Cate ([info]sheafrotherdon) wrote in [info]mcsmooch,
@ 2008-06-11 23:39:00
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Safety by [info]sheafrotherdon
~ 200 words; set right after the last scene in 4x20: The Last Man



He makes a list –

– (as physicists are wont to do).

Closed mouth kisses . . .

. . . determined (come back safe);

an affectionate, glancing brush of lips (g'morning);

pecks on the cheek (a masquerade; no innocence); soft, sweet, open-mouthed (. . . you . . . you); quick, eager, desperate (thank god); barest breath (I'm gonna . . .oh . . .); steadfast (promise); thoughtful (still here?); languid, clumsy, drifting (brain . . . it's – gone?); hesitant (couldn't save him . . .); needy (been too long); hands at his face, at his hips, in his hair (I missed you – can't say it, please, please); an exhale – warmth; he belongs. He belongs.

He decides: One more. I can hold on for that.

And he waits – in the dark, beneath rock, without bearing; he waits, makes lists, pits memory against pain. John, he thinks as he closes his eyes; John he thinks as his thoughts ebb away.

Kiss

– closed lips, feverish, dusty; rough hands and split nails; words – there are words where intuition used to –

"Rodney."

"M'here?"

A short burst of breath against his face; a ghost of laughter; a firm kiss that lingers. "I know you are, buddy. I got you. You're okay."

Rodney squints, risks a glance into the glare of lamps and flashlights. "Yeah."

(More than one)

"I got you."

(Safe)




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[info]altyronsmaker
2008-06-12 04:48 am UTC (link)
Yikes! OH loved it!
Rodney, hurt, waiting and listing all the ways John kisses....

that is perfection!

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[info]sheafrotherdon
2008-06-12 04:51 pm UTC (link)
Thank you, sweets!

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[info]ladyflowdi
2008-06-12 04:50 am UTC (link)
Ooohh, I love this. The almost quiet faith Rodney had in John finding him was heartbreaking and beautiful. Absolutely gorgeous, thank you for sharing it!

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[info]sheafrotherdon
2008-06-12 04:51 pm UTC (link)
aw, thank you!

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[info]d_odyssey
2008-06-12 04:57 am UTC (link)
Wonderful, love the list and word associations. Drifting (brain . . . it's – gone?) (happens to me everytime I stare at Joe or David picspam) Oh, Rodney making lists of kisses waiting for John, who he knew would find him, ending with safe. Awww, hugs them both!

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[info]sheafrotherdon
2008-06-12 04:52 pm UTC (link)
eee, thank you!

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[info]tex
2008-06-12 05:17 am UTC (link)
Rodney's mind is such a beautiful thing. Especially the way you describe it. Lovely.

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[info]sheafrotherdon
2008-06-12 04:52 pm UTC (link)
thank you, love!

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[info]siriaeve
2008-06-12 06:40 am UTC (link)
Oh, Catelet. ♥

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[info]sheafrotherdon
2008-06-12 04:53 pm UTC (link)
*snorfles you*

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[info]sloganeer
2008-06-12 08:19 am UTC (link)
Here's something funny: I read this twice before I remembered what the very end of Last Man was. I forgot that they're all still trapped under that building! This made it better, though :).

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[info]sheafrotherdon
2008-06-12 04:53 pm UTC (link)
heee, thank you, duck

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[info]beadattitude
2008-06-12 08:55 am UTC (link)
::lower lip wobbles:: Oh Rodney!! ::hugs him and you so tight::

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[info]sheafrotherdon
2008-06-12 04:53 pm UTC (link)
yaaay! thank you, sweets!

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[info]unaccompanied_g
2008-06-12 09:11 am UTC (link)
Oh, oh, oh, this was lovely.
hesitant (couldn't save him . . .); needy (been too long); hands at his face, at his hips, in his hair (I missed you – can't say it, please, please); an exhale – warmth; he belongs. He belongs.

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[info]sheafrotherdon
2008-06-12 04:55 pm UTC (link)
Thank you! ♥

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[info]sffan
2008-06-12 11:06 am UTC (link)
Oohh. Good one! So Rodney to categorize kisses ;) You did a great job describing them, too.

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[info]sheafrotherdon
2008-06-12 04:55 pm UTC (link)
thank you, sweets!

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[info]sihayab
2008-06-12 11:39 am UTC (link)
Yes! Because Rodney would *so* list things, categorize, order.

My heart stuttered when I realized he was trapped -- waiting for rescue.

Yay for a happy ending!

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[info]sheafrotherdon
2008-06-12 04:55 pm UTC (link)
thank you, sweets!

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[info]dogeared
2008-06-12 12:49 pm UTC (link)
as;dflasdkfj oh so beautiful, Cates!! ♥! And oh oh Rodney, holding on!! And you say you don't like poetry. :>

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[info]sheafrotherdon
2008-06-12 04:56 pm UTC (link)
I dun like poetry! :"> but I like me some jenns! ♥

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[info]kassrachel
2008-06-12 01:28 pm UTC (link)
Oh! This makes me clutch at my heart. :-)

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[info]sheafrotherdon
2008-06-12 04:56 pm UTC (link)
♥ thank you, sweets!

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[info]lysambre
2008-06-12 01:31 pm UTC (link)
Oh, I love this !

Thanks for sharing :)

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[info]sheafrotherdon
2008-06-12 04:56 pm UTC (link)
thank you, sweets!

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[info]amberlynne
2008-06-12 01:40 pm UTC (link)
Oh, Rodney. *dusts him off* Your mind is strange and wonderful place. And I just love the little, to quote aitches, meep-clench-eeee! that John saying buddy gives me every single time. OH BOYS! OH YOU! ♥

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[info]sheafrotherdon
2008-06-12 04:56 pm UTC (link)
eeeee, thank you, ambers!

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[info]darsynia
2008-06-12 02:24 pm UTC (link)
Oh, YAY. What makes this even better was I read them as Rodney's perceptions of his own kisses at first, so then at the end I realized and went back to re-read and it was ten times more awesome than before.

I really tend to dislike the pace of stories in this style but I've learned to throw what I think I like out the window when it comes to your writing :P

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[info]sheafrotherdon
2008-06-12 04:58 pm UTC (link)
I don't usually write stories like this, but it was a wee bit of odd stuck in my head last night. I'm glad you liked it!

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[info]melagan
2008-06-12 03:11 pm UTC (link)
Rescue kisses!!!

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[info]sheafrotherdon
2008-06-12 04:58 pm UTC (link)
yaaay! ♥ thank you, sweets!

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[info]mercury973
2008-06-12 03:21 pm UTC (link)
Just wonderful.

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[info]sheafrotherdon
2008-06-12 04:58 pm UTC (link)
thank you!

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[info]accidentalfan
2008-06-12 04:41 pm UTC (link)
Oh just lovely. What a good way for Rodney to keep himself distracted. (And us too.)

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[info]sheafrotherdon
2008-06-12 04:59 pm UTC (link)
thank you, sweets!

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[info]gnine
2008-06-12 04:41 pm UTC (link)
Oh wow, beautiful! Love the "I got you" (Safe). So perfect, so them! ^_^

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[info]sheafrotherdon
2008-06-12 04:59 pm UTC (link)
thank you! ♥

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[info]beeej
2008-06-12 07:05 pm UTC (link)
Aww. Rodney's happy thoughts. ♥

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[info]sheafrotherdon
2008-06-12 09:29 pm UTC (link)
eeeee ♥

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[info]ladyoflisquill
2008-06-12 07:40 pm UTC (link)
Oh, lovely. I really wanted to read some 'buried under the building' fic and this was perfect.

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[info]sheafrotherdon
2008-06-12 09:29 pm UTC (link)
yay! thank you!

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[info]stillwaters11
2008-06-12 08:57 pm UTC (link)
I love this.

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[info]sheafrotherdon
2008-06-12 09:30 pm UTC (link)
thank you, sweets!

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[info]devin_chain
2008-06-13 02:31 am UTC (link)
*hugs them* Thank you for saving Rodney at the end. *clings to both*

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[info]sageness
2008-06-13 03:52 am UTC (link)
Oh, yes, this is gorgeous. ♥

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[info]krisdia
2008-06-17 02:44 am UTC (link)
Oh, I absolutely adore the idea of Rodney cataloging their types of kisses - and the reason why he's making his list tugs at my heart even more...

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