sprat ([info]sprat) wrote in [info]ds_flashfiction,
@ 2004-12-01 22:18:00
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"Stripped"-- by sprat
Naked without sex...plus a little sex. :)

Ray/Ray, NC-17, 2244 words.

ETA: eek! almost forgot to thank the incredible [info]qe2 for her keen-eyed beta... Thank-you!




So Ray’s stark naked and soaking wet, and he’s about to get blessed by the founder of the Aryan Brotherhood, and he’s pretty much ready to admit that his father might have had a point about his choice of careers. Because Jesus it’s cold out here--“here” being the backyard of a summerhouse by Lake Michigan--and he doesn’t even want to think about what he could have caught from that water. Plus there’s the part where he’s surrounded by a bunch of muscley neo-Nazis who would totally kick his head in if they found out that--on his dad’s side, anyway--he’s a Jew.

“You daydreaming, there, soldier?” The heel of somebody’s hand catches the back of his head. He staggers forward a half step and brutally squashes his body’s instinct to turn and hit back. “You put your goddamn chin up and try to look like the man you ain’t. That’s Abraham Nickel you’re about to meet up there.”

Right. Big honour. Ray tries to school his face into the same wowed expression he sees these other idiots wearing. This is the big initiation ceremony. They just spent the past three days getting shoved around and yelled at and half-starved so they could be ready for this. Supposed to be some kind of “rebirth” or something. Jesus.

The dirt under his bare feet is scattered with fallen leaves and sticks and sharp little rocks. He wishes he could watch where he’s stepping. It’s getting kind of hard not to panic--the rest of the group working this bust is supposed to be somewhere close by, ready to move in, but he lost contact with them yesterday. Any time, Vecchio, he thinks, squinting surreptitiously into the darkening woods. Any goddamn time… They have plenty here to make a bust on. Ray’s seen the stockpiled weapons and explosives himself. They can send these guys up for a long time just on possession charges alone.

The line moves. Ray sees the big guy up there, looking like some kind of malevolent Santa Claus with that white beard and fluffy hair. He’s putting his hands on each recruit’s head. Ray, watching, can’t help thinking how these neo-Nazis always manage to get naked and touching, like that’s the real goal of their weird little rituals. He grins down at his bare toes. And right then the woods explode.

It’s over real fast. Black-uniformed feds swarm all over the place, yelling for people to “get down, get down, get the hell on the ground.” Ray obeys with the others, even though the rocky dirt is no place he wants to put his bare skin. But it’s not like he’s got ID over here, and these guys, they don’t look like the patient types. The shouting stops. There’s combat boots everywhere, pacing around, the crackle of radios relaying orders. And then, just when Ray’s first rush of adrenaline is starting to get replaced with deep, wracking shivers and a weird sort of embarrassment, a pair of shiny leather Guccis paces into view. “You can let this one up,” says Vecchio. “He doesn’t look like much, but that’s our inside guy.”

Ray waits til he sees the combat boots step back, then pushes himself to his feet. Vecchio’s standing there in his woolen overcoat with some jazzy outfit underneath, arms crossed over his chest. Huey and Dewey are behind him, grinning.

Ray lets his hands hang down at his sides, even though he feels like using them to cover up the stuff that ought to be covered up. Lifts his chin and meets Vecchio’s eyes. “You got a problem, Vecchio? There something funny here?”

Vecchio blinks and looks down, one hand coming up to cover the back of his neck. He doesn’t say anything, which for some reason makes Ray want to kick him in the head. “Cause maybe if somebody had been a little more on the ball with the organizing, I’d still have my goddamn clothes. I mean, Christ. Were you waiting for an invitation or something?” He starts toward the house, wrapping his arms over his bare chest.

Vecchio falls in step with him. Ray’s too pissed to even glare at him, so it’s a surprise when he feels Vecchio’s fancy overcoat settle around his shoulders. It’s still warm inside, and it’s lined with silk or something. Ray pulls it close. “I mean, seriously--we had what we needed yesterday. You just figure it’d be good for me to get baptized by a bunch of crazy Nazis or something? What happened to the fucking plan?”

They’re inside the summerhouse now. The crime scene guys are in the kitchen, and there’s a whole bunch of ATFers in the living room with the weapons. Vecchio puts his hand on Ray’s back and steers him up the stairs. Ray gives him a sidelong glare. “You figure on answering me at any point, here, Vecchio? Like, sometime today, maybe?”

There isn’t much up here--just a couple of tiny, slope-ceilinged bedrooms. No lights, totally deserted. What the fuck? Ray looks at Vecchio--really looks at him for the first time--and feels his eyes widen. “What the fuck?” he repeats, out loud.

And Vecchio’s fists close around the lapels of that stupid coat and he pushes Ray back into one of those bedrooms, pushes him up against the wall, kicks the door shut behind him. It’s real dark inside, but there’s just enough light Ray can see that look on Vecchio’s face--that wide-open, scared-shitless, god-awful look. And then Vecchio’s got his hands in Ray’s wet hair and he’s kissing him.

It’s hard, hungry, open-mouthed; Ray feels his lips get bruised a little, pushed into his teeth. But Vecchio’s hands are shaking where they’re holding Ray’s head, and his body is warm and solid, draped all over Ray like a blanket, and Ray brings his arms up around him, strokes his back, pulls him in real close.

And Vecchio makes a noise in his throat and moves his hands on Ray’s body, these hard desperate touches like he isn’t even sure where to start, and his mouth is everywhere, too, wet and open, and his breath is so warm on Ray’s chilled skin. Ray can’t believe this is really the same guy here: cool-as-a-cucumber, suck-me-off-if-you-want-to Vecchio. Guy’s usually so fucking paranoid he won’t even let Ray touch him until there’s a locked door between them and the rest of the world. Usually won’t put a hand on Ray until Ray touches him first, like that way it isn’t his fault, like maybe he can get away with less Hail-Marys at his next confession. So something is definitely weird here.

But Vecchio’s got a hand on Ray’s cock now, and he’s kissing Ray deep and slow, and Ray figures what the fuck--they can always talk about it later. He leans back against the wall in the dark little room, and he listens to the ATFers giving each other orders at the bottom of the stairs, and he tries not to moan so loud they’ll hear him.

Vecchio sucks and bites his way down Ray’s neck and twists his hand on Ray’s cock. “Jesus,” Ray gasps. “Oh, yeah, Vecchio. Christ.” Vecchio lifts his head so he can kiss Ray again. “Shh,” he whispers against Ray’s lips, and his fingers are wrapped hard around Ray’s dick, and he’s jacking Ray fast, and so good… “You have to keep your mouth shut, Kowalski. Think you can do that?”

And Ray hears his head hit the wall with a thunk, and he has to think hard about every word Vecchio just said, like he was speaking Spanish or something. “Yeah, yeah,” he says finally. “Okay.”

And Vecchio kisses him again, mouths his chin and his jaw and his ear, right where the lobe meets his neck, and he takes his hand off Ray’s dick long enough to turn him around. Ray braces his hands on the wall and lets his head hang down between his arms. Vecchio’s fancy overcoat is a crumpled heap on the floor--he doesn’t remember how that happened and he doesn’t care, either. What matters is he’s naked again, but this time it’s okay, because he’s got Vecchio all down the length of him, keeping him warm, and he’s got Vecchio’s breath on the back of his neck, and Vecchio’s lips, and his hands, and Jesus, his finger all spit-wet, pushing in, opening him up.

Ray’s still buzzing from the bust they just finished, and Vecchio’s slow penetration is driving him crazy--it’s been a while, but what pain there is gets swallowed by this rush of need and heat, and he gasps, his fingernails scraping the wall. Vecchio kisses his shoulder, slides another finger in with the first. “Okay?” he asks.

God, yeah--s’fucking great,” Ray says.

And Vecchio laughs softly, his breath stirring Ray’s hair, and when his hand tightens on Ray’s dick, Ray can’t help but push back on those fingers. He’s trying to keep his mouth shut but it’s hard, oh man it’s hard, and after a while a low moan escapes him anyway. And Vecchio, he pushes his fingers deeper, closes his other hand harder on Ray’s dick, and leans in so he can breathe “shhh” right in Ray’s ear. Which sure, yeah, like that’s helpful. Ray bites his lip, breathes out hard through his nose.

And then Vecchio’s pulling his fingers away. Ray feels him shift, getting closer, and then there’s something blunt and wet pushing in. It hurts a little but Ray doesn’t care, can’t fucking think to care--Vecchio’s hand is tight and perfect on his cock, moving just the way he needs it, these long, hard strokes that shake him deep. And Vecchio’s teeth are on Ray’s neck, wet and sharp, and he’s moaning softly, just like he told Ray not to. Ray pants and closes his eyes, lets his forehead rest on the wall, opens his legs as wide as he can to let Vecchio in.

“Fuck,” Vecchio says against Ray’s neck. “Oh god, you feel so… fucking…good.” He thrusts deep and they both gasp. Ray’s so hot, and it’s hard to breathe, and oh Jesus he needs to come. He wraps his fingers around Vecchio’s, moving him faster, and Vecchio’s fucking him hard now, and Ray’s one arm can’t quite handle their combined weight. So he lets it buckle, lets his shoulder hit the wall instead, turns his head so his cheek is pressed into the paneling. Vecchio’s panting into his hair, his lips brushing Ray’s temple, and his cock is in Ray so deep, and Ray squeezes his fingers and Vecchio says “UH,” right in his ear and way too loud. And then Ray’s coming, with his face pressed against the wall and his teeth sunk into his lip so far he can taste blood, and Vecchio’s fingers are gripping his hip hard enough he knows there’ll be a bruise there tomorrow, and Vecchio’s slamming himself into Ray and it’s so fucking good Ray can’t think anymore.

“Yeah,” Vecchio gasps. “Oh…” And he thrusts hard, and his arm moves up to circle Ray’s chest, pulling him back, pulling him close, holding him right where he needs him. And then, finally, Ray feels him convulse, feels the hot spurt inside, and he slides his hand up Vecchio’s forearm where it’s gripping his chest, and he lets his head fall back against Vecchio’s shoulder.

Slowly, slowly, Vecchio lowers them both to lean against the wall again. He shifts a little and Ray winces as Vecchio slides out of him and they just stay there, breathing hard. Ray’s skin is tingling all over, and he aches where Vecchio was inside him, and his muscles are all twitching, like his brain is still firing random synapses for no reason.

“I’m sorry,” Vecchio says, pressing his lips against Ray’s sweaty shoulder, making a wet trail of kisses to his neck.

“Uh?” Ray says, which is about as coherent as he can manage right now.

He feels Vecchio smile against his nape. Feels him lip at the damp hair there, push his nose in and breathe deep. “I said I’m sorry. When they moved you yesterday, I…I wasn’t ready. We lost track of you. So.” He mouths Ray’s neck and just kind of waits there, tensed.

Ray’s still pretty sex-stupid, so it takes him a minute. “Huh,” he says finally. He lets a grin creep over his face. “Huh. Vecchio…that’s so sweet. You were worried about me.”

Vecchio snorts. “Yeah, well, it’s my job to worry about you.”

“Yeah, but I am pretty sure it is not your job to fuck me stupid at a crime scene. Nah. You were worried because you like me. Come on, Vecchio--it’s okay. You can say it.”

“Fuck you, Stanley.” Vecchio sounds pissed, but he pulls Ray closer, and Ray isn’t buying it for a second. He turns in Vecchio’s arms, gives him a slow, sloppy kiss. “Come on,” he says after a while. “You can drive me home.” He grabs the overcoat from the floor and pulls it on again, giving Vecchio a quick grin over his shoulder. “And maybe on the way you can explain how the fuck you managed to lose a vanload of neo-Nazis. Cause that’s a part of this story I’m not real clear on just yet.”

Vecchio rolls his eyes at the ceiling, but he lets Ray pull him down the stairs.



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[info]farwing
2004-12-02 04:26 am UTC (link)
Hot. Damn, you're making me like Ray/Ray! Grrrrr....

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[info]sprat
2004-12-02 09:20 pm UTC (link)
Hee. Give in to the power of the snark, [info]farwing. It is useless to resist...

Thanks!

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[info]farwing
2004-12-03 04:49 am UTC (link)
I love snark. I want to marry snark. What is this word 'resist' that you speak of?

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[info]lovekeller
2004-12-02 06:18 am UTC (link)
Oh. Wow. H.O.T.

I believe in happily ever after for Fraser/RayK, but damn, I love this.

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[info]sprat
2004-12-02 09:23 pm UTC (link)
Aw, I'm a fan of the F/K love myself. But Ray/Ray, it has its own...merits, no? ;)

Glad you liked!

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[info]shayheyred
2004-12-02 06:49 am UTC (link)
Oh, man. One of my big kinks - post-bust adrenaline fuck, with a side of I-was-worried-because-I-care. Loved it.

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[info]sprat
2004-12-02 09:24 pm UTC (link)
Oh yay! So glad I could hit one of your buttons! Thanks.

:)

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[info]kassrachel
2004-12-02 07:18 am UTC (link)
Oh, holy wow! This is fantastic.

The details are great -- that opening scene is fantastic -- the whole setup is great, and it's one I totally wouldn't have thought of -- and then, well, the sex is hot like a hot thing. So wow. Thank you.

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[info]sprat
2004-12-02 09:26 pm UTC (link)
No--thank *you*! That's great stuff to hear--I really appreciate it. And I'm glad you enjoyed!

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[info]gurrier
2004-12-02 07:59 am UTC (link)
it’s a surprise when he feels Vecchio’s fancy overcoat settle around his shoulders. It’s still warm inside, and it’s lined with silk or something.

Oooh, I like that image, RayK wrapped up in RayV's lovely coat. I loooove that coat. And Silent!Vecchio...

::sigh:: Evil woman, luring me away from F/RayK.

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[info]sprat
2004-12-02 09:32 pm UTC (link)
Yess...it's all part of my fiendish plan...[info]gurrier must be compelled to write smutty Ray/Ray...

::chuckles evilly::

Hee. All right--not really. But I am delighted you enjoyed. :)

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[info]aerye
2004-12-02 09:01 am UTC (link)
Nnrrgghhh.

I've only read about 500 words of this--enough to know I'm not going to read this perched on a chair at my parents' kitchen counter. No. I'm going to finish this when I can savor every lovely word and gasp and moan in the privacy of my own apartment, thank you very much.

Thank you very much!

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[info]sprat
2004-12-02 09:34 pm UTC (link)
Eep--not so much the story to be read in one's parents' kitchen. A wise decision, I think.

Hope you enjoy! :)

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[info]jade_starlight
2004-12-02 09:16 am UTC (link)
Um, wow. I'd say more about how freakin' hot this was, but I haven't recovered all my verbal skills yet. *fans self*

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[info]sprat
2004-12-02 09:37 pm UTC (link)
:) That's plenty! Thanks so much for commenting. I'm glad you enjoyed!

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...whew.
[info]qe2
2004-12-02 09:44 am UTC (link)
Damn, darlin': I betaed this smokin' thang and I'm STILL overcome by teh hot and sexxay, especially in combination with a smattering of plot and a healthy dose of snarky, sweat affection. It rocks. So do you. That is all.

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[info]sprat
2004-12-02 09:46 pm UTC (link)
Aww...but that's not all! Because *you* rock--this story would be kind of a mess without your clarifying questions and your insistance that everybody's limbs be accounted for. But I am glad you enjoyed the reading, and it's *great* to hear it again.

:)

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[info]akite
2004-12-02 10:20 am UTC (link)
Oh man! That had it all going: the naked, the coat, the HOT sex and most importantly, the snark. Whew! Wonderful, wonderful stuff.

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[info]sprat
2004-12-02 09:48 pm UTC (link)
Thanks so much! I'm very happy you liked this--and I really appreciate your comment. :)

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[info]brooklinegirl
2004-12-02 10:21 am UTC (link)
Um. This is gonna be in two parts 'cause it got too long. *g*

Oh my god, lady. I'm in love with you. Seriously. This is just - dear god. I think I'm broken. I mean, okay, so, I read it and was determined to give more feedback than "nrrrgh" because I fucking loved this. So I was thinking about it on the way to work (in which "thinking" means "having dirty fantasies") and man, I have to tell you, so much of this just stuck with me in, like, vast and meaningful detail. I think that's what I love so much about your writing - that it's the moments and the meaning and the details that go way beyond the sex - though I am not in ANY WAY knocking the sex, because I love the sex, I adore the sex, I worship the sex - but within the fucking, and around it, there are all these moments that just, just rock my world. Like:

Ray, watching, can’t help thinking how these neo-Nazis always manage to get naked and touching, like that’s the real goal of their weird little rituals. He grins down at his bare toes.

Okay. Yeah. All the rest of this fic, and the thing I think about first when I think about it is Ray grinning down at his bare toes. I fucking adore that.

And then, just when Ray’s first rush of adrenaline is starting to get replaced with deep, wracking shivers and a weird sort of embarrassment, a pair of shiny leather Guccis paces into view. “You can let this one up,” says Vecchio. “He doesn’t look like much, but that’s our inside guy.”

There. It's the details: Ray's shivers and reactionary adrenaline and all that, that just rocked me, but also the Guccis being the first thing he sees and oh yeah, there's Vecchio, and I just went, "Yay" real quiet out lou.

Vecchio blinks and looks down, one hand coming up to cover the back of his neck.

LOVE that reaction. Love love LOVE it. Perfect Vecchio: he was worried, and he feels badly, and he can't bring himself to say it. He's not a man of few words, but the many words he does have don't really tend to cover worry/apologies - especially when it comes to Kowalski. The physical reaction here - just, *heart*.

Ray’s too pissed to even glare at him, so it’s a surprise when he feels Vecchio’s fancy overcoat settle around his shoulders. It’s still warm inside, and it’s lined with silk or something,

It's also the physical nature of this fic - I love this, because the way you describe it, I can completely imagine what it feels like against Ray's chilled skin.

but there’s just enough light Ray can see that look on Vecchio’s face--that wide-open, scared-shitless, god-awful look. And then Vecchio’s got his hands in Ray’s wet hair and he’s kissing him.

Man. It's just - this is what I love about them. I love that they fuck so easy, sure, and I love that they fight and that they're twitchy and that they're snarky. But I love this: that they care SO much and SO hard and how you have to drive them to the very edge in order to get them to show it.

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Part Two
[info]brooklinegirl
2004-12-02 10:22 am UTC (link)
Usually won’t put a hand on Ray until Ray touches him first, like that way it isn’t his fault, like maybe he can get away with less Hail-Marys at his next confession. So something is definitely weird here.

*nodsnodsNODS* Total Vecchio. I can completely see this.

And Ray hears his head hit the wall with a thunk, and he has to think hard about every word Vecchio just said, like he was speaking Spanish or something. “Yeah, yeah,” he says finally. “Okay.”

God. I love this. Jesus, this fic is such a fucking turn-on, because you WRITE how turned-on Ray is so fucking well. It just - the story carries me along, you get caught up in the utter hotness of this, the need there, the warmth, the love, the just - man. It's wonderful.

Vecchio’s fancy overcoat is a crumpled heap on the floor--he doesn’t remember how that happened and he doesn’t care, either

I love that he doesn't even remember it coming off.

He’s trying to keep his mouth shut but it’s hard, oh man it’s hard, and after a while a low moan escapes him anyway

Nrrrgh.

And Vecchio’s teeth are on Ray’s neck, wet and sharp, and he’s moaning softly, just like he told Ray not to.

Nrrrgh. Jesus. See? THIS is why I love you.

So he lets it buckle, lets his shoulder hit the wall instead, turns his head so his cheek is pressed into the paneling. Vecchio’s panting into his hair, his lips brushing Ray’s temple, and his cock is in Ray so deep, and Ray squeezes his fingers and Vecchio says “UH,” right in his ear and way too loud.

God, this is good stuff. This is - man, this is hot and needy and just - yeah. I can't stop thinking about this.

"We lost track of you. So.” He mouths Ray’s neck and just kind of waits there, tensed.

I love that this is Vecchio's apology. It's as much as he can give, and Ray knows that, and it's just - so much more than enough. It's perfect. THIS is perfect. It's wonderful. *twirls you giddily*

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[info]sprat
2004-12-02 10:14 pm UTC (link)
Wow. Wow. I'm so incredibly delighted with this feedback, [info]brooklinegirl...you have no idea. Like, I read it and then squealed about it for a while (but you know, *inwardly*, so my coworkers wouldn't be getting the wrong impression). And then I read it some more. And then I squealed some more. And I could go on like this. Thank you SO MUCH. It's great to read what worked for people. It's *fantastic* to read it in such great detail. You are the undisputed feedback queen.

::twirls you back::

(Oh, and the bit with Vecchio and the hand on the neck--you ought to be nodding to [info]qe2 for that one. She beta'ed it out of me. :) )

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[info]serialkarma
2004-12-02 10:30 am UTC (link)
oooh, lovely and hot! But I have to say that I think this:

it’s a surprise when he feels Vecchio’s fancy overcoat settle around his shoulders. It’s still warm inside, and it’s lined with silk or something. Ray pulls it close.

is the sexiest damn thing here. The idea of Ray pulling that silk lining close against his naked skin? GUH.

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[info]sprat
2004-12-02 10:17 pm UTC (link)
Hee. I kind of like that coat, too. :)

Thank-you so much for the comment. I'm happy you enjoyed!

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[info]cmshaw
2004-12-02 11:00 am UTC (link)
And Vecchio, he pushes his fingers deeper, closes his other hand harder on Ray’s dick, and leans in so he can breathe “shhh” right in Ray’s ear. Which sure, yeah, like that’s helpful.

oh, wow -- this is great!

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[info]sprat
2004-12-02 10:18 pm UTC (link)
Yay! Thanks so much!

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[info]rjm_257
2004-12-02 11:35 am UTC (link)
I think my favorite mental image would be the one induced by this: "and he slides his hand up Vecchio's forearm where it's gripping his head, and lets his head fall back against Vecchio's shoulder."

I'm with everyone else about the coat, the snark, the hotHOT sex, but the post-coital embrace there just climbed itself into my imagination and won't go away.

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[info]sprat
2004-12-02 10:21 pm UTC (link)
:) Yay! I'm so glad you liked this (and glad to see you writing Ray/Ray, too!) Thanks very much for commenting.

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[info]estrella30
2004-12-02 11:56 am UTC (link)
Oh my. This is...

...wow. Ok. I'm going to try and be coherent here *g*

I think the thing that gets me the most about this fic, is first, a) the set-up. What a brilliant fucking way to explain the what, when, where, why, etc, in like, two paragraphs. I was completely blown away by just the *idea* if this fic, even before I was really into it.

Like blg said earlier, it's the details. The physical things that really strike me. The dirt on the ground and the feel of Vecchios coat, those things are like, *tangible* in my head. Amazing writing there.

“You can let this one up,” says Vecchio. “He doesn’t look like much, but that’s our inside guy.”

Such PERFECT Vecchio is just blows me away. God.

So he lets it buckle, lets his shoulder hit the wall instead, turns his head so his cheek is pressed into the paneling. Vecchio’s panting into his hair, his lips brushing Ray’s temple, and his cock is in Ray so deep, and Ray squeezes his fingers

God - SO FUCKING HOT is this. Just - what a picture. Between that and this one:

he slides his hand up Vecchio’s forearm where it’s gripping his chest, and he lets his head fall back against Vecchio’s shoulder.

I'm a melted puddle of goo. Seriously. Fucking *beautiful* writing.

And the apology! Being sex-stupid! Vecchio *likes* him! Just - everything about this makes me happy, and want to stalk you and yeah. Really wonderful job, lady.






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[info]sprat
2004-12-02 10:29 pm UTC (link)
Eeee! Yay! This is so lovely to read! I'm grateful for the excellent feedback, and very happy you enjoyed. Thank-you so much!

:)

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[info]china_shop
2004-12-02 12:39 pm UTC (link)
And Ray hears his head hit the wall with a thunk, and he has to think hard about every word Vecchio just said, like he was speaking Spanish or something. “Yeah, yeah,” he says finally. “Okay.”

This is wonderful. Damn! I'm succumbing to the Ray/Ray, just because of the sheer greatness of all the recent fic about them. This is a prime example. Damn! *g*

No, really, this is snarky and sweet, and very hot, and I like the plot and the vivid details and everything. :-)

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[info]mergatrude
2004-12-02 02:45 pm UTC (link)
Look deep into my eyes .... say after me "I love Ray/Ray. Ray/Ray is hot and wonderful and snarky. I will now commit myself to writing Ray/Ray."

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[info]china_shop
2004-12-02 05:28 pm UTC (link)
I will now commit myself to writing Ray/Ray.

Funny you should say that. *buries face in hands*

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[info]mergatrude
2004-12-02 06:30 pm UTC (link)
That high pitched sound on the west wind? That's me squealing excitedly!!

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[info]china_shop
2004-12-02 08:08 pm UTC (link)
Um, it might be a case of "be careful what you wish for".

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[info]sprat
2004-12-02 10:40 pm UTC (link)
Ah, but now you've started down the snarky path and there can be no return...

hee. :)

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[info]sprat
2004-12-02 10:33 pm UTC (link)
Oh, yay--another Ray/Ray casualty! :)

I am very glad you enjoyed. Thanks so much for letting me know!

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[info]mergatrude
2004-12-02 02:43 pm UTC (link)
I'm so with Shay on the post-bust-adrenaline-fuck kink! This was so fabulous. And then ...

“Yeah, but I am pretty sure it is not your job to fuck me stupid at a crime scene. Nah. You were worried because you like me. Come on, Vecchio--it’s okay. You can say it.”

Awwwwww

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[info]sprat
2004-12-02 10:35 pm UTC (link)
Hee. Vecchio's such a big softie, really, hey?

Thanks for your comment--it's great that you enjoyed!

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[info]engenda
2004-12-02 02:44 pm UTC (link)
Mmmm so hot and well, hot.

And Vecchio makes a noise in his throat and moves his hands on Ray’s body, these hard desperate touches like he isn’t even sure where to start

I love this, I love the desperation. He has to touch and doesn't care where. So, so incendiary.

And Vecchio, he pushes his fingers deeper, closes his other hand harder on Ray’s dick, and leans in so he can breathe “shhh” right in Ray’s ear. Which sure, yeah, like that’s helpful.

This is again, so hot. And so funny. Like the best of sex.

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[info]sprat
2004-12-02 10:39 pm UTC (link)
And so funny. Like the best of sex.

Oh yay! so glad you thought so! I think humour's kind of integral to good sex scenes, but I'm often not sure if I've got that part right...:)

Thanks so much for the comment--I'm happy you enjoyed!

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[info]silverakira
2004-12-03 02:37 am UTC (link)
Holy guh, this is fantastic. How the hell did I miss this?

I am in LOVE with your Ray/Ray snark; you have them down so freaking well. The back and forth, RayK's bitching, Vecchio's exasperated affection -- it's making me grin from ear to ear. :) And, god, teh sex. SO HOT.

And, okay, this:

And Vecchio’s fists close around the lapels of that stupid coat and he pushes Ray back into one of those bedrooms, pushes him up against the wall, kicks the door shut behind him. It’s real dark inside, but there’s just enough light Ray can see that look on Vecchio’s face--that wide-open, scared-shitless, god-awful look. And then Vecchio’s got his hands in Ray’s wet hair and he’s kissing him.

I am seriously in love with this paragraph. It's hot and desperate and just -- mmmm.

He feels Vecchio smile against his nape. Feels him lip at the damp hair there, push his nose in and breathe deep. “I said I’m sorry. When they moved you yesterday, I…I wasn’t ready. We lost track of you. So.” He mouths Ray’s neck and just kind of waits there, tensed.

Awww. That's sweet, but not overtly so -- perfect for them.

Again, absolutely fantastic story; the set-up is brilliant, I love the details that you include (especially this: It’s still warm inside, and it’s lined with silk or something), and, really, it's just a good story all around.

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[info]sprat
2004-12-03 12:59 pm UTC (link)
Wow! Thanks so much for the lovely feedback--it's very much appreciated. I'm especially glad to hear that you didn't think it was overly sweet--I was a little worried about adding that note to a Ray/Ray fic... :)

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