lalapooch ([info]lalagirl208) wrote in [info]mugenxfuu,
@ 2008-02-12 02:17:00
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Wrath - Mugen/Fuu
Hi, here's the third fic for my [info]7_deadly_sins_ claim... the prompt is Wrath. ^_^ It's 2:22 AM here and I have an exam tomorrow at 7:30 AM. Damn it, Mugen/Fuu is killing my grades. *sigh*

Wrath: An Implosion of Sorts

Author: [info]lalagirl208
Fandom: Samurai Champloo
Characters/Pairing: Mugen/Fuu
Prompt: Wrath
Word Count: 1,272
Rating: PG
Disclaimer: I don’t own Samurai Champloo.
Author's Notes: Mugen-centric piece. It’s sort of a retelling of the last 2 episodes, oh-so-subtly Fuugenified. This is an angst-fic, by the way. Oh, and the part where Mugen rescues Fuu is actually my favorite Fuugen moment. It’s just so sweet.

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Also, I tried making an icon... but it was utter fail. I really need to brush up on my graphics skills. *sigh*



I made two, really. The other one's the one I'm using right now.


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[info]kiasama
2008-02-12 12:06 am UTC (link)
Really, really liked the fic, you portrayed Mugens feelings really well. And that's my favourite Fuugen moment too, I'd always prefered them over Jin/Fuu (do they even have a nickname?), but the last two episodes just sealed the deal.

And hey, the icons good! A hell of a lot better than I could do!

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[info]lalagirl208
2008-02-12 03:37 am UTC (link)
thank you. ^_^ The truth is, up until episode 24, I had no idea that there was even a Mugen/Fuu or a Jin/Fuu. I saw sweet Jin was towards Fuu in some of the first episodes (e.g. following her, when Mugen decided to abandon her) but I really didn't think much about it except that he was being normal because that's just what Jin was -- he was decent. And it would have been fine with me if they ended up together, I would have at least been indifferent. I wouldn't have shipped it. But I wouldn't have thought it was a bad idea either.

I didn't see the MugenFuu at first because I always thought that it was impossible. Mugen was too... Mugen. He just wasn't the type who... well, he wasn't the type who 'loved'.

But in episode 24, when Jin and Fuu have that mysterious conversation, the Mugen/Fuu hit me full force...(Yeah, my interpretation entails romance... Jin like Fuu and Fuu likes Mugen... because if it was all 'friendship' then why did the animators bother to show that Mugen was watching Jin and Fuu hug with that unreadable expression on his face? and why did they insert that 'Why don't you go?', 'Take care of Fuu' *insert Jin's defeated look here* scene?!) And suddenly all those scenes with the pirates, with Sara... Fuu crying for Mugen... they all started to mean something to me...

and episode 25, ack, I must've replayed that scene a hundred times now. XD That's what made me a solid Mugen/Fuu shipper... XD

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Ack, sorry, I got carried away with the post. ahahaha. XD

Thank you~ I'm glad you liked the fic. Mugen is hard to write. I can't quite grasp his thinking as easily as I could grasp Sasuke's... *sigh* oh well. That's why we have practice, right? ahah. XD

I'm glad you liked the icon too. ^^ I just realized now that I forgot to put a border. ahah. >

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[info]half_fledged
2008-02-18 03:12 pm UTC (link)
You know, I've read all three of these fics of yours now and I just wanted to let you know that they are, in a word, fantastic. I really like the inner voices you use for the characters (especially Fuu's - people never seem to get her right in my mind). This one is very well written, too. I do have a few critiques, mostly concerned with the first couple paragraphs. when you say "save but one," it's a little awkward - "save one" would be a little smoother.

He knew that all too well – and that was perhaps the reason why he was so angry – because he was powerless – something he had never ever had to experience in his whole life… or maybe because it was because the guy hurt Fuu… he didn’t know… it didn’t matter anyway, there was nothing he could do but give in.

My only real gripe with this sentence is the intense run-on-ing-ness-with-dashes...and ellipses. Don't get me wrong, the meaning of this sentence is awesome - I particularly enjoy how you show Mugen's stream of consciousness, how he shifts from considering why he's angry to not really caring why he's angry (or incapacitated). I just think this sentence got a little over-punctuated.

She really was stupid. There she was, just a mere swipe away from that sharplethaldeadly scythe, and still she wasn’t running. It made him want to strangle her.

I love this bit. That's all I have to say.

So. Long review. Sorry. But I really enjoy these things and I hope to see the rest of the seven deadly sins from you! (Er...in story format, I mean.)

Kudos.

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[info]lalagirl208
2008-03-13 11:29 am UTC (link)
thank you~ ^_^ I appreciate your review very much. I love long reviews. XD I'll take note of those things you told me... but... ahhh.. don't expect much *twiddles thumbs*. Seriously, I can't count the number of times I've been told that I use dashes and ellipses excessively. @_@ I can't seem to fix it. Sorry. hehe.

Ahahha... the seven deadly sins... XD I'm certain that I can do them all... just not in story format. hahaha... the story format ones... mmm... I'm trying. haha. XD I'm off to write sloth right now, so... bye. ^^

thank you again~

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