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@ 2004-05-06 15:18:00
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Public Sex Challenge - Flying Solo
Dear lord.

Q - How many people does it take to beta 1494 words of porn?

A - [info]rhyo, [info]lynnmonster, [info]justacat and [info]byob_kenobi

This was originally intended to be a surprise for [info]brooklinegirl's upcoming birthday, but at the last minute she wound up betaing her own effing gift. Sigh.




Flying Solo


"Ah, hello, Ray. This is - well, I'm quite sure you know who this is actually, but if in fact you find yourself confused, this is Constable Benton Fraser, Royal Canadian...excuse me just a moment...Ray? Can you still hear me? It's Ben. I tried your house phone but you didn't answer, so I presume you are still there, at the station. I should be leaving here in a day or so - two at the most. The training class went well. Actually, the newest recruits are quite enthusiastic to start applying their knowledge to the practice of law enforcement in the Yukon. It's funny - one of them specifically asked me -- well, really, it's unimportant -- it's just...

"Ray? Can you still hear me? I apologize for the whispering but I'm not all together convinced that I'm actually alone in the quarters right now. Diefenbaker has been intolerable; whining and whinging for doughnuts and pizza incessantly, and I find myself...restless without you. I hadn't realized just how accustomed to you I've become. How waking up with you is what I now consider natural, and this state of constant loneliness is - well - lonely. I miss you. Dreadfully. I find myself feeling cowardly for waiting until I was all the way up North and you're all the way in Chicago and listening to this on your cell phone, but I wanted to tell you that…erm…that I…miss you. Very much. I'll be home soon, Ray."



Ray slapped the palm of one hand against the wall of the bathroom stall and popped open the button of his jeans with the other. The metal was cool underneath his hand; the holes and grooves of the chipped paint were rough against his skin.

He bit his lip and then slowly dragged his zipper down. Jesus fucking Christ - how the hell did this happen? One minute he was sitting at his desk in the station, minding his own business, checking the messages on his cell phone, and the next minute - bam! As soon as he heard Fraser's voice his dick perked right the hell up. Halfway through the message he was hard and by the end of it - with Fraser talking all low and soft and telling him how much he missed him - Ray was just about ready to explode.

Almost two weeks. Two weeks of training classes up in the Great White North, and still another day or two before Fraser even got home. And while Ray could go a long time - way longer than this if he had to - he didn't much want to anymore. Two years it had taken him and Fraser to get here. Two long years of lingering looks and friendly pats and thinly veiled flirtation before Ray finally asked him: "Hey. Are you flirting with me?"And when Fraser took a deep breath and flicked a thumb across his eyebrow, Ray knew the answer was yes. So Ray kissed him. Kissed Fraser. And that was all it took.

But that was weeks ago, months ago, fucking years ago, if Ray's dick had anything to say about it. Because while Ray was surely no expert on matters of the flesh, even he knew that getting a hard-on from the sound of your lover's voice at two o'clock in the afternoon was pretty fucking desperate.

The palm of his left hand was slick with sweat and skidded a couple of inches down the cool metal of the stall. Fast, fast - he needed to do this now. The fingers of his other hand brushed over the surface of his cotton briefs, before he hurriedly pushed everything down.

And he closed his eyes - because if he closed his eyes, he wasn't here, by himself, in a stall in the fucking men's room. He was home, with Fraser, in the bedroom or the living room or the - whatever - the kitchen, for fuck's sake.

If he kept his eyes closed as he stroked himself (slow, steady rhythm, but squeezing tight, tight, tighter) he could pretend that it was Fraser's hand on him, making him feel this good. He wasn't alone, jerking himself off; it was Fraser making him hard and hot and wet (wet, wet - Christ - his cock was already so fucking wet.)

The night before Fraser left for his class up North, he woke Ray up a few hours before dawn. All the lights were out and Fraser reached for him, his hand landing on Ray's hip and dragging him until they were perfectly lined up, Fraser's chest against Ray's back.

Fraser's fingers were already slick when they pushed inside him, and if Ray hadn't been concentrating so hard on getting well and truly fucked, he would have made some sarcastic comment about Fraser being so sure of himself that he got ready before Ray was even awake.

He had shuddered and Fraser had wrapped his other arm tight around Ray's chest. When Fraser slicked up his cock and slid hard inside of him, Ray writhed and moaned and fisted his hands in the sheets. Fraser dragged one hand slowly down Ray's chest, his thick, wide fingers wrapping tight around Ray's cock and he stroked him, hard and fast and---

Ray sank his teeth hard into his bottom lip, just barely managing to stop when he tasted blood. His hand slowed, and he remembered the way he had felt that last night; his body surrounded, covered, protected by Fraser. His cock had been throbbing, pulsing, aching, in Fraser's hand. In the stall, he slid his feet apart further, smeared the come on the head of his dick with his thumb and had to stifle a groan.

"This state of constant loneliness is - well - lonely"

God, if only Fraser knew just how lonely he'd been without him. How even for something so new, he could barely remember what he was doing before Fraser. Before them.

"I miss you. Dreadfully"

He squeezed his eyes shut; gripped his cock even tighter. Fraser missed him - missed him. Detective Stanley Raymond Kowalski. The skinny guy with the funny hair and the thick black glasses. And Fraser, with his smooth, pale body and strong hands and his slick, wet mouth.

"I'll be home soon, Ray."

Fuck, if Fraser was there Ray'd have him on the floor on front of him, right where he was standing. He'd look down and see the top of Fraser's dark head moving, Ray's cock sliding through those soft lips into the heat of his mouth. Fraser's tongue would lick him, his mouth would suck him, and Ray would close his eyes and pump his hips slowly. So slowly he'd barely be able to tell at first (like he was doing now. Slow, steady...) and then picking up speed. A little faster, then faster still (his hand was sweaty, slippery, wet, and he was thrusting fast and hard with his hips.)

And he knew Fraser wasn't there - of course he knew that. He knew he was in the men's room and this was wrong and stupid and those morons Huey and Dewey could come walking in at any moment. And then he'd feel like the moron, caught with his dick in his hand and a stupid smile on his face. But none of that mattered. Because behind his closed eyelids he could see Fraser there, standing in front of him, kneeling, sitting, straddling - whatever - and sucking Ray's cock into that perfect fucking mouth, and Ray just let his head fall back and came and came and came.

It took a few minutes for Ray's heart rate to finally slow down, and as he was cleaning up and pulling his jeans back up he heard the door to the men's room swing open and smash against the tile. He cleared his throat and flushed the toilet.

Shit, that was close. But so fucking worth it. Wasn't like he'd had a choice anyway - he couldn't exactly spend the afternoon rock fucking hard at his desk. Two weeks without Fraser - that was a hell of a long time. Probably felt even longer for Fraser - at least Ray had things to keep him busy. But Fraser was stuck all the way up North with nothing to do but watch the snow fall and play teacher to a bunch of Mountie recruits. Ray imagined the recruits, red-coated and red-faced, learning how to track caribou and make tea for the Queen. And Fraser... Fraser was calling Ray and leaving desperate voice mails.

Yeah, if Ray had been this far gone by today, just imagine how Fraser was coping up there, all by himself at night. Alone in bed in the dark; one hand gripped tight around the receiver as he called Ray, the other slowly sliding down his chest, over those soft, red long-johns. Moving down...slow...

Ray grinned and opened the door to the stall. Maybe it was time to head home and give Fraser a call back. Just to see how he was doing.



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[info]raveninthewind
2004-05-06 12:26 pm UTC (link)
*whew*

That's really hot--thanks for the midday thrill. :D

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[info]estrella30
2004-05-06 04:58 pm UTC (link)
You're most definitely welcome. Any time's a good time for a midday thrill *g*

Thanks for reading!

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[info]lynnmonster
2004-05-06 12:36 pm UTC (link)
Hooray! I love it! You made a great choice at the end! (And I fucking sense fucking BLG's fucking influence, there. *g*)

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[info]estrella30
2004-05-06 04:59 pm UTC (link)
Yep, I think after all was said and done that I liked this one the best. Thank you again for ALL of your wonderful help!

(And yes, that fucking BLG, she's one bad fucking influence. You know what I fucking mean? *g*)

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[info]kassrachel
2004-05-06 12:37 pm UTC (link)
Yowza!

That is mind-blowingly hot. And delicious.

Thank you kindly for posting. I'm all flustered now. :-)

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[info]estrella30
2004-05-06 05:01 pm UTC (link)
Well sorry to get you all flustered, but it was for a good cause! I swear!

Thanks for commenting, Kass, I really appreciate it!

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[info]rhyo
2004-05-06 12:41 pm UTC (link)
So: now that this one is out of our inboxes, does that mean you start on BLG's b-day gift, the one you finish *without* sending it to her?

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[info]estrella30
2004-05-06 05:01 pm UTC (link)
Yes, that would be the Ray/Ray, seamonkey, mpreg, wingfic that I'm working on...

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(no subject) - [info]rhyo, 2004-05-06 05:06 pm UTC

[info]shayheyred
2004-05-06 12:47 pm UTC (link)
And then there are seamonkeys?

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[info]estrella30
2004-05-06 05:02 pm UTC (link)
Seamonkeys were before this, actually.

*g*

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[info]brooklinegirl
2004-05-06 12:56 pm UTC (link)
Man, I love you. God. That phone message? Just killed me. I have this whole mental picture to go with it, Fraser hunched over the phone, trying to tell Ray how damn much he misses him. God.

And this:
Ray slapped the palm of one hand against the wall of the bathroom stall and popped open the button of his jeans with the other. The metal was cool underneath his hand; the holes and grooves of the chipped paint were rough against his skin.

Guh. Just - guh. It's just - you had me breathing heavy just reading that. It's just, right there? One of the damn hottest things ever.

This here?

Two long years of lingering looks and friendly pats and thinly veiled flirtation before Ray finally asked him: "Hey. Are you flirting with me?"And when Fraser took a deep breath and flicked a thumb across his eyebrow, Ray knew the answer was yes.

You're killing me. I - this tiny little paragraph? I think this is one of my very favorite Ray and Fraser getting together scenarios ever. "Hey. Are you flirting with me?" I fucking love that.

Because behind his closed eyelids he could see Fraser there, standing in front of him, kneeling, sitting, straddling - whatever - and sucking Ray's cock into that perfect fucking mouth, and Ray just let his head fall back and came and came and came.

::whimper:: God. You - ::tries to pull herself together:: - I love this. I love this a lot. A lot, a lot. It's just - you have that close-close-close fucking edge of desperation down perfectly.

And I know I said it before, but this:

Alone in bed in the dark; one hand gripped tight around the receiver as he called Ray, the other slowly sliding down his chest, over those soft, red long-johns. Moving down...slow...

Guh. Long-john fetish now, thanks. Big time.

I love you! This was a great birthday present! I am the luckiest little fangirl EVER. ::mwah!::



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[info]estrella30
2004-05-06 05:03 pm UTC (link)
I love, love, love you! And I'm glad you liked your bday story (though really - I had the best intentions of not torturing you with it ahead of time, but...)

So glad you liked it and thank you for your comments!

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[info]chickwriter
2004-05-06 01:31 pm UTC (link)
Gah. I heart you. I'm smitten with the prose...and the hotness. Merci beaucoup.

I don't think I can go back to writing technical specs.

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[info]estrella30
2004-05-06 05:04 pm UTC (link)
Yay! I heart you too! And being smitten with the prose is the most wonderful comment, ever!

Thanks again so much!

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[info]ezust
2004-05-06 01:42 pm UTC (link)

Holy hell.

*rolls over and goes to sleep*

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[info]estrella30
2004-05-06 05:07 pm UTC (link)
*tucks the blankets around you*

Thanks for reading!

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[info]lamardeuse
2004-05-06 01:55 pm UTC (link)
God, if only Fraser knew just how lonely he'd been without him. How even for something so new, he could barely remember what he was doing before Fraser. Before them.

This is simply gorgeous. Um, can we have this challenge extended? Like maybe for another month? *g*

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[info]estrella30
2004-05-06 05:08 pm UTC (link)
I, for one, would be quite happy reading and writing public sex fics for the next month or so.

Apparently I have some sort of 'public sex' kink. Hmm. Who knew...

Thanks for the comments, L! I really appreciate them!

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(no subject) - [info]elmyraemilie, 2004-05-06 06:17 pm UTC
(no subject) - [info]estrella30, 2004-05-07 06:03 am UTC

[info]jenboo
2004-05-06 02:27 pm UTC (link)
I sense some phone sex in Fraser's future...*g*

Holy Scorched Shorts, Batman!! That was hot, hot, hot! And I also fucking detect BLG's fucking influence. She's a bad fucking influence on the fucking lot of us. ;o)

Fabulous, my dear! Now if you'll excuse me, I need a cold shower.

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[info]estrella30
2004-05-06 05:11 pm UTC (link)
ooo. Phone sex is my biggest kink...

So glad you liked it! And yes! BLG is the best fucking kind of bad fucking influence *g*

Now off you go for your cold shower...

Thanks again!

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[info]bluster
2004-05-06 02:38 pm UTC (link)
It suddenly got warmer in the house than it is outside, which is saying something. :-D Very nice.

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[info]estrella30
2004-05-06 05:11 pm UTC (link)
:hands B a fan:

There you go! Thanks so much!

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[info]akite
2004-05-06 03:04 pm UTC (link)
::lights a cigarette and takes a big drag:: Whew! Sorry, I can't get more articulate than that.

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[info]estrella30
2004-05-06 05:12 pm UTC (link)
:grabs akite's cigarette and takes a long drag:

That articulation was just fine, dear. Thank you!

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[info]mergatrude
2004-05-06 03:11 pm UTC (link)
I had just begun to reconstitute myself after sihayab's flasfic, and you've gone and made me all melted goo again. Very hot with just a tinge of sweet.

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[info]estrella30
2004-05-06 05:14 pm UTC (link)
Wow. Being linked to shayab's fic is a HUGE compliment, so thank you!

Thanks so much for reading and commenting. I really appreciate it!

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[info]psykaos42
2004-05-06 03:31 pm UTC (link)
Damn! Hot damn! You people have gotta stop writing these things or I'm gonna run out of cold water to take showers with*g*

And while Ray could go a long time - way longer than this if he had to - he didn't much want to anymore.

I love that sentence. I mean, two years they spent dancing around it-you've gotta make up for lost time, ya know?

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[info]estrella30
2004-05-06 05:15 pm UTC (link)
Yes, that was my thought! No more jerking around, boys (well - ok - *some* jerking around *g*)

Hee! Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to comment! I really appreciate it!

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[info]tobyfan
2004-05-06 04:23 pm UTC (link)
Holy crap!

Guh and *thud*

Hottest masturbation piece I've ever read.

I'm purring right now. *g*

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[info]estrella30
2004-05-06 05:16 pm UTC (link)
Hee! Well thank! I have a wee bit of a masturbation (phone sex, etc) kink so this was pretty self indulgent on my part *g*

Thanks again!

:strokes your purring head:

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[info]pearl_o
2004-05-06 04:38 pm UTC (link)
Mmmmm, I liked this very very much, honey.

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[info]estrella30
2004-05-06 05:17 pm UTC (link)
Well thank you, baby! I appreciate it!

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[info]heuradys
2004-05-06 04:38 pm UTC (link)
Rowwwwwwwwwwwr. Guh.

If you'll excuse me, I'll be trying to reconstitute myself from this puddle now...

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[info]estrella30
2004-05-06 05:18 pm UTC (link)
:mops up the puddle formerly known as heuradys:

Thank you, baby doll *g* I appreciate it!

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[info]aerye
2004-05-06 04:55 pm UTC (link)
Y'know, I have a birthday coming up in June...

::g:: Seriously, I loved this. Fantastic, fantastic. I am giddy! I liked the details, I liked the set-up, I liked Fraser, I liked Ray...you're becoming one of my favorites!

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[info]estrella30
2004-05-06 05:22 pm UTC (link)
ooo! A June birthday! What do you want, dear? Name it and it's yours! You just said I'm becoming one of your favorites - you can have *anything* :D

Seriously, thank you so much. I really appreciate your reading and taking the time to comment. (And I'm serious about the bday story, you name it!)

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(no subject) - [info]aerye, 2004-05-07 05:32 am UTC
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[info]sihayab
2004-05-06 06:21 pm UTC (link)
::wibble::

Hommina!

You are *amazing*. That was hotter than a hot thing!

Yum.

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[info]estrella30
2004-05-07 06:04 am UTC (link)
eeeeee!

Well since you set my hair on fire with YOUR story, I think this was only fair *g*

Thank you muchly, babe!

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[info]ilexa
2004-05-06 10:20 pm UTC (link)
*thud* Damn. Just... damn. I love this challenge. I'm all flushed now.

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[info]estrella30
2004-05-07 06:05 am UTC (link)
:licks your icon:

Well thanks, ilexa! So glad you liked it!

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(no subject) - [info]brooklinegirl, 2004-05-08 09:26 pm UTC
(no subject) - [info]ilexa, 2004-05-08 09:32 pm UTC
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[info]silverakira
2004-05-07 02:29 pm UTC (link)
Mmmmmmm. You've just hit upon one of my absolute favorite kinks: masturbation. I love how you start it off; the phone message is brilliant.

This line:

And when Fraser took a deep breath and flicked a thumb across his eyebrow, Ray knew the answer was yes.

skewered me when I read it. I'm not even sure why it hit me so hard; it just seems like such a Fraser/Ray was of getting together, and shows exactly how well Ray knows Fraser and his little quirks.

And the fact that Ray can get so worked up over a phonecall...[melts]. So. Fucking. Hot. I love you for writing this.

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[info]estrella30
2004-05-07 04:08 pm UTC (link)
Oh wow! Thank you so very much! I have to admit, masturbation and phone sex are two BIG kinks of mine so I was glad to work one of them into a challenge (the phone sex in public, while fun, would have been a little more challenging to write I think, lol)

Glad you liked the few lines of them getting together! It's funny, for something short this story was more of a bitch to get right than other things that I've written, so I'm glad to hear it worked for you!

Thanks for taking the time to let me know!

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[info]ardent_muses
2004-05-07 07:58 pm UTC (link)
Um, wow. Loved your Ray-voice, loved the Fraser-angst, loved the hotness. Loved it.

Ray just let his head fall back and came and came and came.

Yum. This was incredibly hot.

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[info]estrella30
2004-05-07 08:11 pm UTC (link)
eeee! Thank you!

So glad you liked it and thank you kindly for letting me know!

:smooches ardent:

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[info]chesamus
2004-05-08 04:53 pm UTC (link)
So my question is - if I write a phone sex story as sort of a sequel, but the phone Ray uses is a public phone, does that count as public sex?

Seriously, this was just marvelous. I am seriously loving this challenge!

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[info]estrella30
2004-05-13 01:16 pm UTC (link)
Hey Ches! Sorry I missed this comment (bad estrella!) And yes, I loved this challenge too!

Mmmm...public phone sex...yummy...

Thanks for commenting!

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[info]ekaterinn
2004-05-09 01:41 am UTC (link)
Oooh, very nice. *fans self*

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[info]estrella30
2004-05-13 01:15 pm UTC (link)
Sorry it took so long to respond! I must have missed this!

Thanks so much for reading and posting! I appreciate the comments *g*

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[info]oceana_
2004-07-01 12:20 am UTC (link)
HOT! And now sexy is Ray, jerking off in public? The things he does for Fraser, or because of him...
I haven't been reading enough DS fiction lately, so I doscovered this really late. Stupid me, I should have known better than to skip ds-flashficiton entries.
Thanks for sharing, I really enjoyed reading this!

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[info]estrella30
2004-07-01 05:46 am UTC (link)
HOT! And now sexy is Ray, jerking off in public?

mmmm. Very sexy...

I haven't been reading enough DS fiction lately

No! You haven't! And you need to rectify that and start reading lots and lots *g*

Thanks so much for the comments! It's always so nice to hear when someone likes something I wrote!

Thanks again!

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