kormantic ([info]kormantic) wrote in [info]choc_fic,
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Entry tags:kormantic, ot4, ronon dex, ronon/teyla/rodney/john, september 21, stargate: atlantis, teyla emmagan

the present hour, SGA, NC17, OT4


Title: the present hour
Author: Pares ([info]kormantic)
Rating: really pretty NC17
Fandom: SGA
Pairings: OT4
Warnings: None
Word count: 1200 or so
Summary: The only reason he'd even come in was because there'd been three lifesigns on the detector, which he'd figured meant, you know, kaffeeklatsch, or late night three-hand poker—at the outside, certainly nothing more risqué than maybe a drunken game of Twister.

A/N: The good lines are stolen from [info]linabean and the beta is brought to you by the letters P, U, N and K ([info]runpunkrun) and still more [info]linabean. Apologies for being a day late, kids.

the present hour
by Pares



"Forget the past and live the present hour." -- Sarah Knowles Bolton



P2M-744 had pretty much sucked: Rodney's lips white with fear, a stunned Teyla limp in Ronon's arms, and, for the first time, Ronon looking flat-out terrified. Later, Ronon admitted, in a low, reluctant murmur, that he'd been convinced that Teyla had stopped breathing. Happily, John had been able to get to his gun, and a few bursts of well-placed fire later, the Wraith had been buried alive in alien shale and the tunnel had failed to collapsed on his team as they ran for the jumper.

That night, Teyla shows up at his door to ask him if he wishes to sit in meditation with her, but John begs off in favor of a run instead. Too wound-up and unsettled to even think about wrestling with inner peace, John knows he'll be up all night anyway, walking the halls of Atlantis, trying to remind himself that everyone's safe and alive, that everything's fine.

*

Even when he isn't patrolling, John sometimes wanders around after hours checking in with (checking up on, Rodney huffs) anyone who happens to be up and around outside of their usual haunts. He's stumbled onto (and snuck away from) not a few torrid make out sessions in Atlantis' halls, and once or twice he's seen way more than he's wanted to see of one or another of his off-duty Marines, but he's never seen anything like this before.

The only reason he'd even come in was because there'd been three lifesigns on the detector, which he'd figured meant, you know, kaffeeklatsch, or late night three-hand poker—at the outside, certainly nothing more risqué than maybe a drunken game of Twister.

For John, it's like walking into an art gallery. A really ritzy, minimalist, kinky art gallery.

It's a huge, sparsely furnished room, golden with flickering candlelight, and at its center is a wide, table-high platform, where Ronon sits at a slight angle from the door, cross-legged on an Athosian blanket, naked and gleaming with sweat. Teyla straddles his lap, smiling softly, chin held proudly high, and there's a hint of joined, slick flesh when she kneels up and then resettles herself with a low sound of satisfaction. Rodney is standing on the floor behind her, facing away from John and holding Teyla's sweat-dark hair to one side so he can press his mouth against the nape of her neck.

All the nudity on display is only a little less startling than the fact that Rodney is having a three-way, and the entire image brands itself onto John's brain with searing finality, but only after his first pang of hey, what about me? has given way to a sudden state of confused arousal.

Rodney's cheek is now mashed against Teyla's hair, his mouth slack, hands cupping her shoulders, and even by candlelight John can see his face is flushed. After a moment, Rodney reaches around to cup Teyla's breasts, dipping his head briefly to rest his forehead against her shoulder. Ronon's hands smooth down from her hips to cover the curves of her ass, and Teyla nods approvingly, her gaze locked with Ronon's, her face glowing, her breath strong and audible. Watching her now, John realizes how tired she'd looked at his door earlier that night, and is relieved to see that fleeting impression of fragility fall away.

"She's ready for you," Ronon rumbles, his eyes never leaving Teyla's face. There's a shuddery indrawn breath from Rodney, and he sets one hand on Teyla's hip, using the other one to guide himself (John can't look away from Rodney's stiff cock, slick with lube, filling his hand) forward against, up, into Teyla's body. They all go very still for what seems a very long time, Rodney's face taut with concentration, Ronon's expression one of utter devotion, Teyla sweating freely, with a fierce, glad look that reminds John of a picture he'd seen of a goddess of the hunt. The moment's broken when Rodney clasps Teyla's upper arm and lets out a little moan before beginning to rock forward minutely, just inching in, with tiny nudging hitches of his hips.

Teyla's head falls back slightly, lips parting in a soundless cry, her eyes fluttering closed. Ronon tenses, candlelight limning the line of his shoulders, and he says her name in a low, urgent voice that sounds almost panicked to John's ears. Immediately, her eyes slip open again, and she caresses Ronon's cheek with the backs of her fingers.

"You do well. You do—" and she gives a little hitching moan, "Very well," she murmurs, and Rodney says, "Christ," softly, reverently.

They're trembling, John realizes; Rodney is clearly struggling the hardest, trying to steady his breathing, the hand on Teyla's hip flexing visibly.

"Okay, okay, here's the thing," Rodney babbles suddenly. "This is—this is—Christ this is good, it's good, it's too good, I mean, I don't want to let you down, you should have what you want, you deserve it more than anyone, but—"

"Rodney," Teyla says, and her voice is throaty and tender, but commanding. At the sound of her voice, Ronon lifts his hands to Rodney's shoulders, thumbs stroking Rodney's skin as Teyla continues, "We are with you. Be with us. We are all here with you. Is that not right, John?"

John freezes, a kaleidoscope of emotion cartwheeling in his gut as everything slams into him at once: the dryness of his mouth, a distant tingling in his hands, the hot splash of shame at being caught, the bitterness of his unexpected jealousy, the heavy smell of sex and sweat and melting candle wax, and most of all, the damning, unforgivable, and painfully obvious tenting of his loose sweats.

Ronon looks at him with unsurprised interest, a sort of amused satisfaction that seems to say, "It's about fucking time", but Rodney, Rodney is stock-still and wide-eyed, and looking anything but glad to see him.

Teyla squirms a bit, turning to hold out her near hand toward John, and Ronon's eyes fall closed with a happy-sounding grunt.

John makes some sound, not quite a word and Teyla smiles at him suddenly, girlishly, and he takes an entirely involuntary step forward as Ronon shifts beneath her, his brow tensing. Cupping her palm against Ronon's throat over his tattoo to steady him, Teyla kisses him gently, soothingly, urging him to keep it together. "Not yet," she says softly. "We are not there yet."

Rodney's still staring at him, his face less afraid now, almost hopeful, and John licks his lips uneasily. Rodney screws his eyes shut then and practically whimpers, "Seriously, I think I'm going to give myself a stroke—" and John just goes to him, resting his hands on Rodney's back, his fingers touching Ronon's spread against Rodney's shoulder blades, says, "It's okay, buddy, you've got it," and Rodney shakes under his hands before hiding his face against Teyla's hair.

Running his hand firmly up along Rodney's arm to his shoulder, John cups the back of Rodney's neck.

"That's really not—making it any less hot," Rodney complains.

John hears himself laugh a little, because he's nervous, and everyone else is naked and he's trying to derail his impending freakout at this sudden and inexplicable team orgy he is apparently about to take part in, and yet Rodney sounds exactly the way he always does, and that makes it easy somehow.

Crowding up against Rodney from shoulder to thigh, John feels Ronon's big hand ruffle his hair, palm the cap of his skull and give his head a brief, friendly shake. He hears Teyla make a pleased sound as Ronon shifts beneath her again, and Rodney lets out a tiny whine and finally shoves home all the way, buried to the hilt in Teyla, who gives a pretty hilarious little squeak before she laughs out loud, almost purring, "Rodney."

"There, see? I knew you could do it," John says, lips grazing Rodney's reddened ear.

"Oh god," Rodney pants, "Shut up, shut up shut up shut up! Can't you see I'm trying to concentrate here?"

John lets one hand fall on Ronon's knee and reaches forward to take Teyla's left hand, letting his mouth learn the glide of Rodney's skin just behind his ear, his cock prodding at the high, hot curve of Rodney's bare ass through his sweatpants.

"Now," Teyla says, sounding breathless and elated and sure, squeezing John's hand, and John slides his hand up Ronon's thigh and bites down hard on Rodney's shoulder. Rodney seizes up, bitching, "Ow—what—oh," and John feels the others come together, gasping or silent, still or shuddering, and John holds them through it, brings them safely down.

END

Prompt: Sept. 21
6. Stargate: Atlantis, OT4 Ronon/Teyla/Rodney/John: Puppy pile/cuddling - "Forget the past and live the present hour." -- Sarah Knowles Bolton

Apologies for the delay.




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[info]laurashapiro
2007-09-23 04:38 am UTC (link)
When there are this many people in the room, even when I don't even know the people, I have to come see. (:

You give it good, girl. Mmm, I love the smell of double penetration in the morning. Smells like love -- the big, broad, all-encompassing kind. ::satisfied sigh::

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well hey, you liked it!
[info]kormantic
2007-09-23 04:51 am UTC (link)
They love each other so so much. Seriously. I bet the actors cuddle off-set all the time. In SECRET.

It's a terrible show. You should watch it!

xo

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(no subject) - [info]linabean, 2007-09-23 05:05 am UTC
I did! - [info]kormantic, 2007-09-23 05:08 am UTC
Re: well hey, you liked it! - [info]laurashapiro, 2007-09-23 02:38 pm UTC

[info]copracat
2007-09-23 04:46 am UTC (link)
It was worth the wait.

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woo!
[info]kormantic
2007-09-23 04:52 am UTC (link)
I was so mad that I missed the deadline. I've broken my streak! But at least I posted. Mm, porny!

Thanks for letting me know you liked it. (g)

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[info]mecurtin
2007-09-23 04:50 am UTC (link)
the melted puddle of gooooooo says: ajfal'jfdasl;jfa'lal;'sas;'fkj. I will forgive you *anything* if you write the follow-up.

Also, I think I need a stick-figure diagram, cuz I can't quite figure out who's doing what to whom. Is this double penetration, one dick per orifice? or are they doubling up? or what? Science wants to know!

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one tab for each slot
[info]kormantic
2007-09-23 04:58 am UTC (link)
o o ~o 0;
< < < >
I I __>_<__ I I John, Rodney, table, Teyla, Ronon. Um. Yeah. Sorta like that. Only with less ASCII text.

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Re: one tab for each slot - [info]mecurtin, 2007-09-23 04:56 pm UTC
Re: one tab for each slot - [info]kormantic, 2007-09-23 07:11 pm UTC
Re: one tab for each slot - [info]miss_pryss, 2007-09-23 06:14 pm UTC
Re: one tab for each slot - [info]kormantic, 2007-09-23 07:12 pm UTC

[info]cathexys
2007-09-23 05:00 am UTC (link)
Oh wow...I love that final line, John feels the others come together, gasping or silent, still or shuddering, and John holds them through it, brings them safely down....John still not wholly with them but kind of watching over them and just caring so fucking much...

And I love Ronon her...a lot!!!

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exactly!
[info]kormantic
2007-09-23 05:03 am UTC (link)
Oh wow...I love that final line, John feels the others come together, gasping or silent, still or shuddering, and John holds them through it, brings them safely down....John still not wholly with them but kind of watching over them and just caring so fucking much...

That was exactly what I was going for. Whew! I'm glad it came through.

And I love Ronon her a lot, too! (g)

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Re: exactly! - [info]cathexys, 2007-09-23 05:06 am UTC
Re: exactly! - [info]kormantic, 2007-09-23 05:17 am UTC

[info]linabean
2007-09-23 05:02 am UTC (link)
You do well. You do very well.

(Dude, still so hot.)

btw, if you're not opposed to a tiny edit, it's two e's in kaffeeklatsch. Sorry I missed it!

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fixed!
[info]kormantic
2007-09-23 05:04 am UTC (link)
Thanks, my little rockstar. (g)

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[info]yesitsmimi
2007-09-23 05:17 am UTC (link)
Ok this -was - is - the hottest thing ever. The team dynamic is perfect and JOHN is beyond perfect, and oh... best ot4 ever (and I do like me some ot4.) Lovely, lovely description. Great Teyla great Rodney, great everybody. And the ending made me just a little sad for John. I hope he gets to be in the middle someday, instead of just... piloting the orgy-ship, if you know what I mean. But of course that would be the role he would gravitate towards.

Can you expand this? I am so interested in this relationship - why DID they start without him? You've drawn such a perfect vignette that I am greedy for a full mural's worth of this.

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well, see, Teyla stopped by to invite him
[info]kormantic
2007-09-23 05:25 am UTC (link)
without saying, "Hey, we're going to have some life affirming group sex. You ins?" But he totally blew her off! And also, Rodney wasn't sure about the John aspect, what with his military career and possible not-gayness and all.

And don't you worry about John; he'll get to be in the middle just as soon as Rodney can get a lock on his knees. (g)

I'm completely glad that this worked for you; OT4 is so tricky!

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(no subject) - [info]mecurtin, 2007-09-23 04:57 pm UTC

[info]spike21
2007-09-23 05:26 am UTC (link)
magic beans! magic beans!! Teyla SQUEAKED.

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she so totally did
[info]kormantic
2007-09-23 05:30 am UTC (link)
Teyla needs all the squeak-inducing hot group sex she can get. She works so hard! To save the galaxy from life-sucking aliens! It is too much to ask that she get laid by a group of hot guys? No! It is not!

:) I'm so glad you dug on it, angeline.

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[info]wojelah
2007-09-23 05:42 am UTC (link)
Oh, gorgeous and hot and funny. Go you!

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woo!
[info]kormantic
2007-09-23 06:20 am UTC (link)
What a lovely thing to say. (g)

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[info]telesilla
2007-09-23 06:20 am UTC (link)
Wow, fantastic and hot and tender and caring and.... *flails*

Excellent all the way around!

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hooray!
[info]kormantic
2007-09-23 06:26 am UTC (link)
It worked for you! And it was just what I wanted people to think. (g)

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[info]darkrosetiger
2007-09-23 06:20 am UTC (link)
I AM SO HAPPY IN MY PANTS NOW!

(I'd be more articulate, but I'm about to head into my 7th straight day of work with 5 more to go. I'm a little punchy.)

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my happy pants es su happy pants.
[info]kormantic
2007-09-23 06:27 am UTC (link)
Or something. (g)

I'm glad you (and your pants) enjoyed this. Now get back to work! ::cracks whip::

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All your fault - [info]telesilla, 2007-09-23 06:53 am UTC
Re: All your fault - [info]kormantic, 2007-09-23 04:16 pm UTC

[info]springwoof
2007-09-23 07:34 am UTC (link)
woohoo! excellent OT4!
I love how Teyla is so clearly in command here. "We are with you. Be with us. We are all here with you. Is that not right, John?" That moment when John finds out his voyeurism has been discovered is perfectly delicious.

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doh! they can see that I can see them!!
[info]kormantic
2007-09-23 04:07 pm UTC (link)
Oh, John.

I'm glad to hear that I pulled this off. OT4=soso tricky!

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[info]siriaeve
2007-09-23 08:54 am UTC (link)
Rarr. *two thumbs up*

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hee.
[info]kormantic
2007-09-23 04:07 pm UTC (link)
I approve your approval!

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[info]emeraldsword
2007-09-23 09:56 am UTC (link)
wow *fans self* I do think that this was made stronger and more emotional by the injury at the beginning - I loved the way that everything seemed to come out of that. It was really good - hot and emotional, which is always the best!

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woo!
[info]kormantic
2007-09-23 04:08 pm UTC (link)
Comfort sex of Loooooooooove. I'm so glad you liked it.

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[info]graycastle
2007-09-23 11:28 am UTC (link)
oh, John. I love the way he comes in, at first ashamed to be caught, and then just holds them all up, just needs his hands on them while they, y'know, "life-affirm." Really, beautiful, with a tenderness that often gets lost in the fun hotness of OT4 fic.

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yay for tenderness I say
[info]kormantic
2007-09-23 04:09 pm UTC (link)
I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for letting me know!

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[info]wildestranger
2007-09-23 01:34 pm UTC (link)
Gnah. Lovely.

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::loves your icon::
[info]kormantic
2007-09-23 04:10 pm UTC (link)
Oh, Rodney's shoulders, how did you get to be so hot?

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Re: ::loves your icon:: - [info]krysalys, 2007-09-23 05:31 pm UTC

[info]monanotlisa
2007-09-23 01:43 pm UTC (link)
oh, my. hot! whoa. ♥

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yay!
[info]kormantic
2007-09-23 04:10 pm UTC (link)
words of one syllable convey your delight!

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[info]stillwaters11
2007-09-23 02:27 pm UTC (link)
and John feels the others come together, gasping or silent, still or shuddering, and John holds them through it, brings them safely down.
Guh! But more than that, I love how right they all are together.

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they are full of love.
[info]kormantic
2007-09-23 04:11 pm UTC (link)
right up to the brim, even.

I'm so glad you liked it. (g)

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Awwwwww!
[info]minnow1212
2007-09-23 04:11 pm UTC (link)
I love it that one of John's thoughts is this:

>John realizes how tired she'd looked at his door earlier that night, and is relieved to see that fleeting impression of fragility fall away.<

Plus which, it cracks me up that "meditation" is apparently code for "orgy." Poor John, having lost the team decoder ring and being surprised like that. *g*

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Re: Awwwwww!
[info]kormantic
2007-09-23 04:15 pm UTC (link)
It's just like John to notice that about her and then not admit that he'd seen it, even to himself. If he'd let himself see how fragile she'd looked, he'd have had to go to the "meditation" and then where would he have been? Oh, right, in the middle of hott teamy sexy goodness.

Oh, John!

snicker.

It's not like Teyla would say, "Orgy at my place!" Besides, they were so totally going to be relaxed when they were done, and also, Teyla makes them concnetrate.

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[info]capra_maritimus
2007-09-23 04:27 pm UTC (link)
Yuuuuuuummy. :D:D:D:D:D:D

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woo!
[info]kormantic
2007-09-23 07:09 pm UTC (link)
Thanks for letting me know you liked it.

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[info]gritkitty
2007-09-23 04:49 pm UTC (link)
"That's really not—making it any less hot," Rodney complains.

Yeah, what Rodney said. ; ) That was wicked awesome. My day is made!

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your day is fresh baked and 100% natural!
[info]kormantic
2007-09-23 07:14 pm UTC (link)
Thanks for letting me know you thought it was hot!

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[info]melodyunity
2007-09-23 05:29 pm UTC (link)
I loved this. It was hot like a scorching hot thing, and everybody was so very in character. Perfect.

Rodney cracked me up:

Running his hand firmly up along Rodney's arm to his shoulder, John cups the back of Rodney's neck.

"That's really not—making it any less hot," Rodney complains.


'Cause that's something to complain about, LOL!

and

"There, see? I knew you could do it," John says, lips grazing Rodney's reddened ear.

"Oh god," Rodney pants, "Shut up, shut up shut up shut up! Can't you see I'm trying to concentrate here?"


Hahahaha! Oh, Rodney! Only you! *hugs him*

But this:

John feels the others come together, gasping or silent, still or shuddering, and John holds them through it, brings them safely down.

made me tear up a little. God, John is so in love with these three people and so very afraid to let himself open up to them, but he wants to so much...it's heartbreaking. But I also have faith that none of them, not Ronon, not Rodney, and certainly not Teyla, are going to let him get away with that anymore, not now that they know he really wants in. So, yay!

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I'm so glad that came through.
[info]kormantic
2007-09-23 07:15 pm UTC (link)
about John taking care of them and opening himself up to them. yay indeed! And Teyla is going to have her wicked, wicked way with him like you wouldn't believe. (g)

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[info]ozsaur
2007-09-23 06:10 pm UTC (link)
Not just hot, which it is, but gorgeously written too. I'm glad John found them, and had enough sense to join them. Really enjoyed this and I'm delighted you wrote that prompt.

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me too!
[info]kormantic
2007-09-23 07:16 pm UTC (link)
Even if it was late.

And yee, you think it's gorgeously written! ::twirls::

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[info]steammmpunk
2007-09-23 08:48 pm UTC (link)
This just makes me so happy. Gorgeous and sizzling and love love love the team dynamic. (Also, what about me? was so totally awww John moment.) Thank you for the truly delightful read. ♥

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thank you for the delightful comment
[info]kormantic
2007-09-24 03:00 am UTC (link)
Yay, you thought it sizzled!

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[info]anatsuno
2007-09-23 10:11 pm UTC (link)
Yes, yes, it all totally comes through! John and his hesitation and his affirmation. Oh, it is lovely through and through. I'm glad they get to get this together. *nod*

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OT4 - it's tricky
[info]kormantic
2007-09-24 03:02 am UTC (link)
but soooo worth it, I think. Think of all that love!

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[info]emma_in_oz
2007-09-23 10:55 pm UTC (link)
The combination of both hot and sweet is delightful.

Also: I love the way Teyla is so totally in charge of her boys.

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they are so her bitchez.
[info]kormantic
2007-09-24 03:03 am UTC (link)
But she's a benevolent dictator!

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