Kathryn A ([info]kerravonsen) wrote in [info]b7friday,
@ 2004-07-14 11:18:00
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Current mood: determined
Current music:random radio noise

Theme of distance
Running a bit late with this one. 100 words, not including title. Not that happy with some of the phrasing, oh well.

Bridging the Distance

He told himself it was purely pragmatic: they couldn't afford to be one man down. The fact that he'd been the first to notice her absence, that was merely superior observation, not personal concern.

How to bring her out of her little self-imposed exile? He was no psychotech, with smart words and slippery phrases. What did he know about comfort, anyway? Alien, she was as far away as Auron was from Earth. All he had was honesty.

How could one bridge the distance? One barrier at a time.

"What is it?"

"Well, it looks like a door, and it's closed."


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[info]hafren
2004-07-14 05:49 am UTC (link)
All he had was honesty.

That I like

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[info]kerravonsen
2004-07-14 06:47 am UTC (link)
Thanks. That bit just felt very Avon to me -- cuz the following dialogue was showing he wasn't trying to coddle Cally in a sentimental way, but just say things as he saw it -- that "regret is part of being alive".

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[info]pinkdormouse
2004-07-14 06:42 am UTC (link)
The first sentence works nicely as both introduction and characterisation. And you got a good simile in there for the theme interpretation.

Gina

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[info]kerravonsen
2004-07-14 06:48 am UTC (link)
Thanks.

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[info]snowgrouse
2004-07-14 08:34 pm UTC (link)
That sounds very Avon to me. Thinking in practical terms (or pretending to), not very familiar with comforting or finding it easy. Very good, thank you:).

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[info]kerravonsen
2004-07-14 09:27 pm UTC (link)
Thank you.

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