for it on fanfiction.net

( Read more... )

Thank you all for taking the time to read the story and how to improve it.

Never was that fond of my writing, especially when it involved light smut, but the twins were just begging me to write something about them. XD I suck at tenses, just to let you know. TT___TT So, let the bloodbath begin! ^_^

Author: Silent Sage (Name of my FF.Net account)
Title: Private Play
Rating: R-ish
Pairings (if any): Kaoru/Hikaru 

So I bring the first fic for you all to point and laugh at critique. It's actually just a fragment of a WIP, but since I have no betas for the Ouran side of this, I'd really like to know if I'm getting the characterisation right. I wanted to get some FB before I got too far in and only find out then that it isn't going anywhere.

It's a crossover with Doctor Who, but I've tried to give (most of) the necessary information on that in the fic. If there is anything that still isn't comprehensible, tell me so I can try to fix it. Be harsh, I want to know how to make this thing better.

Author:xwingace
Title:Unusual Guests (provisional title.)
Rating: G so far. Not likely to go above PG
Pairings (if any):None yet.

( Actually, even if it is a fragment, this is bloody long by my standards. )

Thank you for your efforts,

XWA

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