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@ 2008-06-09 07:00:00
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Entry tags:character:harry potter, character:james potter, character:lily evans, character:sirius back, rating:g

Ficlet: The Precipice (James, Lily, Harry, Sirius, Other), G
Title: The Precipice
Author: [info]joanwilder
Characters: James, Lily, Harry, Sirius, Other Canon Character
Summary: You wish that some things could've stayed the same.
Rating: G
Warnings: None
Notes: The Harry Potter universe belongs to J.K. Rowling and her book and film companies. Thanks to my beta for the read-through.

 Godric's Hollow is a beautiful place.

Small enough to be a tight-knit community of people who meddle in each other's affairs. But large enough to provide a few diversions.

You've always loved it here—you've come here since James was a boy at Hogwarts. Sometimes at the Yule hols, but mostly during the summer ones. Idyllic days of wandering the countryside, making mischief most of the time. Ha! But mischief managed!

James had to ruin it all by getting married, the tosser. But there are still times when you come, along with the others, and it's the Marauders loosed on the village once again! More often than not, it's to walk into the village for milk for baby Harry, or birdseed for the feeders, and not to spell the lily pads of the pond so the four of you can skip across with dry feet.

If you're honest, though, you'll have to admit that things just aren't the same. Despite the changes the baby brought, there are other things that have got in the way…weightier things…darker things.

The Dark Lord is rising, and no one…no one is unaffected. Everyone feels the pressure to choose.

Everyone's choice. Your choice: resist and risk your life, or follow as so many already have.

It's not as simple as it would seem. After all, entire families are split in this matter of loyalties. You, you've never attracted much notice; you've never taken the lead; you've allowed James and Sirius to make most of your decisions for you. You know you have an ingrown weakness, one that you feel powerless to overcome.

Lily opens the back door, and waves. "Come on, then. Have a butterbeer before supper."

You look around the kitchen for a place to lay the flowers you've brought, but Lily rescues you. "You always remember," she says as she takes them from you and buries her nose in the midst of the daisies. Throwing an arm around you, she pulls you into a fragrant and heart-felt embrace. For a moment, you can smell lavender in her hair, and you close your eyes.

Laughing, she pushes you away. "Go on, here's a bottle, they're in James' study."

They both raise a glass and give a cheer as you enter. James makes a face as he takes the bottle of butterbeer, and hands you a glass instead.

"She said butterbeer. I said, 'Of course.' But Sirius here brought something better." James cranes his neck out into the hallway, then carefully shuts the door. "No sense getting her back up."

You might be out of school, but nothing's changed, you think to yourself as you listen to the two of them talk about the last Order meeting, realizing after a while that you have little to contribute. You watch them as they talk, and feel a surge of uselessness—they've been there for you when it counted. How you wish you could be as strong as they are. But you can't…because of what you are.

"We're being more careful," James states quietly, swirling the whiskey in his glass. "Albus was here yesterday to talk about some other precautions." He takes a swallow, then trades a sober look with Sirius and yourself. No one speaks for a moment, until you have to blurt it out.

"I can't stand the idea of just waiting for him to come after us—you and Lily especially. You have Harry. You have to be extra careful. I wish I could do something," you mutter in frustration. You're staring at them when the sound of Lily's voice calling you all to supper breaks the moment.

Harry jabbers happily throughout the meal, passed from person to person, fed by hand and bounced on knees. You haven't yet decided whom he favors—this baby with Lily's eyes and chin, but James' hair and cheeks. Everyone seems to talk at once, at meals like this, and for a moment you feel fiercely protective of everyone seated at the table: this is your home, in a sense, and no one on earth is more your family than they are.

After dinner, Lily takes Harry off for a bath and bedtime. The three of you sit for a while in the sitting room, laughing over the Cannons' last fiasco, and placing a small wager on their next game with the Catapults. When Lily returns, Sirius stands and announces he has to make it an early night. You're slightly puzzled when he shakes your hand gravely and shoots James a meaningful glance before he heads on out.

As you retake your seat, Lily and James turn to you, their faces somber, their hands clasped between them.

"Peter, we're all agreed. We're going to use the Fidelius Charm, and we'd be honored if you'd be our Secret Keeper."

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[info]sambethe
2008-06-09 06:59 pm UTC (link)
If you're honest, though, you'll have to admit that things just aren't the same. Despite the changes the baby brought, there are other things that have got in the way…weightier things…darker things.

I quite liked that line.


Enjoyed!

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[info]joanwilder
2008-06-18 04:25 pm UTC (link)
Thanks, I'm glad you liked it.

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[info]mancrave
2008-06-09 10:24 pm UTC (link)
ohh I really liked this, want to save Peter from himself though. great last line.

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[info]joanwilder
2008-06-18 04:26 pm UTC (link)
I've always wondered what went through his noggin.

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[info]secretsolitaire
2008-06-10 01:41 am UTC (link)
Oh, Peter. :-(

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[info]joanwilder
2008-06-18 04:26 pm UTC (link)
Yeah, my thoughts exactly.

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[info]opheliet
2008-06-10 02:48 am UTC (link)
Nooo! Oh this was wonderful but so heartbreaking. I could sense it coming the whole time, there was such a tense atmosphere present throughout the whole piece, sort of like a train wreck you have to watch. Fantastic job!

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[info]joanwilder
2008-06-18 04:27 pm UTC (link)
Yeah, I've always thought that Peter got swept up into something too big for him. And being weak and unused to standing on his own, he caved.

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[info]celandineb
2008-06-10 03:49 am UTC (link)
I liked how you managed to make it ambiguous whether it was Peter or Remus up until the end. Cleverly done.

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[info]joanwilder
2008-06-18 04:27 pm UTC (link)
That was my plan. :) Thanks for reading!

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[info]islandsmoke
2008-06-10 06:29 am UTC (link)
Very nice missing moment!

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[info]joanwilder
2008-06-18 04:28 pm UTC (link)
Thanks!

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[info]tripperfunster
2008-06-10 06:03 pm UTC (link)
Oh, this one gave me shivers.

DO NOT WANT!

Lovely stuff though!

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[info]joanwilder
2008-06-18 04:28 pm UTC (link)
I'm tempted to do a Peter characterization fic now, if only he didn't physically look like a rat. Thanks, tripp!

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[info]werewolfsfan
2008-06-10 06:34 pm UTC (link)
This is totally canon! And yet more sensitively written than anything Rowling has done of this generation!

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[info]joanwilder
2008-06-18 04:29 pm UTC (link)
Thanks, I had fun with it.

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[info]cho_malfoy
2008-06-10 08:22 pm UTC (link)
Ooh, I love the second-person POV you used; it made the story feel very intimate. And since it felt very intimate, it really brought across how much Peter really betrayed all of them, himself most of all.

Excellent work.

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[info]joanwilder
2008-06-18 04:30 pm UTC (link)
Thanks, that was my intention with the POV, one I'm not very fond of using.

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[info]mindabbles
2008-06-11 04:19 am UTC (link)
Very nicely done - the use of the second person was effective here, let us get into Peter's head. I like the understated, yet intense, quality of this.

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[info]joanwilder
2008-06-18 04:30 pm UTC (link)
Thanks so much. Second person is always a challenge for me, but this was short, so I 'survived'. :)

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[info]elizassecret
2008-06-11 05:51 am UTC (link)
Well done, I liked this peek into Peter's head.

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[info]joanwilder
2008-06-18 04:31 pm UTC (link)
Thanks, I'm pleased you liked it.

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[info]snegurochka_lee
2008-06-11 12:56 pm UTC (link)
Oh, that's wonderful! I totally thought it was Remus until about 3/4 through. What a shivering moment. *chilled* I love the banality of it, though: the dinner with old friends, the baby, the normalcy, in a way. And I love the image of James swirling his whisky glass, for some reason. :) Marvellous!

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[info]joanwilder
2008-06-18 04:31 pm UTC (link)
Thanks, Lee! That's whom I wanted readers to think it was, so yay!

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[info]innerslytherin
2008-06-11 04:36 pm UTC (link)
*weeps*

This is so wonderful. I just love it when second-person POV is used so perfectly and effectively, and you do a great job with it. And Peter! I love the introspection he feels, and the long history of their friendship that you draw in here. And the sense of protectiveness and family... This is wonderful. Absolutely wonderful.

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[info]joanwilder
2008-06-18 04:32 pm UTC (link)
Second person has its place, and this one was one of them, I though. I wanted to show that Peter knew exactly what he was destroying, and still did.

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[info]crooked
2008-06-11 11:51 pm UTC (link)
ooh this was chilling in the most awesome way! like Lee, i really thought it was Remus until a good way into the ficlet. fantastic job! especially with the 2nd person POV, as that's sometimes hard to make work. <3

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[info]joanwilder
2008-06-18 04:33 pm UTC (link)
Yeah, second person is hard for me. But I thought it would work best here. Thanks for reading.

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[info]elsane
2008-06-12 03:05 am UTC (link)
oh, Peter. Lovely job on conveying his self-justification.

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[info]joanwilder
2008-06-18 06:48 pm UTC (link)
Thanks. This is the first time I've really thought about Peter's defection.

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[info]geri_chan
2008-06-12 08:33 am UTC (link)
This was a sad and lovely ficlet. I wasn't sure at first whether it was Peter or Remus, although I guessed that it was probably Peter. It's a really good look into Peter's psyche--I found myself feeling sympathy for him, even as I knew how things were going to turn out.

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[info]joanwilder
2008-06-18 06:48 pm UTC (link)
It's tempting to me to do something else with Peter now. Thanks for reading.

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[info]magnetic_pole
2008-06-17 07:08 pm UTC (link)
Ah, fabulous! I love the acknowledgment that things are less easy then they seem. Enjoyed--and thanks so much for playing. I've had such fun reading all these ficlets! Maggie

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[info]joanwilder
2008-06-18 06:49 pm UTC (link)
Thanks to you too! This was fun to do. I'd never really considered what might've gone on in Peter's head before.

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[info]sophinisba
2008-06-20 02:15 pm UTC (link)
I enjoyed this a lot. It's difficult for me to understand Peter's motivations in canon but your version makes so much sense.

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[info]joanwilder
2008-06-22 08:29 am UTC (link)
I've never thought much beyond the 'traitor' angle, but I've been thinking it a bit more since writing this, and plan to delve a bit deeper. Thanks for commenting--I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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