a hyperintelligent shade of the colour blue ([info]phinnia) wrote in [info]house_wilson,
@ 2007-10-14 19:24:00
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Current mood: good
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Entry tags:fic author: phinnia, fic genre: drabbles, fic rating: pg-13

travelogue: four drabbles about passport stamps
Title:Travelogue: four drabbles about passport stamps
Author[info]phinnia
Characters: Wilson POV, brief appearances by Cuddy, House and Bonnie; the last one is definitely H/W
Disclaimer: Not mine; I promise to put them back when I'm done.
Rating: PG-13, mostly for the last one.
Author's Notes: Absecon is a suburb of Atlantic City. Masala is an Indian spice mix. And the Simpsons really does come on at 6:00AM in Mumbai.



Canada
The true north strong and free - of tangled backstory, others' expectations. Flashpoint: his first solo crossing, how the Quebecois guards spit tabac and epithets in equal measures as he waited for the final stamps on his student visa. The heavy seal embossed rows of leaves in red ink around the date - he took his first steps alone on foreign soil with the giddy bells of excitement and terror ringing in his ears. Things here were different - extra letters, bilingual signage, colored money pledging allegiance to a foreign Queen - even as habits made things the same again.

Israel
The border guards are impossibly young. He feels old beyond his years (not to mention lecherous) as he smiles at them, and more than a little nervous at the lazy way they hold their sidearms. The country is beautiful and fierce, a woman flashing stilletto heels and bloodied teeth on the world stage. He gets off a bus two blocks from the Wailing Wall, trailing the lilting prayers of the devoted - then has the breath knocked sprawling from him by palpable masses of superheated air. Four dead, headlines scream; it takes years not to mentally uptick the body count.

Mexico
Bonnie shadows his steps at the airport; he looks for the complimentary shuttle, fumbles thickened words from high school Spanish. They might as well be in Absecon as Acapulco: busboys clamor for American dollars and the decor is Taco Bell tarted up for the prom, daubed with glitter and tuneless mariachi bands. Remembers little about the trip but aches from the burn of re-entry - Cuddy's voice, stretched thin by sleepless nights and aging copper wires; the lump in his throat when he found out how House had played chicken with the devil and limped away to tell the tale.

India
Mumbai: brilliant washes of color, silk, spice. Street children beg with soulful eyes; House scatters them using his cane and baleful stares, Wilson soothes, tossing small change that echoes silver in his well of Western guilt. Bart Simpson blends with the endless traffic at six a.m, creating a surreal backdrop to the ragged gasps and moans of morning sex. There is masala in everything - by day four of their stay his blistered tongue yearns for cafeteria meatloaf. Even blowjobs seem a little spicier; when asked about the conference House gleefully passes this on to Cuddy, who doesn't ask again.




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[info]moonlight_wynn
2007-10-15 02:33 am UTC (link)
Love the last one, brilliant!

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[info]phinnia
2007-10-15 05:56 pm UTC (link)
Thanks! I'm thinking of expanding that one to full length just to have a reason to write that phone call. <3

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[info]recrudescence
2007-10-15 02:57 am UTC (link)
You paint such vivid pictures with so few words. I can't pick a favorite; each snippet is so different and distinct, but they're all wonderful.

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[info]phinnia
2007-10-15 05:55 pm UTC (link)
*grins* Thank you so much. I really love your work, so that means a lot. :-)

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[info]arwydd
2007-10-15 03:47 am UTC (link)
I love the image of Israel as "a woman flshing stilletto heels and bloodies teeth on the world stage." The descriptive power of these passages is incredible. Wonderful job!

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[info]phinnia
2007-10-15 05:54 pm UTC (link)
Thank you! :-)

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(Anonymous)
2007-10-15 08:17 am UTC (link)
Each one is evocative by itself; together they are very powerful. _Loved_ the last one, naturally :-)
Jo
-the one without LJ-

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[info]phinnia
2007-10-19 03:51 am UTC (link)
Thank you~!

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[info]chase_austenfan
2007-10-15 04:53 pm UTC (link)
Beautiful- I love all the sensory images. Very evokative.

There was one Tiny thing that I was curious on... but perhaps it's because I've never actually been that far West in Canada.... given Wilson's age and that he is American- would he have needed a passport to get into Canada? We always vacationed in Ontario growing up and I don't even remember them checking driver's liscenes.

Regardless... I throughly enjoyed these word painting. Fantastic.

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[info]phinnia
2007-10-15 05:51 pm UTC (link)
It's because of the visa - they wouldn't have required it, but it makes your life significantly easier (speaking as a former international student/visa holder.) Thanks!

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[info]axmxz
2007-10-15 05:44 pm UTC (link)
Extraordinarily well-written stuff. Israel especially.

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[info]phinnia
2007-10-15 05:54 pm UTC (link)
Thank you! I was really pleased with that one. :-)

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[info]psyko_kittie
2007-10-15 07:34 pm UTC (link)
Fantastic!!

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[info]phinnia
2007-10-16 05:22 pm UTC (link)
Thanks!

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[info]petrichor_fizz
2007-10-15 07:57 pm UTC (link)
I really like your style, it's refreshing. Great stuff.

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[info]phinnia
2007-10-16 05:21 pm UTC (link)
Thank you! :-)

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[info]pwcorgigirl
2007-10-15 09:52 pm UTC (link)
These are so vivid and gorgeously written. I love how Wilson is at a different "place" in his life as well as in the geography of each one. And this line -- how House had played chicken with the devil and limped away to tell the tale -- is just the best summation ever of what happened to House.

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[info]phinnia
2007-10-16 05:21 pm UTC (link)
Thanks! That's one of my favorite bits, actually.

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[info]oursoliloquies
2007-10-17 09:18 am UTC (link)
These are beautiful. They flow so lyrically and are great metaphorical portrayals of Wilson and his take on the world and the people he knows.

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[info]phinnia
2007-10-17 06:38 pm UTC (link)
Thank you. :-)

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[info]emmarrrrr
2007-10-18 11:59 pm UTC (link)
Just... Wow. Stunning - Especially Israel. All of it.

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[info]phinnia
2007-10-19 03:52 am UTC (link)
Thank you. :-)

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[info]joe_pike_junior
2008-07-31 02:21 am UTC (link)
I agree with [info]pwcorgigirl. Remembers little about the trip but aches from the burn of re-entry - Cuddy's voice, stretched thin by sleepless nights and aging copper wires; the lump in his throat when he found out how House had played chicken with the devil and limped away to tell the tale.
That is just so beautiful. The image, the anxiety that undercuts the whole thing, and that description of House's illness.

The passport stamps are a great way to tie the story together, as well.
Everything is so restless, moving.

Well done.

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[info]phinnia
2008-07-31 02:34 am UTC (link)
Thank you! I have kind of a thing for microfiction. <3 <3 Glad you enjoyed them. <3

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