hariboo_smirks ([info]hariboo_smirks) wrote in [info]daniel_vala,
@ 2007-05-10 15:51:00
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Fic: The Backwards Fall
Can be looked as having spoilers for Continuum, but can also be looked as an AU or crack!fic.



A/N: To Gioia over at GW for being my evil enabler and giving me this plot bunny that just begged to be written. Rated R.

The Backwards Fall

Baal had always been power hungry. He had always wanted it all. The galaxy, the spoils, the knowledge, the woman. So when he saw his chance to take it in one amazingly simple move, he did.

Getting Quetesh back had been simpler than he had planned, all thanks to what he had absorbed from dear old Dr. Daniel Jackson’s, and his time as an Ascended being.

Getting a host for his queen had almost been a joke.

She was stunning. Definitely one of the most visually pleasing hosts Quetesh had ever taken, not to mention one with the most spirit. A spirit he had loved to break. She had fought every inch of the way, and now she was his.

He could still hear the good doctor floating like a mist in the back of his mind. He would rage whenever he struck her before the blending, and when the blending had finally occurred he had felt something in the host shatter.

Baal had smiled.

Now, the doctor still fought, but Baal could feel that twinge of lust increase every time he had his Queen under him, moving like the Goddess she was.

Baal would then kiss Quetesh harder and make her scream his name. Baal. Never Daniel Jackson, and he would feel his host splinter like glass every time.

Baal would smirk wider.

Quetesh had always wanted Baal. Even when she acted to the contrary. He was arrogance, avarice and sin personified and there was something about his neck that made it so delectable to lick. Though maybe that last part was just his new host.

And now that she was back and a Goddess again, she could not deny her gratitude, would not deny her gratitude, did not want to deny her gratitude. She was wanton and greedy, not stupid. Anyway her King’s new host was quite the specimen. She also found it all manners of amusing that her host felt similarly and the jealously she gleaned from the host made it all the more fun.

Quetesh always liked to have fun.

Baal told her the story of her return and she laughed, deep and long before kissing her King and taking him inside her. She could feel her host’s want and pain.

Quetesh laughed.

Her new-old host had interesting new knowledge about these Ori and their Priors, as well about the Tau’ri and her new King’s host.

Quetesh quite enjoyed the new knowledge and with it burned the Priors much like they enjoyed doing to others; she had her host memories and would not stand for someone harming her body again. For any reason. That is only her King’s duty when they decided to be extra playful. She had always enjoyed the feel of silk wrapped around her skin, so tight that her skin would bloom like red flowers.

Together they took over the remnants of the System Lords. Their combined knowledge was vast and with it they also took the Lucien Alliance.

Netan’s screams as her King killed him still make her smile.

And when Baal had bent her over and fucked her senseless while Athena bleed out she had laughed.

Athena. Stupid woman.

Their new fleet was the grandest in Goa’uld history, thanks to Daniel Jackson’s knowledge, and the galaxy was theirs for the taking.

Only one little thorn remained.

The Tau’ri.

Baal knew not to underestimate the Tau’ri and Quetesh had enough memories from her host to know not underestimate them either.

And they were successful; they had already dealt them a massive blow. Their hosts were two of the beloved members of SG-1, and they knew that the Tau’ri would try every possible avenue before killing them.

It would give them time.

Both King and Queen laughed as they heard the rages in their minds, and SG-1 screamed and screamed. The humans yelled for their friends and Baal and Quetesh took great pleasure in telling them ‘Nothing of the host remains’ as Baal trailed a hand smeared in Lt. Col. Carter’s blood down his Queen’s cheek before giving her a tongue filled kiss. They are on the cusp of victory when again the Tau’ri manage to surprise them.

The floating city of the Ancients appears in the middle of the battle. And for all of Daniel Jackson’s and Vala Mal Duran’s knowledge there were still things they couldn’t calculate: the human drive for survival, the ingenuity of a determined General and his team, and the Gatebuilder’s mythical city are several of them.

The battle is epic. Many die. But not Baal and Quetesh. They are captured and locked up, until the Tok’ra can be reached. They are held in separate rooms, and they rage against the separation.

Members of SG-1 come to talk to them, to look for remnants of their friends, they are met with anger and sometimes violence.

When the Tok’ra arrive, they are in surgery in less than ten minutes.

-----

Daniel wakes and when he realizes that he has control of his body, he feels shock, relief, disgust and fear all at the same time.

“Daniel?”

Turning his head, he looks over at Jack.

His friend looks older than he’s ever seen him.

“Jack...” His voice is no longer deep and echoing, it feels odd, but good.

He remembers everything and he can’t look into Jack’s eyes. His friend seems to understand and just nods. He starts to say something, when Daniel’s brain gets fully caught up.

“Vala! Where…” He doesn't even get to finish his sentence before Sam interrupts him.

“She’s fine. Both surgeries are successful, she’s right here.” Sam’s voice is quiet.

Daniel looks at Sam to see her flinch a little at his gaze, and he gets a flash of his fingers and her blood. He looks away from the blonde in shame and focuses his gaze on the woman lying in the bed next to his.

His Queen.

Daniel shakes off the voice and moves to go to her. Jack tries to stop him, but Daniel levels him with a glare that has the older man backing off, later Daniel will understand Jack saw too much of Baal in that glare.

Now his focus is on Vala.

Vala, who just went the same hell he did for the second time in her life, whose body he had mapped with hands he had no control over, who spilled as much blood as he did and then licked it off his body.

He represses the shiver all those feelings bring up in him; he represses the fact that not all the feelings are unpleasant.

Stroking her cheek, a move that not even the Goa’uld had taken from them, but in fact adopted, he watches as she rouses at his touch.

Her eyes blink and he can see the same feelings that flashed trough him rushing through her.

“Daniel?” The voice is her own husky and accented tone, and the relief that courses through him could take out the mountain.

Their eyes meet. Blue and silver. Never to be gold again, and he presses a chaste kiss against her forehead.

“It’s me.”

She can't fight the tears that gather in her eyes and he gathers her in his arms. She clings to him and he clings to her. They can no longer hide the fact that they need each other, at least for the moment. Later when the shock of wears off and they remember flashes of sweat slicked skin and breathless kisses; they will try to hide from each other, but not now. Now they hold each other.

They both know that the hard part is coming.

That they will have to face all the malice and hurt they caused.

But now they can only hold on to the fact that they are free of the evil held them for so long.

Everything is always more than it seems.




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[info]gioia_gg
2007-05-10 03:40 pm UTC (link)
OMFG!!!!!
I'm speechless!!!
and it happens so rarely!
i'm barely able to write so i'll come back later to write a proper feedback.
just f*cking WOW

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[info]whisper99
2007-05-10 06:12 pm UTC (link)
Yes yes! What she said! OMG!!!!!!!!!

And this line? later Daniel will understand Jack saw too much of Baal in that glare.
Holy crap!!!! AMAZING!!

And that last part gave me the shivers. Wow...

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[info]hariboo_smirks
2007-05-11 01:58 am UTC (link)
Hee.

And this line? later Daniel will understand Jack saw too much of Baal in that glare.
Holy crap!!!! AMAZING!!


I'm glad you liked the line. It was one that even made me shiver!

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[info]hariboo_smirks
2007-05-11 02:00 am UTC (link)
And gioia- It's all because of you, cara! I glad you liked it *grins*

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[info]dreaminganita
2007-05-10 04:25 pm UTC (link)
O.o
AMAZING!!!!

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[info]hariboo_smirks
2007-05-11 02:01 am UTC (link)
Thanks!

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[info]phantmgreeneyes
2007-05-10 04:28 pm UTC (link)
Oh wow. That was an emotional kick in the chest. Absolutely beautiful Excellent excellent job.

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[info]hariboo_smirks
2007-05-11 02:01 am UTC (link)
Thank you!

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[info]odakota_rose
2007-05-10 04:53 pm UTC (link)
Dude....
I can't even call that crack because it was so awesome!

It was crazy and different and yet I totally loved it.

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[info]hariboo_smirks
2007-05-11 02:03 am UTC (link)
Hee. It was totally out left field but that part of the reason I loved the concept so much. Too nuts to even happen on Stargate..

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[info]odakota_rose
2007-05-11 06:04 am UTC (link)
Too nuts to even happen on Stargate

Which is seriously awesome, especially given the number of things I swore were too crazy but we ended up seeing on Stargate anyways ;)
That's exactly why I loved it, because it's such a wild idea.

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[info]bittybye2000
2007-05-10 05:25 pm UTC (link)
Lord, I'm not sure if I love this or hate it. Probably love it, since Baal and Quetesh got what they deserved.
The only thing I can say is I wish there was more, though I understand why there couldn't be. Wonderful work.

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[info]hariboo_smirks
2007-05-11 02:05 am UTC (link)
Thanks. This really is a one-shot deal, I mean I can see how it can be expanded but at the moment I just have too many other fics in the air to give it the proper love and attention. Still glad that you loved/hated/loved it!

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backwards fall
(Anonymous)
2007-05-10 05:28 pm UTC (link)
nicely done. you should expand on it

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[info]milena_d
2007-05-10 09:32 pm UTC (link)
My heart is pounding! This is...soo powerful and amazing and out of this world and just..wow. It's exactly the kind of fics I've been looking for and it's soooooo perfectly written. My god, if the movie turns out to be half this intense, they won't have any problems getting enough fans to continue on.

Awesome job!

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[info]hariboo_smirks
2007-05-11 02:12 am UTC (link)
Aww, thanks. I made a heart pound. I think that's a first *strangely happy*

I can't wait for the movies and while I don't think they'll go the Daniel!Baal way I hope they really explore the Vala!Quetesh thing.

But I also kinda hope they don't whump them as hard as I did, I mean there is some major angst and issues that I gave them to get over. *evil laughter*

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[info]scifi_tv_addict
2007-05-10 09:33 pm UTC (link)
*sigh* Stop being so darn good at this! I really enjoyed it. I like the idea of Daniel as Ba'al and Vala as Qetesh! Like someone else suggested, an expansion of this wouldn't be a bad idea *wink*

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[info]hariboo_smirks
2007-05-11 02:18 am UTC (link)
Really, you want me to stop? *pouts*

.... I don't think I will though.... ;) Cuz I know you didn't really mean it, right? Right?!

Oh, you're an evil enabler too! I see how it is... *points and eyes*

But while I doubt I'll expand on this in the near future, who know what I'll write after The Monster is done, and my muses are free to roam.

p.s. the icon is omage-ing our GW 200 convos

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[info]djgirl2224
2007-05-10 10:06 pm UTC (link)
WOW, I am in awe of how fast you can write. This was just amazing!!!! Very nice:)

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[info]hariboo_smirks
2007-05-11 02:22 am UTC (link)
Thanks, what can I say.... when the bunnies take over, they really take over! I just learned hand over the reigns.

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[info]kamiikiteiru
2007-05-11 02:07 am UTC (link)
Wow this was awesome! I loved the interplay of good v. evil with Daniel and Vala as hosts. Sigh...

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[info]hariboo_smirks
2007-05-11 02:24 am UTC (link)
Thanks, I loved playing around with Daniel!Baal and Vala!Questesh, I think they're my new evil otp....

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[info]supershineygirl
2007-05-11 02:15 am UTC (link)
OMFG! That was great and and really disturbing. That was seriously freaky good. The whole part about the hosts screaming in their minds is just disturbing. And I just guh I don't know what to say other then that is really great writing yet really scary/disturbing and I hope that it doesn't really happen to them. God Ba'al is evil.

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[info]hariboo_smirks
2007-05-11 02:26 am UTC (link)
Baal is evil! And I love him so! I hope this doesn't happen either but it was fun to play with. *smirks*

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[info]magnavox_23
2007-05-11 02:36 am UTC (link)
Holy Crap! that was so freakin' amazing! *gives you a bazillion cookies* You know you've just spoiled the movie for me right? It cannot be THAT good, hehe. :P

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[info]hariboo_smirks
2007-05-11 11:38 am UTC (link)
LOL! Takes the cookies!! *hugs*

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[info]maggie004
2007-05-11 02:59 am UTC (link)
o.....m.....g..... so i literally just watched shanks' goodbye video on scifi.com and he mentioned that they do something pretty cool with his character in Continuum.... so frak me sideways if this happens....

either way, this was an amazing story... kudos

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[info]hariboo_smirks
2007-05-11 11:39 am UTC (link)
Hee. Dude, that's totally where this bunny originated from! "What if....What if..." *smile* Thanks, glad you like this.

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[info]maevebran
2007-05-11 06:45 am UTC (link)
Very nice. I liked this.

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[info]hariboo_smirks
2007-05-11 11:40 am UTC (link)
Thannks hun!

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[info]gioia_gg
2007-05-11 07:31 am UTC (link)
ok. hands down. I'm back.
prepare to a longg post. I hope that I don't screw up with quote thing..
But first things first..
If an Asgard came to me and told that they wanted to clone someone for their hope of survinig(bla bla bla..) and asked me who would be best for this job, I'd totally say "make mini-Isabels." Heheh, you're that amazing.
Allora...
Baal had always been power hungry. He had always wanted it all. The galaxy, the spoils, the knowledge, the woman. So when he saw his chance to take it in one amazingly simple move, he did.

A wonderful opening. gives clue what's coming next.

She was stunning. Definitely one of the most visually pleasing hosts Quetesh had ever taken, not to mention one with the most spirit. A spirit he had loved to break. She had fought every inch of the way, and now she was his.

He could still hear the good doctor floating like a mist in the back of his mind. He would rage whenever he struck her before the blending, and when the blending had finally occurred he had felt something in the host shatter.

Baal had smiled.

Now, the doctor still fought, but Baal could feel that twinge of lust increase every time he had his Queen under him, moving like the Goddess she was.

Baal would then kiss Quetesh harder and make her scream his name. Baal. Never Daniel Jackson, and he would feel his host splinter like glass every time.

Baal would smirk wider.


just evil. I can imagine his enigmatic smirk. twisted but still hot.

Quetesh had always wanted Baal. Even when she acted to the contrary. He was arrogance, avarice and sin personified and there was something about his neck that made it so delectable to lick.

definition of pure lust. Genius..I can totally snucrh this line:D

And now that she was back and a Goddess again, she could not deny her gratitude, would not deny her gratitude, did not want to deny her gratitude. She was wanton and greedy, not stupid. Anyway her King’s new host was quite the specimen. She also found it all manners of amusing that her host felt similarly and the jealously she gleaned from the host made it all the more fun.

Quetesh always liked to have fun.

Baal told her the story of her return and she laughed, deep and long before kissing her King and taking him inside her. She could feel her host’s want and pain.

Quetesh laughed.


Ohh..They're soo twisted and wicked and evil but still found it so hot. I'm so damned.. Ba'al/Daniel and Vala/Qetesh became my evil otp too:D

Quetesh quite enjoyed the new knowledge and with it burned the Priors much like they enjoyed doing to others; she had her host memories and would not stand for someone harming her body again. For any reason. That is only her King’s duty when they decided to be extra playful. She had always enjoyed the feel of silk wrapped around her skin, so tight that her skin would bloom like red flowers.

Together they took over the remnants of the System Lords. Their combined knowledge was vast and with it they also took the Lucien Alliance.

Netan’s screams as her King killed him still make her smile.

And when Baal had bent her over and fucked her senseless while Athena bleed out she had laughed.


ok. hands down. it's wrong but it turned me on. I think I'm a lost cause..

Both King and Queen laughed as they heard the rages in their minds, and SG-1 screamed and screamed. The humans yelled for their friends and Baal and Quetesh took great pleasure in telling them ‘Nothing of the host remains’ as Baal trailed a hand smeared in Lt. Col. Carter’s blood down his Queen’s cheek before giving her a tongue filled kiss.

Cazzo!! Stupenda. Damn you woman, still hot!!!

“Vala! Where…” He doesn't even get to finish his sentence before Sam interrupts him.

“She’s fine. Both surgeries are successful, she’s right here.” Sam’s voice is quiet.

Daniel looks at Sam to see her flinch a little at his gaze, and he gets a flash of his fingers and her blood. He looks away from the blonde in shame and focuses his gaze on the woman lying in the bed next to his.

His Queen.


Awww, now we're getting angst.

ok, i hit the quota thing... follow the second post:D

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[info]gioia_gg
2007-05-11 07:31 am UTC (link)
Daniel shakes off the voice and moves to go to her. Jack tries to stop him, but Daniel levels him with a glare that has the older man backing off, later Daniel will understand Jack saw too much of Baal in that glare.

Now his focus is on Vala.

Vala, who just went the same hell he did for the second time in her life, whose body he had mapped with hands he had no control over, who spilled as much blood as he did and then licked it off his body.

He represses the shiver all those feelings bring up in him; he represses the fact that not all the feelings are unpleasant.

Stroking her cheek, a move that not even the Goa’uld had taken from them, but in fact adopted, he watches as she rouses at his touch.


ohh, they're soo f*ucked up.

They both know that the hard part is coming.

That they will have to face all the malice and hurt they caused.

But now they can only hold on to the fact that they are free of the evil held them for so long.

Everything is always more than it seems.


I hope in near future you'll write a sequel to this fic. I really would like to see their strugles to copy with their life and their post-desnaked issuies.
Let your bunny take over you completely.:D

thanks for the this incredible little gem.

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[info]hariboo_smirks
2007-05-11 11:56 am UTC (link)
I'd totally say "make mini-Isabels." Heheh, you're that amazing.

Aww *blushes* Thanks hun!!!!! *super hug* I can just imagine the headache some people would get. Hee.

I can imagine his enigmatic smirk. twisted but still hot.A
They're soo twisted and wicked and evil but still found it so hot. I'm so damned.

That them in a nut shell "twisted but hot".

it's wrong but it turned me on. I think I'm a lost cause.

If you are then so am I, cuz it was one of my favorite lines to write. That and them kissing with Sam's blood literally in their hands, were one of the tougher things to write because I wanted to show how it's NOT them, but it's is, their bodies at least, and the creatures controlling their actions make them do some seriously f@cked up things. Plus it was hot. *winks*

now we're getting angst.
they're soo f*ucked up

Yep and YEP!!!

I hope in near future you'll write a sequel to this fic. I really would like to see their strugles to copy with their life and their post-desnaked issuies.

Maybe one day, my enabler!

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[info]secretbutterfly
2007-05-12 05:34 am UTC (link)
Speechless is a good descriptor for my reaction to this fic. It was just perfect. "Their eyes meet. Blue and silver. Never to be gold again..." Perfect line.
The whole thing...amazing.

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[info]hariboo_smirks
2008-07-22 05:08 pm UTC (link)
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it.

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[info]secretbutterfly
2007-05-12 05:36 am UTC (link)
Oh, oh! And, this line: "later Daniel will understand Jack saw too much of Baal in that glare." literally made me wince.

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[info]natalia5345
2008-01-15 07:49 pm UTC (link)
um. wow. *is overwhelmed.* that was. wow.

yeah i'm in a place of no words right now I think.

fantastic. if only the movie was going to be like that :( that would have been so amazing to see. but you let me see it in my head so that's great too!

*hugs* as always, you rock my socks

nat

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[info]hariboo_smirks
2008-07-22 05:09 pm UTC (link)
(yes, super late!) Dude, this was tough to write. If the movie had been like this, many people would have cried. ;)

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[info]berry_hearts
2008-03-29 03:38 am UTC (link)
Man you totally should have been Ba'al's Lotar.
For reals, yo. That would be the best thing ever- MS as Ba'al?!?!?!?!?!?
:D

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[info]hariboo_smirks
2008-07-22 05:11 pm UTC (link)
*snickers* I would have LOVED being Ba'al lotar, I have such massive Ba'al love. Oh, man, if crack!dream came true, MS would so be the Ba'al to Vala's Qetesh. Yes, that's how far my shipping of them extends. *eg*

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[info]berry_hearts
2008-07-22 05:14 pm UTC (link)
BUT it's SOOO easy. i mean... shit if there aren't any good daniel/vala scenes in continuum or her name doesn't get dropped on SGA, I will find brad wright and pinch him.

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[info]hariboo_smirks
2008-07-22 05:35 pm UTC (link)
Heh, well not to spoil you too much for Continuum, but CB rocks every scene she's in. But yeah, if we don't get Vala mention in SGA. *pinchy motion with fingers*

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