Critique Our Comic Arts

crit_art_comic @ 2007-11-06T07:51:00

2007-11-06T14:56:07Z

hi all,
I've got an assignment for class, where I have to do 4 pages of a graphic novel. Funny thing is, I have NO idea how to panel/lay out a graphic novel type thing. So if you guys could give me a few crits, I would be incredibly grateful.
Here's the quick thumbnail of the first four (it ballooned up to 9 pages, and I gotta figure out how to cut it down):

Just a little explanation of the panels: he gets up, gets ready and goes outside, goes out into the streets of Japan, and passes some alleyway. Then he goes to work, and goes down the elevator to the lower levels (he works in a storm sewer.)
He's getting harassed by some coworker, then he sees a mysterious girl behind a wall, chases after her and grabs a hold of her ribbon.

Thanks very much in advance.

new guy here

2007-08-31T20:42:00Z

hi. a few months ago, i started using photoshop to create fully digital illustrations. i really never used the program prior to buying a wacom , so i'm learning through trial and error. but i like to think hard work and dumb luck will lead to great things. below is an example of the kind of stuff i'm doing. i've been studying a lot of mary blair work, so the influence is obvious.

and suggestions, comments or critiques will be appreciated. i really just want to be a better illustrator.

lines on paper #6

2007-08-21T16:37:17Z

I tried to do what you'll thought.

2007-08-21T11:19:37Z

New Comic!

2007-08-16T15:39:04Z

A new series! FREE ADSPACE AVAILABLE!

Wuz hannanan?

2007-07-23T06:01:30Z

What happened to this sweet group? The first week outta the gate it was HOPPIN'. Now I'm seeing tumbleweeds blowing around. Lets get this going again, peoplez. I know you all have stuff to post, so grow some testiculars already. Whats the worst thing that could happen?

Here, another page from the upcomming SLEAZY SLICE #2. If I may be so bold, I will start the critique by saying: Once again I have totally PUSSED OUT for backgrounds. The more and more I think about it, the more I think drawing backgrounds is my area of weakest expertise. I seemingly will do anything to avoid it. I sometimes catch myself changing the script of the comic I am drawing so that it invloves less rendering of environment. TSK TSK, Bougie. TSK TSK

IN THE MOMENT (page 8)

2007-07-05T06:11:45Z

A little backstory on this page:
It is page 8 of an 18 page comic detailing the existence of a whore in a scary brothel on another planet. I'm 11 pages into it (penciled and inked) and it'll be in the next Sleazy Slice anthology comic due to publish in Feb. 2008.

Critique away, sisters and brothers!

crit_art_comic @ 2007-07-04T11:20:00

2007-07-04T18:31:59Z

Here's a strip I was fairly satisfied with that received little attention . Go ahead, tear this puppy apart. I have to admit that I can feel my petty little prideful ego kicking inside me. I'm trying to tell him to shut up. Also, this can be a crit of Snar-fled in general.

GUT FEELING 2 ( the lesser sequel?)

2007-07-04T08:51:38Z

This is PART 2 of a 2 part DEVO musicomic "Gut Feeling" PART 1 here
Now, part 1 got a bit of attention. A lot of positive comments and in fairly rapid succession. I followed it up with this, and didn't get 1/3rd the comments. I couldn't help but wonder if this one was much weaker? Didn't jive as well? So I'm posting it here to get some comments on it. Was it just a case of bad timing, or did this comic bomb? I can't tell.

venture bros

2007-07-02T17:58:16Z

Great idea for a community here!

Did this recently, and there's something a bit off about it, maybe too much background? could I crop in a little closer and keep the elements I want? Their poses seem to work individually, but I'm a bit wary of how they mesh.

A word on critiques in general - though I don't care what I get, I always prefer to give others the sh&t sandwich (something positive, then the negative, if possible an example) when I've got something severe to say. Though I understand why it's much more constructive to have comments other than "good job!", I've been on a few sites where people have excellent artistic rendering ability, which is their excuse to be a$$holes to anyone other then their own elite. Callous disregard for others putting their artistic egos on the line is something that always smacked of immature insecurity to me, people figuring that the only point in having power of opinion over others is to abuse it.

but hey, feel free to go crazy on my stuff . . .

FRED of the DEAD - Romance

2007-06-29T17:48:05Z

I thought this joke might have been a little too pedestrian. The 'Give you my hear' cliche' might be a little overused. Tell me what you think.
OH- and since this is the FIRST POST. I'll go over it with my own crits ---give some of the shy people out there an idea what I'm talking about.