NF.com Critic’s Corner

Another Archive

2007-04-21T00:06:27Z

Some girls got together and created a temp. board for those of you who still would like to read or post your stuff.

www.archive.whimsicalfiction.com

Enjoy!

-Traci

jlbff.com

2007-04-19T14:58:53Z

I don't know if anyone still is looking at this community or not...but if you want to read some fanfiction and haven't already checked out my site...go to http://www.jlbff.com

Enjoy!
pbmaxca

NF.com

2006-07-18T21:10:02Z

Hey everyone!

By now I'm sure everyone knows that the NF.com is down.

Helena spoke with Vikki and she said that occasionally the server goes down when it's upgrading, or right when it's new subscription time. So dont panic. =)

The moderators are trying to fix it and have it up ASAP.

Joone =)

Feedback Request

2006-02-09T06:42:35Z

Throwing this out there as well...

[Title] "(Are You) Game?"
[Rating] NC-17
[Character] Justin Timberlake
[Summary] When Justin Timberlake and Alexa Marquez became unlikely good friends, many thought they were perfect for each other. But this logic wasn't going to screw up their friendship, as they instead played games with each other that distracted themselves from what was meant to be. When they finally cross that line between friends and lovers, how will their games affect their relationship?
[Warnings] Sexual situations, adult language
[URL] http://www.nsyncfiction.com/archive/viewstory.php?sid=10894&warning=NC-17

I just started this story, and any help on continuing would be great. Thanks! There's more information about the story on my website: http://fly.to/nsyncangeluv

nsync_fiction @ 2006-01-07T05:07:00

2006-01-07T11:07:52Z

ok so I am looking into this wanted to throw it out there see if someone saw something in it. I kinda want to make it longer but I am not really sure.

read it Just let me know what you think *Raw*

Feedback for "Seventeen" by Lauren

2005-09-06T02:43:48Z

where is everyone? ladies... we're slacking, lol!

Hmmm... so.

I am digging the plot. I don’t want to say too much and give away anything to readers who may have not started the story... but I get what you’re aiming to accomplish with it and I like it.

I found your characters harder to grasp then the plot though. I think the beginning chapters should be stronger, more focused. The characters could never hold a one-topic conversation long enough for me to really get into them, or even to establish their personality.

There is also an overuse of a few words... like "cute", "honestly"... I get that it’s the lingo of being seventeen, which really is cute, honestly...lol! But maybe a toning down would be ok? Its just like *whoa* at first and I found myself laughing more at them, then with them.

I think you may have caught that mistake, because I found Chapter 11 to be exactly what I was waiting for... a consistent set of events. After that I was able to follow the story and began to put together my thoughts and opinions about the characters.

The last chapter I read was 22 and I feel like I still don’t really know the characters as well as I should - or would like too. Their conversations seem to be either really realistic... or just really shallow. Black or white... I couldn’t find any grey.

Its fiction... I know, but you have to catch yourself sometimes.

A re-reading would do some good. I got confused at some parts where the characters just didn’t make sense, example in chapter 20. Justin first says "Sometimes I wonder if I really want to play college ball anyway" ... to later, a few lines down say "My heart is just set on playing ball. I’ve never wanted to do anything else. I mean, yeah, Yale is a really amazing school and I know I could get in, it just isn’t what I really want."

He contradicts himself. But spelling and grammar are nearly perfect, two thumbs up!

The little love triangle between the two girls and the hot new neighbor. You did well to show the difference between the two relationships there. Though at times I’d wished you’d shown a little more. You have short chapters and cut corners a bit... kinda disappointing.

It feels like I’m watching a movie and then suddenly... damn, I need to use the bathroom. I come back and missed that scene that isn’t really crucial... but would’ve been nice to see anyway. Ya know what I’m saying?

But overall, like I said at first, I like what you’re doing here. Kinda gave me déjà vu of my high school days... lol! For future chapters I would advice to stay away from any cat fights/drama between Taylor and Crystal over Justin... that would just be too predictable for me.

Maybe some drama between Justin and Evan? I was expecting that at first but it never happened. Evan seemed to be pretty competitive and that kinda just disappeared. Crystal seems to be your wild card so I wouldn't bench her just yet... maybe keep Evan as the villain and drama between him and Crystal could bring her closer to Taylor and nip whatever rift her jealously with Justin may have caused?

And I'd like to see Justin soul-search a bit... he confuses me, I don't think he really knows what he wants. Taylor too, now that I think about it... but then again, what seventeen year-old does? lol!

Seventeen by laurann67

Feedback Request

2005-09-03T06:46:40Z

Title: ~*~A Love Of Two Households~*~ (Complete)-12/02/2005
Rating: PG
Character: [member(s) of Nsync]JC Chasez, Joey Fatone, Justin Timberlake, Lance Bass, Unknown
Summary:She left her hometown of Clinton, Mississippi to become a writer in California, and when her Actor Boyfriend (JC) throws her out she has no where to go but home, where she see's old friends, and an old lover (Lance) whom she despises.
Warnings: adult language, sexual situations
URL Link: http://www.nsyncfiction.com/archive/viewstory.php?sid=4615

*&*Traci*&*

EDIT: I just wanted to let ya'll know I did finish the story. It's all at the link provided. If anyone is still interested :)

In Massive Need of Ending Help for Black Roses Red

2005-09-01T04:00:56Z

For any one who has read or is reading Black Roses Red, I am totally completely absolutely stuck on how to end it. I have a couple ideas floating but none of them are really sticking to anything. So yeah, in other words...I'd love some input or some suggestions / ideas or anything about how to end this thing. Anything...I mean *anything* would be sooooo appreciated :D
Thanks - xox
Lauren

Posting Access

2005-08-19T20:26:53Z

Ladies.... we're waiting for your emails. :)

fear_of_moths, insecureblue89, jes808, lawlerzgr8, lroberts

The email must include ur LJ user name and a link to the website where your stories are posted on, send it to us at nfcom_journal@yahoo.com!

I have vacation the week of the 29th, and plan to do some serious fan fiction reading... and reviewing ;) So keep posting ladies!!

Feedback Request

2005-08-19T06:59:49Z

[Title] "Back to your Heart"
[Rating] R
[Character] JC Chasez
[Summary] Bound by contract and their hearts, Erica Sanchez and JC Chasez must face the consequences of their actions. (I purposely left out info that would give away its prequel)
[Warnings] Major alcohol abuse, moderate sexual situations, and minor adult language
[URL] http://www.nsyncfiction.com/viewstory.php?sid=6324

This is the sequel to the story I posted a few weeks ago. It can be read on its own, I'm fairly certain (I've received reviews that support that). For this story, I would love feedback because it gauges my current writing abilities, and I would love to know what you all think. Enjoy!

Feedback Request

2005-08-11T21:40:28Z

Title: Disenchanted Lullaby
Rating: R
Character: Justin Timberlake
Summary: Two views. Two lives. Two hearts. Two stories. One love. Disenchanted Lullaby: Beth Mendell was only 17 years old when she met Justin. He changed her life in more ways than she had ever thought possible. She analyses her own character, as well as those of the people around her while telling all about her young life and the strains of growing up, as well as being in a relationship with the man, the myth, the dork...Justin Timberlake. Justin's innermost feelings are revealed in his journal entries, he too is growing and experiencing new things with Beth at his side, but how long can any lullaby be sustained before it goes off-key?
Warnings: Some sexual content, strong language.
URL Link: http://www.kenz.tasting-eden.com/dl
Note: This story is incomplete and very, very long, so if you plan on reviewing I'll wait as long as it takes! I'd never expect it to be read quickly. Thanks!

Feedback Request

2005-08-08T03:48:47Z

Title: Adjusting
Rating: [NC-17]
Character: [All of Nsync]Pairings: JC/Eminem, Joshtin
Summary: After years of being lovers, JC adjusts to a life with and without Justin. A chance meeting with Eminem and things will never be the same. Incomplete.
Warnings: [slash, drug/alcohol abuse, explicit sexual content, etc.]
URL Link: http://nsyncfiction.com/viewstory.php?sid=8395

For newbies to Live Journal

2005-08-06T21:23:06Z

Had some free time and thought I should type this up! :)

There are a few *rules* listed on the USER INFO page, but first you do need a LJ account... its free, lol!

You can post two ways, either using the LJ website (menu: Journal > Update) or using a client. When posting, you must select "nsync_fiction" in the POST TO box.

No member can post until they email us the website link where there stories are on. Btw, this is stated in the rules... lol!

If anyone else has any questions, any 'how to's'... just reply here and it'll be answered asap!

Feedback Request

2005-08-04T19:09:57Z

Title: Operation: Off With The Devil Horns
Rating: [R]
Character: Main character-Chris. Justin, Lance, JC and Joey make an appearance in later chapters.
Summary: In 2001, you witnessed when Chris Kirkpatrick let his face grace that beard in the shape of horns. Well this is a dark comedy in which two teenage girls decide to take action into their own hands... Written by Gina and Rod (whitestargirl). This story is completed.

Warnings: [adult language, sexual situations implied, slash implied]
URL Link: http://www.nsyncfiction.com/viewstory.php?sid=3882

Feedback Request

2005-08-04T04:02:05Z

[Title] "In the Eyes of the Beholder"
[Rating] PG-13
[Character] JC Chasez
[Summary] After years of estrangement from each other, Erika Sanchez and JC Chasez are reunited to re-establish their old friendship. As they grow dangerously closer, she struggles against keeping her secret love for him to herself. How long does it take to be seen in the eyes of the man she loves?
[Warnings] Minor alcohol abuse and language.
[URL] http://www.nsyncfiction.com/viewstory.php?sid=6108

I wrote this story 5 years ago, but I'm only now finishing its sequel. Please review if you have a minute, but take your time because it's done and I know there are other authors here that have writer's block and need inspiring feedback. Thank you in advance!

Feedback Requested

2005-08-03T15:15:15Z

Title: Who Would Have Thought
Rating: R
Character: Justin Timberlake
Summary: Ashely goes through a horrible experience with her long term boyfriend but is convinced their still in love. She's helped by a stranger who humbly takes her into his house and cares for her but what will his not so unknown best friend/owner of the house think? Will they hate each other, or even worse fall in love?
Warnings: violence/death, adult language, sexual situations
URL Link: http://www.nsyncfiction.com/viewstory.php?sid=6789

(this story is incomplete)

Feedback Request

2005-08-03T04:15:33Z

Title: Seventeen [AU, Incomplete]
Rating: R
Character: Justin Timberlake
Summary: A world of possibility at your fingertips, all the time in the world, endless privileges, the future coming faster than you anticipate. This is what it is to be Seventeen.
Warnings: language, alcohol/drug abuse, sexual situations
URL Link: http://www.nsyncfiction.com/viewstory.php?sid=8034

I'm completely stuck on this story -- I'm looking for any and all criticism and suggestions for how to further continue this one. Thanks
xox
Lauren

Feedback For: Secrets & Lies

2005-08-01T23:12:14Z

Had some free time at work, so YaY... I did my first review! :)

Secrets & Lies by whitestargirl

Loved the point of view! Its rarely used and definitely a nice change.

You may want to proof read it again and be more cautious with future chapters... I spotted a few tense mistakes, minor spelling errors too.

The dialogue was awesome... its obvious you're a fan of the time period (so am I!) cause it shows you know what you're doing. Even though you lost me a few times, wasn't sure if Lance was talking to Justin or Justin talking to Lance... lol!

The first two chapters started out great, but I felt that chapter three and four were rushed (especially the sex scene, you tease!)... and a bit jumpy. Lance's interest in Justin was obvious, but Justin's kinda came out of nowhere for me even though he was being real 'suave' in chpt 3. I'd love more descriptions too, you're working with such an awesome time period... have fun with it! And reading chapter 4, it made me wonder... was Justin just gay-curious or what?

And the letter? His engagement? Poor Lance.

So many questions... but I bet you planned that? Making us readers beg for answers that hopefully the next chapter will bring? :)

Member Update....

2005-08-01T17:16:39Z

Sorry... I was very m.i.a this past weekend, I left poor Joone all alone... but she did awesome, YaY! :)

Thanks to everyone who's joined, it looks like we're starting out great! I changed a few settings, we're now Open Membership! But please remember to send us an email at nfcom_journal@yahoo.com with a website where your stories are online... you will not be able to post until we're sure you're an Author. It'd be great if you also mention your LJ name to avoid confusion.

LJ users fear_of_moths, and lawlerzgr8... we're waiting for your emails! :)

Feedback Request

2005-07-29T16:07:19Z

Title: Just A Memory
Rating: [R]
Character: [Justin Timberlake]
Summary: Madison and Justin used to be best friends, they bothed tried to forget about each other. Madison along with her friend Jayne are working for a local news paper in LA. They get a job interviewing *NSYNC, what will happen when Justin an Madison meet up again after six years. What secrets are they trying to hide from each other. What will happen when things start to come together.
Warnings: [adult language]
URL Link: http://www.nsyncfiction.com/viewstory.php?sid=6354

Feedback Request

2005-07-29T04:25:20Z

Title: Black Roses Red [Incomplete]
Rating: R
Character: Justin Timberlake
Summary: Aubrey has never known love. Justin knows it all too well.
Warnings: alcohol/drug abuse
URL Link: http://www.nsyncfiction.com/viewstory.php?sid=8690

Feedback Request

2005-07-27T03:10:46Z

Title: Secrets & Lies
Rating: [R - Not suitable for readers under age]
Character: Justin, Lance
Summary: AU. Justin and Lance are the main protagonists in this story set in late Victorian times. NOT YET COMPLETED.
Warnings: [slash, minor sexual content]
URL Link: http://www.nsyncfiction.com/viewstory.php?sid=3871

just a reminder to everyone joining the community

2005-07-26T23:41:48Z

there is a link that says: join this community when you click on the USER INFO icon up there.

when you do use that to join the community, please dont forget to email us @ nfcom_journal@yahoo.com with a link to a website containing your stories. you wont be able to post until we verify the link you send us. it would also be helpful if you include your lj name so it would be easier for us to figure out who's who when activating an account.

ok that's it so far.

so paging:

fear_of_moths
lawlerzgr8
lroberts

please email us your info so we can activate your account.

thanks and hope to see y'all 'round here!

joone :P

Hey Hey!

2005-07-26T19:33:23Z

Welcome to NF.com Feedback Club

As a writer of fanfic, I guess I can say that the best reward I can ever get are feedbacks from readers. Be it a short: Ohhh! Loved it! Or a long litany of how much my story sucked, it didn’t matter as long as I get a response from the readers. Feedbacks feed my drive to write more, especially when the almighty WRITER’S BLOCK smack me right in the face (like right now – help!)

Feedbacks can also be a great tool for improvement. It’s the best way I can pick up suggestions, ideas and hints on what’s working and not working for my story. That’s why I readily volunteered myself when vikkikirky82 came up with the Feedback Club idea, because I believed in it.

Yes, I get giddy even with a simple – love, love your story, update soon! feedback. Who would like that, right? But I would also like to see a feedback that would slap me around a little bit. Challenge me in a way.

That’s what NF.com Feedback Club is aiming for. Hopefully this community would do just that, challenge writers and give them the drive to write better, be a good if not the best storyteller.

So, come on in, the door is open … don't forget to drop by the USER INFO PAGE for some 411. We promise you good times!