Jenny that is called Jenny ([info]shieldmaidenjen) wrote in [info]_scourgify_,
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Rose Monroe, angsty rape victim and 10 Walker

Story Or Series Title: An Elvin's Love (Yes, that's the real title)
Fandom: The one with Leggy, kool pet panthers, and RAPE ANGSTYNESS11!
Culprit Author's Name: Shero (I immediately wanted to call troll when I first saw this story, but due to her bio I'm not so sure)

Full Name (plus titles if any): Rose Monroe or "Kat" (She randomly says that Strider can call her "Kat" and then never mentions it again)
Full Species(es): Hellian Elf-girl or something
Hair Color (include adjectives): shoulder-length wavy brown hair that she keeps in a small ponytail
Eye Color (include adjectives): emerald eyes that sparkle like jades in the sunlight
Unusual Markings/Colorations: slender with the right curves in the right places, long arms and legs. Basically, she had an hourglass figure... skin tone was a pale peach color. Her lips were pink, close to red. She has a heart shaped face
Special Possessions (if any): a pet panther named "Bijan" that she found in the woods and "Star," a horse she also found in the woods. The panther was sent by her Elven parents to protect her.

Annoying Origin: I'm glad you asked. Her parents, Mark and Stacie Monroe were the complete opposite of her. They were cruel people whom ran scams on the innocents. BUT WAIT! THERE'S MORE OMG!1 Her real parents are Elves named Melcindómien and Vanya. They sent her to modern times because she is the Saviour of Middle-earth (TM).
Annoying Connections To Canon Characters: Gets stabbed on Weathertop instead of Frodo. Arwen takes her to Rivendell instead of Frodo. Are we seeing a pattern here? She will be a 10th Walker as well.
Annoying Special Abilities: Knows martial arts, swordplay, and archery
Other Annoying Traits: Movie canon all the way, man!

Please include a small sample of the worst of this story: (So hard to choose...)


The retarded panther pet she found in the woods

She also had a pet panther. He was ebony black with piercing yellow eyes
(He can't just be 'black,' can he? No, he's got to be special EBONY BLACK).

He’s her protector. His name was Bijan, which means “Hero” in Elf
(*headdesk*). He was always her hero, protecting her from her parents (he doesn't sound like he does a very good job at that, judging by how much she complains about being hurt). She had found him abandoned near the forest near her two-story home (I could be wrong but I'm guessing that she lives in an area without native panthers). He was just a cub, bleeding from very deep wounds. She cared for the cub until he was strong enough. She snuck him raw meat and milk. Her parents knew nothing* of him.
(*her emphasis in bold on this one, not mine*)

When he was fully recovered, she had walked to the forest opening and set him down. She gently ushered him into the forest. He never went into the forest because he stayed at her heel. Rose had returned home, hoping the cub would be all right. The next day, she was very surprised to see him sleeping next to her the next morning
(Somehow he had magically walked through the door).

Since then, he had stayed with her. Her parents eventually found out. They tried to get rid of him
(Why didn't they call Animal Control?), but he had bared his fangs and since then, he’s stayed in Rose’s room and then came out when everyone was gone. He would sleep at the foot of her bed and protected her as she slept.

When she cried, he’d be there to comfort her. He’d purr, nuzzle, and lick to calm her.

At school, it was no different. Even though she’s very sweet to people, they would treat her like she was the dirt of the Earth. They would ignore her, push her, take her things, threw food on her. She took this, even though she was sad that no one would stop to get to know her. She only had four terrific friends that stuck by her
(Only four terrific friends? Even though no one wants to get to know her? WTF) . The popular group bullied her. They bullied her cause she was into fantasy books and that she got straight A’s in her classes (I just realized that this girl is supposedly 22 years old. Why the fuck is she still in high school?). She’s frightened of one boy ever since the incident last year. A guy named Adrian who always harassed her to no end leads the boy. They’d call her names and play very mean tricks on her.


Once again we have a Sue who uses rape for angst
“Leave me alone, Adrian.” Rose says as she closes her locker.

She tried to get by, but couldn’t. The others had surrounded her. They look at her as if she was a piece of meat. She whimpers and looks at Adrian. Tears are upon her eyes.

“Why do you do this! I haven’t done anything to you!” Rose says, starts crying. “Because you’re revolting and are an abomination!” he yells as he grabs her arms and rams her into nearby lockers.
(And the reason why a responsible adult doesn't intervene, seeing as this is happening at a school, is...?)

Rose yelps and whimpers in pain from the impact. The bruises and the slashes she received from her parents reopened
(Could this get any more stupid? Someone would have noticed all of her little wounds and called CPS by then). The others then hold her as a couple starts hitting and punching. She just stays still to allow them to beat her (For fuck's sake - yell and scream, you idiot!). After the beating, Adrian dragged a bloodied and beaten Rose, into a deserted classroom.

As soon as they were in, Adrian motioned for his buddies to leave. They do and Adrian locked the door. He then set his eyes on Rose. She huddled in a dark corner, in the shape of a tight circle. Even though she was in agonizing pain, she was crying cause she knew what was about to happen. As Adrian’s form came towards her, everything became a blur.

She had felt Adrian drag her from her position and roughly pushed her to the floor. She then felt his weight on her. She feels Adrian’s lips on her neck, nipping and biting.

“NNOOOOOOO! SSSSSSSTTTTTTTOOOOOOOOOPPPPPPP!” she screams
(Can't you just see her dragging out those 'P's?), trying to get him off her, yet with most of her strength gone, she was able to move a little. She heard him say; “You’re MINE!” And then her clothes rip and he plunged into her.

She screams from the pain
(And once again, no responsible adult comes). She felt him punch and slap her to be quiet. She couldn’t believe what was happening to her. She wanted her first time to be special and with the person she loved (Yeah, right. She knows she really wanted to be raped just so she can eventually angst and cry about it to Leggy just before they have uncanonical sex).

Darkness starts taking her and she welcomes it. The next she knew, she was in the hospital with major cuts and bruises. After she was raped, her friends had found her in her state and they called the principle
(Seriously, where are all of the teachers and good kids during all of this? It just doesn't add up) and that’s how they found them. They then told Rose that Adrian was arrested for abuse and rape.

&End of Flashback&

Ever since then, Adrian had gotten out of jail from probation
(Uh, WHAT? I doubt he wouldn't be out just like that.). He was ordered to keep away from Rose, but he didn’t listen (Ten bucks that no one even issued a restraining order). Rose has avoided Adrian and his group, but they still harass her. Adrian would wink and smile evilly at her.

When she was alone, he’d grab her and kiss her hard, reminding her that she belonged to HIM. For 2 years, Adrian would come to her house at night and rape her.
(That's right - TWO YEARS *facepalm**headdesk**Headdesk*)


Rose gets stabbed instead of Frodo. How typical

The Nazgûls screeched, causing Frodo to gasp and tighten his grasp on Roses’ shirt (Introducing Wimpy!Frodo, Version 2.0!).

“You cannot win, human. HE will have you,” The Witch-King hissed.
(Of course the Witch King is more interested in the Sue than the RING. And here I was thinking that the Ring was central to the story)

Then without warning he lashed out with his sword towards her. Rose, acting on instinct, quickly pushed Frodo away so he wouldn’t get struck and swung her blades, blocking the Witch Kings’ attack. She looked stunned on how quick she swung the sword and blocked his attack. “When did I learn how to do that!” she thought
(well, maybe her stupid swordplay lessons had something to do with it). She quickly came out of her observation when she heard the Witch-King screech in rage. Without thinking, she dove in an attempt to attack, but he too blocked it. Suddenly, the Witch-King grasped another blade and swung it towards Frodo, but Rose, seeing this; ran in front of Frodo, and took the stabbing from the blade instead (And then she died. HURRAY).

Frodo went wide-eyed as he saw Rose take the blow that was meant for him. Rose gasped from the pain the wound caused; her blades fell from her hands as she fell to her knees. The Witch-King removed his blade from Rose as he and the other Nazgul hear shouting.

Rose grasped her injured shoulder and let out a blood-curdling scream. She had never felt pain like this before in her entire life. Suddenly, she saw Strider and Bijan run in front of her. Strider had a torch in one hand and his sword in another.

Rose fell onto her back, gasping in pain and panic. The Hobbits ran to her side to see if there was anything they could do, but none of them knew how to treat wounds such as this
(That's okay. Just let her die. No one will care).

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[info]valis2

October 13 2005, 02:38:01 UTC 6 years ago

When she cried, he’d be there to comfort her. He’d purr, nuzzle, and lick to calm her.

That sounds soooo dirty.

“Because you’re revolting and are an abomination!” he yells as he grabs her arms and rams her into nearby lockers.

Oh yeah, all the high school boys I knew talked like that. *rolls eyes*

He then set his eyes on Rose. She huddled in a dark corner, in the shape of a tight circle.

Wonder Twin powers activate! Form of...tight circle!

Oh, this is AWFUL. Your eyes, your poor bleeding eyes...

[info]b2wm

October 13 2005, 03:50:08 UTC 6 years ago

Wait... she left him in the woods... but he never left her heel. And then she wonders if he'll be all right.

And I thought I was blind...

And don't get me started on rape-for-angst, or you'll get nothing but wordless screaming and the sounds of Sues being ripped limb-from-limb.

[info]jen_deben

October 13 2005, 04:10:32 UTC 6 years ago

I see why you called troll at first; this is so badly written it's actually very funny.

The popular group bullied her. They bullied her cause she was into fantasy books and that she got straight A’s in her classes.

Yes, I'm sure that was only put in for artistic verisimilitude; that bit couldn't possibly have been dragged straight from the (ooh, approximately fifteen-year-old) author's real life. Self-insertion character, anyone?

[info]voposama

October 13 2005, 12:34:33 UTC 6 years ago

I think fifteen might even be pushing it...

[info]mylla

October 13 2005, 06:07:03 UTC 6 years ago

For 2 years, Adrian would come to her house at night and rape her.

So, like, they arrested him the first time, so quickly that she hadn't even regained consciousness, but they just give up after that? Riiight.

SSSSSSTTTTTTTOOOOOOOOOPPPPPPP!

And now I've got this picture of this Sue yelling, "SSSSSSSSSSSSS tuh tuh tuh tuh tuh tuh tuh tuh tuh OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO puh puh puh puh puh puh puh puh puh!"


Also, I think I should take legal action. The constant tense shifts gave me whiplash.

[info]shieldmaidenjen

October 13 2005, 20:38:35 UTC 6 years ago

"SSSSSSSSSSSSS tuh tuh tuh tuh tuh tuh tuh tuh tuh OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO puh puh puh puh puh puh puh puh puh!"

That is exactly what I picture too. ;) And it is hilarious. Suethors come up with the funniest stuff sometimes...

[info]sailormac

October 13 2005, 14:06:46 UTC 6 years ago

“Why do you do this! I haven’t done anything to you!” Rose says, starts crying. “Because you’re revolting and are an abomination!” he yells as he grabs her arms and rams her into nearby lockers.

Apparently, this Adrian is a professional Sue hunter.

[info]kermit_thefrog

October 13 2005, 14:26:08 UTC 6 years ago

O_O.....O_O.....>_<...O_o
Okay, that is BY FAR the dumbest Abused!UberAngsty!Sue I have ever seen. Not to mention the wimpiest! GAAH! *Sporks her own eyes*

[info]cactus_wren

October 13 2005, 16:44:13 UTC 6 years ago

So if her uber-speshul ebony black panther sleeps at the foot of her bed every night to protect her, how is it that her rapist can get into her room to rape for two years? Methinks Bijan is doing a piss-poor job of protecting her.
I didn't realize til you said it that she is 22 and still in high school. This fic is just full of contradictions, isn't it? And of course, full of sickening Sue-ness.

[info]lilypadhead

October 13 2005, 21:01:07 UTC 6 years ago

Oh my dear god. That was sickening. What evil mind could think of such things. Not even Morgoth could devise such evil.

Oh, may I add, I like fantasy books (and I go to High School) and I'm not hated by all, or beaten, or raped. My grades are pretty good, I think, but the stupid little pris that sits in front of me rubs her better-then-me grades in my face.*mumbles*

But anyways, brave you. I could never stand reading such a thing, I would tear my eyes out or something. I feel bad for the poor panther, having to live with a Sue :(. I think he would be safer with the animal control. I think Adrian is alright. The beatings were cool. But raping Sue and kissing Sue is ew... They have coodies!


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