DaMoyre ([info]damoyre) wrote in [info]naruto_500,
@ 2005-03-19 20:58:00
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Challenge #2; FIC: The Minute of Decay
Title: The Minute of Decay
Author: DaMoyre
Pairing: Orochimaru/Sasuke
Rating: NC-17
Warnings: yaoi, angst, dark
Spoilers: For the anime and the manga.
Disclaimer: I don't own Naruto. Just having a little fun here!

A/N: In the 700-word range.



there's not much left to love
too tired today to hate
I feel the empty
I feel the minute of decay
I'm on my way down now, I'd like to take you with me
I'm on my way down


-- Marilyn Manson

~ * ~

"I'm tired of waiting," Sasuke snapped, bitter words from a bitter heart. "You promised me--"

"I promised I'd give you enough power to get your revenge," Orochimaru hissed, cold hands on Sasuke's back, running up and down, following the outline of his spine. "I've kept my end of the deal, Sasuke-kun."

"Don't call me that."

"Then don't act like a child. You must be patient." The sannin moved behind him again, hips grinding, hot skin against the cool silk of Orochimaru's robe. Sasuke felt his body stretching, shivering, even against his will. It was beyond reason, this need, as powerful as his thirst for vengeance. His knees felt weak, his legs trembling, about to give in as pain shot through his body.

The source of his torture and his pleasure were one and the same.

"But you promised me..." Sasuke's breath caught in his throat, a hiss, and then a moan, bending over the small desk in the spartan room he'd been assigned at Otogakure. A ninja's life was never one of luxury.

"The timing is wrong." Long fingers, cold as ice, tracing invisible patterns on his stomach. Then down, curling on the throbbing flesh, squeezing very lightly.

"Ah...ah!" Sasuke cried out and then bit his bottom lip until he could taste blood.

"Good boy," a slithery whisper, and Orochimaru's wet lips on the back of his neck, kissing, nibbling, the long tongue stretching until it was licking his ear.

A wave of revulsion washed over Sasuke, and he felt his body tensing, a part of him wanting to pull away, to run out of this room, out of this place, out of the snake's grip.

But the pleasure...the pleasure was unbearable. No, he couldn't stop.

Not now.

"Then...then when?" His voice breaking, echoing his thoughts, but the question carried a different meaning.

"Soon, my student," Orochimaru murmured. Their hips rocking, finding a pace, a rhythm. "We'll find him...trap him...kill him."

Itachi.

"Yes," Sasuke whimpered. "Yes."

The room was dark, eyes tightly shut, rolling back inside Sasuke's head. The friction increased, rubbing up and down, a firm grip on his cock. Orochimaru's weight on his back, riding him, pushing him further down over the desk. A wet tongue tickling his ear, sliding in and out; Orochimaru's cold breath, never warm. Everything about this man was cold.

He reached out with trembling hands, gripping the edges of the desk, sinking his teeth on the wooden surface, muffling a loud moan, his climax. White seed spilled on Orochimaru's hand.


Sasuke lost track of time. How long had he been standing there, partially undressed, bent over that desk? Sore and spent, viscous liquid trickling down his legs.

"Sasuke," the cruel voice he knew so well, the one that spoke to him in dreams and nightmares.

"Orochimaru." Sasuke straightened up, bracing himself on the desk, pulling his pants back up. But when he turned around, the figure on the bed was not what he was expecting to see.

It was like looking in the mirror: dark eyes, dark hair, the Sharingan.

Like a blow to his stomach, needless to his heart, the oxygen in the room was suddenly lacking.

"I hate you," he hissed, his hands curling into fists. "I hate you."

"Good," Itachi said. "You're almost there, foolish little brother. Almost."

Then the illusion was gone, and Orochimaru was sitting in front of him again. The golden eyes were lit with amusement, lips curved at the corners.

"Stop doing that," Sasuke said, his voice cool, the blaze of his rage suddenly extinct.

"But you're doing so well." Orochimaru stood up and walked towards the door. Their meeting was over for tonight. "So very well." He laughed, the sound floating over the room, chilling the air like a glacier.

It was a trick Orochimaru used often, sometimes during training, creating illusions of Itachi and allowing Sasuke to 'kill' him, over and over again.

He'd taken Itachi's life so many times, painted his hands in crimson, eaten his brother's beating heart. Revenge was at the tip of his fingers, the taste of blood on the tip of his tongue. It would be the real thing soon.

Very soon

Orochimaru had promised.


- end -



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[info]sintari
2005-03-20 03:16 am UTC (link)
He'd taken Itachi's life so many times, painted his hands in crimson, eaten his brother's beating heart.

I adore this imagery! *___* I loved this - the coldness between Sasuke and Orochimaru, yet the heat Sasuke's hatred for Itachi. Nice!

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[info]ayonoi
2005-03-20 03:21 am UTC (link)
^___^;;; dayem woman...Orochimaru scares the crap out of me sometimes because I think is pretty much capable of anything and I am glad to say that you get him RIGHT. His character is the twisted man we have come to love.

Gahhh...what an illusion to pull at that time.

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[info]errata_sonata
2005-03-20 03:31 am UTC (link)
Oh dear god, this disturbed me, and fic NEVER EVER disturbs me. I must congratulate you for that. Simply freaking amazing writing, amazing EVERYthing...I love you. x_x ::DIES:: <3 Wow. Damn. My hat goes off to you.

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[info]cynical_siren
2005-03-20 03:56 am UTC (link)
Yeow! That was so friggen awesome! Glad to see someone who can get him right for once... (it's getting as sad as the Hellsing fandom... making a clearly evil nutcase some touchy-feely sap) Not you of course, other writers... *Runs off to finish writing Naruto crossover*

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[info]kurafufu
2005-03-20 04:05 am UTC (link)
[loves]

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[info]airairo
2005-03-20 05:16 am UTC (link)
Ooohh. I liked this. I feel so pervy for liking them together, but I do anyway. XD

But I do love Oro's twisted teaching methods here and I really liked: Everything about this man was cold. Very nice!

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[info]dirtyoldlady
2005-03-20 05:21 am UTC (link)
Gwah! X) You've absolutely slain me. At least I died happy! :D I could go through here and pick out the lines I thought were especially gorgeous, but I'd just be copy/pasting pretty much the whole fic all over again. I just really love your turns of phrase, and the characterization here is just creepily good.

Thank you! :)

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[info]soul_anastasy
2005-03-20 11:50 am UTC (link)
it was just what i was looking for!!! this is amazing. you have my love. orochi is fascinating and so cool!

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[info]keio
2005-03-20 02:47 pm UTC (link)
Wonderful dichotomy on Sasuke's part, his coolness/indifference versus his rage. This ambivalence is the tension of the entire ficlet. *nice guy pose* well done! ^__^

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[info]kayoko_chan
2005-03-20 03:05 pm UTC (link)
as weird as this sounds...i was giggling by the end of this thing.

i don't think that's the reaction you're supposed to get...

am i strange?

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[info]mojojessjo
2005-03-20 04:13 pm UTC (link)
I am simply stunned speechless at the power that was contained within that fic. If I spent the time going through and picking lines out that I adored, it would almost be as long as the fic itself!

Fantastic job! I can't wait to see more from you very very soon!

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[info]paxnirvana
2005-03-21 12:42 am UTC (link)
Guh! Hot-wrong. Nasty, twisty and so very Orochimaru... Poor Sasuke!

There's a quote about revenge that I can't quite remember perfectly but it goes sort of like this: 'those who seek revenge must first dig two graves'. The implication is that devoting oneself to revenge will destroy the one seeking it too. And here, Sasuke's beginning to realize that... *shivers* Chillingly good work.

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[info]mackzazzle
2005-03-21 01:52 am UTC (link)
Creepy, but... really, really cool. Fantastic imagery. Oh, Orochimaru, you child molester, you.

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[info]toushi
2005-03-21 11:00 am UTC (link)
Woah.. *shivers* Your writing was perfect o-o It's so freaky. My hat also goes off to you. Very nice. You rock <3

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[info]nicotinedragon
2005-03-25 08:37 pm UTC (link)
Now, that is just freakin' hot.

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am late
[info]a_white_rain
2006-06-07 03:27 pm UTC (link)
that was hot.

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Re: am late
(Anonymous)
2006-09-09 03:05 am UTC (link)
Uh...this was a lil uh scary. Wtf man?

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[info]campurr
2006-11-01 11:11 am UTC (link)
Delicious delusions.......well done.

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