Erin ([info]apreludetoanend) wrote in [info]open_on_sunday,
@ 2006-10-16 16:46:00
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Chill [Somniloquist and Insomniac, S/X]
Two related S/X drabbles, PG. This is the first fic of any sort that I've written, so just yell at me if I've done it wrong!

Somniloquist

Xander opens the window and lets the chill of the night air wash over him. On the bed, he waits for the heat from the electric blanket to seep into his skin before he pulls the plug. Safety first.

He turns his face into the pillow, away from the window, and pretends not to listen for the familiar flick, puff, exhale.

He's been told he talks in his sleep, and maybe it's true because he knows if he says anything else tonight, it'll be "come in", and he'll pretend to be asleep when he says it.

Insomniac

It's not every night. Just every night this week. Spike's steps crunch and crackle on frost and dry leaves. Only cold, dead things out tonight.

The window's open again, though it's been weeks since the summer heat left the air.

Flick. Puff. Exhale. Another night. Spike waits until the cigarette burns his fingertips before discarding it. He contemplates the full pack in his pocket and the hours ahead. His hand brushes the barrier as he forces the glass panel downward.

He knows enough about human frailty to recognize the October chill for the deathtrap it is.



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[info]sassyskunk
2006-10-16 09:05 pm UTC (link)
That second one is awesome.

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[info]apreludetoanend
2006-10-17 05:05 pm UTC (link)
Thank you! I love your icon, btw. =)

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[info]electricalgwen
2006-10-16 09:07 pm UTC (link)
Only cold, dead things out tonight.

These are lovely! I like the echo of "flick, puff, exhale." It's very well done, the way you show the interest each has in the other expressed in different (incompatible) ways. I love that Spike closed the window, turning down the offering.

The last line is particularly effective; the different possible meanings for "the deathtrap it is" gave *me* a chill.

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[info]apreludetoanend
2006-10-17 05:09 pm UTC (link)
Thanks so much! I was worried that, with only 100 words, I would end up being too vague or cryptic, so I'm glad you understood it. I'm also glad the last line had an impact; when it came to me, I just knew I had to write the rest of it. =)

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[info]electricalgwen
2006-10-17 07:01 pm UTC (link)
That's the trick of 100 words, isn't it? I would call what you pulled off beautifully subtle, not vague or cryptic at all. :)

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[info]scarlettlily
2006-10-17 01:53 am UTC (link)
Wow these were great. A nice look at what Spike/Xander could become.

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[info]apreludetoanend
2006-10-17 05:05 pm UTC (link)
Thanks so much! =)

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[info]stretfordditto
2006-10-17 07:46 am UTC (link)
Really excellent. :)

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[info]apreludetoanend
2006-10-17 05:06 pm UTC (link)
Thank you! =)

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[info]span_tastic
2006-10-17 12:29 pm UTC (link)
they were great... thank you for sharing

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[info]apreludetoanend
2006-10-17 05:06 pm UTC (link)
Thanks so much! =)

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[info]twilightofmagic
2006-10-21 08:13 pm UTC (link)
Very nicely done, both of them. Loved the sense of them both waiting for the inevitable. And yay! the inevitable. Umm, it is yay, isn't it? Sex not death? eeep.

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[info]apreludetoanend
2006-10-21 09:01 pm UTC (link)
Oh, it's absolutely yay! We are entirely death free. Thanks! =)

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