Hey everyone,
Hark! Yesterday,
yuki_onna sent out the June story -- which means that it's time to bring our
first Omikuji Round-Robin to a close.
Here is the result of everyone in the above link posting one sentence each to the tune of
Last summer, my aunt married a rime giant, with paragraph breaks where I've deemed them apt. I had fun reading each sentence as it came up, and would love to get some feedback from you guys -- both those who took part and those reading the result.
Without further ado... Our exquisite corpse of a Story for Cat!
~*~Last summer, my aunt married a rime giant.
As they took their vows, he as white as she, I wondered how she would bear his icy touch and the unrelenting cold of Niflheim. The vestments they wore, hers white as fresh snow, his the blue of long-buried glacial ice, seemed a world apart form the heat of the sun that watched over their ceremony. But she had always been hotblooded, my aunt; just maybe she'd have enough heat to last her.
What strange alchemy had filled the cup they drank from, his hand dwarfing hers on the wooden bowl as their lips kissed the brim in turn? I watched as their eyes met; truly, it was no struggle on either part to submit to their vows, such tender and kind regard as his was rare in our experience. Hot tempers run in our family -- perhaps he chose her for the fire in her heart or her eyes -- I suspect she chose him for his cool head as much as for his broad, strong body, which steamed in the summer heat.
Or perhaps it was purely monstrosity which had drawn them together: the obvious monstrosity of his size and his chill; her deeper, secret, marvelous deformity, of which I knew well enough but the main of the family, behind their white paper fans and their small feet folded in fragile silk and linen shoes, refused to admit. They refused to admit, too, that in the monstrousness was great beauty and a terrible, terrible power; and in the moment before the nuptial kiss made every vow a sacred one, I wondered if the groom knew just how deep my aunt's strength went.
My aunt had a flame inside her, a wild streak of it--lava that would bubble up from the black rock of her heart, spitting love, hate sorrow like plumes of magma, rearranging, changing and cooling back to stone, no sulfur perfume now, only the scent of plumeria clinging to her skin, drowning the scent of her bridal bouquet. The mingling of their breath, hot and cold, settled white dewdrops onto the roses she carried each time they kissed.
When they turned to face their assembled families and friends together as husband and wife, a thundering cheer went up on the groom's side of the room, but most of the bride's side was silent. In that brief moment of one-sided silence, I watched my aunt's face harden into a carefully blank mask; not for the first time, I was ashamed of my family, unwilling to put aside their squabbles and prejudices even for these few hours. But as I watched her expression softened and her eyes became brighter still; one who burns so hot cannot remain frozen for long.
She took a few bold steps towards the assembled gathering of friends and relations and tossed a flaming bouquet of roses into the air as if launching a bird into flight. Her new husband's cousin caught it, and though the stems burnt his hands he smiled as brightly as if he were a bride himself. Though, if any among the wedding party had thought to turn and look into his eyes at that moment, they would have seen the one, ice tear, still glistening in the corner of his eye.
Taking the tear into his hand, cupping it in the palm where it shone like a diamond, he held it out to the shabbily dressed poor relation seeking invisibility at the edge of the throng. The man on the edge reached out shyly, his beak snapping with bashful pleasure as he accepted the shining tear - touching it made his feathers heavy and damp.
No one saw but I, and -- just perhaps --my smiling aunt, when the man opened his beak and blew, and the breath of fire from the poor relation’s mouth transmuted the tear to a flash of boiling steam.
~*~My own thoughts:
a) I think I had my logic the wrong way 'round. I thought that the more people played, the fewer sentences each we should have, but now I think that a small group should have a sentence each, whereas a large group should have more, since there's less chance of it going around and around. I think it should be the more rounds there are likely to be, the fewer sentences each there should be.
b) I'll need to ask those of you with privacy settings on LJ if you're cool with letting me message you when it's your turn, since I get notifications on the post, but have to send them to you manually, and can't do that unless I'm able to LJ-message you. I wasn't able to reach a few people as quickly as I would've liked.
c) Next time I'll ask people posting to quote the previous sentences up until that point into their comment, so that the story's accumulating as we go along. I think it'd be cool for each person to have a sense of how it's growing -- and will also make it easier for me to wrap everything up in the end and post it.
Thanks so much to everyone who participated -- I hope you guys had fun! I look forward to doing it next month, and to see what story of
yuki_onna's follows that awesome first line.