hd_worldcup: Fool (Or, The Many Good Deeds of Draco Malfoy) -- Team Canon

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@ 2008-04-01 07:08:00

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Fool (Or, The Many Good Deeds of Draco Malfoy) -- Team Canon
Title: Fool (Or, The Many Good Deeds of Draco Malfoy)
Team: Canon
Author: avocado_love
Prompt: The Fool
Wordcount: 18,000+
Rating: R
Warnings: EWE, language, sexual situations
Summary: "You haven’t done one brave or noble thing in your life, Malfoy. Then you come into my house and ask me why I won’t do the right thing for you? What have you ever done for anyone?"
Author's Note Explanation of The Fool card is contained in the fic. Many glorious thanks to my betas!

Fool (Or, The Many Good Deeds of Draco Malfoy)

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yura_slash
2008-04-01 03:39 pm UTC (link)

I liked this story- interesting that both Harry and Draco seemed to take turns being the fool. The Dog Whisperer gave me a laugh, especially the way he saw Draco as a natural pack leader *snorts with laughter*

I think you did a good job keeping them in character, and I'm interested in seeing how the other members of Team Canon handle the epilogue and other issues involving what is and isn't canon. IMO, canon can be either epilogue- or non-epilogue-compliant. Not just because I didn't like the epilogue, but because it seemed so tacked on at the end there.

Anyways, great job! :)

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	lttlelola 2008-04-01 04:58 pm UTC (link)
	i loved this! i think they kept with the prompt very well, it was hidden and not glaringly obvious but once you got to the end you were shaking your head going, "how could i not see that??" i love the story, especially "you were supposed to bite him" perfect!! (Reply to this)

	rickey_a 2008-04-01 05:20 pm UTC (link)
	This was a really sweet story. I think Draco's scheming and Harry's trying to figure it out and second guess it were spot on. (Reply to this)

	accioscar 2008-04-01 05:32 pm UTC (link)
	This was very sweet! The image of Draco with a little dog was so cute, without being OOC. I think you did a good job of sticking to canon characterizations and your use of the prompt was great! My favourite line: Draco glared down at the little terrier. "You were supposed to bite him." he reminded, softly. Loved it! So funny, so Draco. Great job. :) (Reply to this)

	weasleywench 2008-04-01 06:38 pm UTC (link)
	Interesting concept. I liked how Harry kept fighting tooth and nail in order to keep the wand from Draco. Loved the line about the dog biting Harry. :D (Reply to this)

	biffes 2008-04-01 07:12 pm UTC (link)
	Yay for Kreacher! What a clever way from Draco to get information about Harry. Pyxis liked Harry from the beginning - a good sign... Funnily first I thought the dog had something to do with Ron as his patronus is a Jack Russel, you had me fooled:) It was really enjoyable and felt canonish to me. (Reply to this)

	serene_cj 2008-04-01 08:01 pm UTC (link)
	Pyxis...cuddles him I liked it, it was a great read. Wonderful (Reply to this)

	brummell 2008-04-01 08:28 pm UTC (link)
	I really liked this, the way you revealed Draco's true colors, that there is good in him, even amid his sharpness and self-interest and fastidiousness (unable to hide his wrinkling nose in the presence of the spattergroit victims!). And Pyxis was a fantastic addition :) (Reply to this)

romaine24
2008-04-01 09:16 pm UTC (link)

I liked this story a lot. Kreacher was a great addition as was the dog.

My only concern was that I personally don't see Harry hating Malfoy this much. I read in HPDH a Harry that pitied Draco. I just can't see him having this much disdain after what they all went through. I'm not saying they would be buddies or anything of the kind, but the feelings here were too strong, too much like their earlier years.

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winter_june
2008-04-01 09:17 pm UTC (link)

A wonderful fic. I like the irony about how Draco's crazy plot for recovering the wand gets what it deserves, nothing, and the little project that touches his heart (and he keeps private and tells no one about and even in the end still claims it's just business) also gets what it deserves, everything. I like Kreacher, trying to hint to a total 'hint-dumb' Harry that Draco is best for him. I love the little terrier and his instant love with Harry and Draco, while being a pest to everyone else. And over all I love how well the small quotes of the 'Fool' card fitted with the text, and give you the idea that the both of them are really acting like fools. A delicious reading!

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	absynthedrinker 2008-04-01 09:22 pm UTC (link)
	Imaginative, funny, adorable, and well written. Just the right amounts of everything. Very well done. Thanks Bubba (Reply to this)

	sherant 2008-04-01 10:07 pm UTC (link)
	waves Team Canon banner :D That was wonderful! I loved the chapter breaks with the tarot quotes and how the little Terrier was weaved into the story! Very fun and satisfying -I loved that there was more relationship development than "action." Great work! (Reply to this)

sbbo
2008-04-01 10:24 pm UTC (link)

This was a very well done story. It had element's of Rowling's style. For example, it had those little details that were easy to over-look initially but took on great importance later. In that manner the whole story tied together well at the end. It was occasionally a little heavy-handed/over-the-top in character reactions, but for the most part played the line well. After all, Draco Malfoy and Harry Potter are known for their extremes.

The use of the tarot card explanations was also a great device. I think it was the best incorporation of the theme (here and in other readings). This story was just so pleasing! The humor was well placed and it never over-powered the fact that Draco and Harry are flawed, but striving, characters. There was some brat in both of them and they both refused to play a stereotypical role. It obviously did well for the purposes of the challenge, but it could stand strongly on its own, as well. It was just amazing.

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	flaeyr 2008-04-01 10:52 pm UTC (link)
	Oh my god...The Dog Whisperer! falls over laughingwipes tears Wonderful job. You stayed true to the prompt and in character. Pyxis was lovely as well. (Reply to this)

	drgaellon 2008-04-02 12:53 am UTC (link)
	I downgraded this one point on the last question because of multiple spelling and grammatical errors, which disrupted my enjoyment of the piece. Best use of the prompt of the four. (Reply to this)

sweetiedogood
2008-04-02 01:05 am UTC (link)

Reading Notes:
I liked the opening of your story, made Harry seem more refined.

"What, Potter? Afraid of me, are you?" Malfoy gave a soft, rather undignified snort. He then produced his wand, ebony, twelve inches, which was sheathed in an elegant casing of dark wood. "Don't bother. You can hold it if you want, although we both know I have more to fear from you. The magnificent Chosen One."

The line above made me smile lots. It’s just so… Malfoy. Lol

"Hardly. What I want to know is, why are you with the Weasley girl if you don't love her?"

With this line, I began to adore your Malfoy. So, very much. It’s so direct, and straight to the point.

The mentioning of Draco thinking of Harry as the fool is a nice touch, since all your tarot thingy’s at the beginning point to Draco being the fool… or do they? Hmm…

Overall Notes:

Hm, I really did enjoy your story. I loved your Draco, honestly I did. He was so Slytherin, and yet with a heart at the same time—doing what he needed to do. The battle between him and Harry was wonderful—you could feel the desperation within Draco. I liked your things that you pulled directly from the fool card as well, it really drew the story together.

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	frayach_nicuill 2008-04-02 02:46 am UTC (link)
	Bravo!! I loved this story. Definitely a recognizably canon Harry and Draco. Plus you managed to make it sweet without being sappy, which is always a feat. It also doesn't hurt that I'm a dog fanatic ;) Yay, what a fun and engaging read. Thank you for sharing :) (Reply to this)

	hd_obsession 2008-04-02 04:03 am UTC (link)
	The tag says team ewe, just thought I'd point that out! (Reply to this) (Thread)

	hdcup_mod 2008-04-02 05:20 am UTC (link)
	Ah thank you, it is now fixed! (Reply to this) (Parent)

	sassy_cissa 2008-04-02 04:14 am UTC (link)
	Very nice use of the tarot card throughout the story. The story line was imaginative and fun. (Reply to this)

winnett
2008-04-02 04:51 am UTC (link)

I love the wand lore you've included in this story, how Draco couldn't find one to work for him and why he didn't get another made. This is one of the best excuses for Draco to confront Harry for his wand that I've seen.

The handi-wipes! OMG! Such a perfect Draco plan. I loved how you captured him, very Canon.

Pyxis is amazing. I really enjoy how you tie in the lines from the fool card into the story.

I love the juxtaposition of Harry in the beginning asking Malfoy what he is doing there, and then Draco at the end, doing the same. Nice touch!

And Pyxis at the end… Dogs totally do that. Too perfect!

This was a delightful story. Wonderful job.

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	ladyagnew 2008-04-02 05:37 am UTC (link)
	I kinda love that Harry's TV watching habits were essential to getting them together -- because obviously Cesar Millan as love connection master is the perfect solution! I really enjoyed this story, a fizzy concoction of romantic comedy conventions and still the heated, enemies-with-sizzling-chemistry attraction of classic H/D! (Reply to this)

	ayurubie 2008-04-02 06:01 am UTC (link)
	i like it. it has a different touch in it. but definitely good. though the plot is severely used. you got a best usage of it. (Reply to this)

	hd_obsession 2008-04-02 06:25 am UTC (link)
	This was a really interesting way to use the prompt, and I enjoyed reading this very much. I loved the dog and Draco's behavior towards it and the store. And as much as he denies it, it was NOT just business. I loved how in-character you kept everyone, well done! (Reply to this)

	pervyunitwins 2008-04-02 06:57 am UTC (link)
	The dog was a perfect addition. The dog shelter was an original idea. The story was funny and absolutely enjoyed myself while reading it. Even though it seemed that you were referring to Draco as the fool, there was times in the story when I was not sure if the quotes you used were referring to Draco or Harry. I thought that ambiguity added so much to the story. (Reply to this)

	suonguyen 2008-04-02 08:34 am UTC (link)
	Loved this story! Especially how all the charity did didn't mean as much as the one he did purely on whim! :D (Reply to this)

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